Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的だが冗長で一貫性が低いです。文を簡潔にし、不要な繰り返しや「uh」を減らし、理由と具体例を論理的に結びつけるとよいでしょう。また語彙をやや広げて表現を自然にしてください。例えば“easy to prepare”や“healthy snack”などを使うと効果的です。

例: My favourite food is apples because they are sweet and healthy. They are easy to prepare—I can simply wash and slice one—and I often eat them as a quick snack between classes.

提案: 内容は良いですが文法と論理のつながりが不自然です。時制を過去形で統一し、理由（出身地）と感想（おいしかった）を明確に分けて述べてください。繰り返し語や不適切な表現（"I was very laughed"）を避け、代わりに感情表現を正しく使いましょう。

例: When I was a child I loved takoyaki. I was born in Osaka, so I ate it often at festivals and local shops, and I remember it was always very tasty and fun to eat.

提案: 質問の意図を取り違えているようです。季節による食習慣の違いについて答える必要があります。まず直接に“yes/no”で答え、その後季節ごとの具体例（旬の果物や行事食など）を述べ、寮の食事事情は補足として短く触れてください。言い淀みを減らし論理的に構成しましょう。

例: Not really. Because I live in a dormitory, the meals are usually the same throughout the year and I cannot choose much. Sometimes we get seasonal dishes, like summer fruits or New Year specials, but generally my diet does not change much by season.

提案: 意味が不明瞭な語句（"Nestle"や"like natural"）があり、伝えたい変化の理由があいまいです。好きな食べ物がどう変わったかを明確に述べ、具体的な例（以前はジャンクフード、今は果物や野菜など）と理由（健康のため、味の好みが変わった）を簡潔に説明してください。

例: Yes. As a child I used to avoid healthy foods and preferred sweets and packaged snacks. Recently I prefer natural foods like fresh fruits and vegetables because they taste better to me now and I feel healthier when I eat them.

× My favorite food is apple because it is very sweet and I can cut the apple.

✓ My favorite food is an apple because it is very sweet and I can cut it.

The noun 'apple' is countable and singular here, so it needs the indefinite article 'an'. Repeating 'apple' as a noun after the pronoun 'it' is redundant; use the pronoun 'it' to refer back to 'an apple'. Suggestion: use 'an apple' and replace the second 'the apple' with 'it' to make the sentence natural. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× However, uh, I cannot uh cook a lot, but it is easy to cook and eat the apple.

✓ However, I cannot cook much, but it is easy to cook and eat.

Use 'much' with uncountable idea of 'cook a lot' and remove the unnecessary 'the apple' (or replace with 'it' if referring back). Also remove filler 'uh' and keep present simple. Suggestion: say 'I cannot cook much' and end with 'but it is easy to cook and eat' or 'but it is easy to cook and eat an apple.' Grammar problem type ID: 2

× I like takoyaki when I was a child because actually I I was born in Osaka, so I ate takoyaki a lot.

✓ I liked takoyaki when I was a child because I was born in Osaka, so I ate takoyaki a lot.

The clause 'when I was a child' sets the timeframe in the past, so the verb 'like' must be in past tense 'liked' to match. Keep 'was born' and 'ate' in the past. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for actions in childhood. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So I was very laughed.

✓ So I laughed a lot.

'Was very laughed' is ungrammatical. 'Laugh' is an intransitive verb; to express frequent past action use 'laughed a lot' or 'I was very happy.' Determine intended meaning; likely 'laughed a lot.' Suggestion: use 'laughed a lot' or rephrase to 'I was very happy.' Grammar problem type ID: 26

× So it is very delicious.

✓ So it was very delicious.

Because the speaker is describing past experience ('when I was a child'), verb tense should be past: 'was very delicious.' Suggestion: keep past tense for descriptions of past experiences. Grammar problem type ID: 13},{