Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetitive phrases and small grammar mistakes (e.g., "mushrooms", "tomatoes", "sauce you like").

例: I like pizza the most. I enjoy it because I can choose toppings I love, such as mushrooms and tomatoes, and try different sauces. For example, I often combine tomato sauce with fresh basil for a simple, tasty meal.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and specific examples. Avoid unclear words and fillers. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "also") and correct vocabulary (e.g., "fast food", "fried chicken"). Keep it to 2–3 short sentences.

例: When I was young, I loved fast food. For example, I often ate fried chicken and french fries because they tasted good and were easy to get. I remember eating them mostly on weekends.

提案: Answer directly, then give a brief, specific explanation if needed. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like "normal time" or "come by the bunch."

例: Not really — my meals are fairly consistent: breakfast, lunch, and dinner. However, in summer I sometimes eat lighter meals like salads, while in winter I prefer hot soups and stews.

提案: Start with a clear statement about change, then give specific examples and reasons. Correct grammar (e.g., "it has changed a little", "I can eat spicier food") and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, it has changed a little. As I grew up I started enjoying spicier food and more vegetables, such as tomatoes and broccoli, because I learned to appreciate stronger flavors and healthier choices.

× I love it because I can mix the ingredients that I love such as the mushroom or tomato.

✓ I love it because I can mix ingredients that I like, such as mushrooms or tomatoes.

Use 'like' instead of 'love' for general preference; remove 'the' before plural nouns; use plural forms 'mushrooms' and 'tomatoes' when speaking generally. Also use commas to separate clauses.

× Anything is so fun when you can select the sauce that you like.

✓ It is so fun when you can choose the sauce you like.

'Anything' is inappropriate; use 'It' or 'Eating pizza' as subject. Use 'choose' instead of 'select' for natural spoken English. Omit 'that' is optional; 'you like' is sufficient.

× When I was a kid I loved the junk for 18 is like the fin 5 or something fine I really love and I eat the something fine in the oil like.

✓ When I was a kid I loved junk food, especially fried foods. I really liked things cooked in oil.

Original sentence is incoherent and has article/misc errors. Remove 'the' before uncountable 'junk food'. 'For 18 is like the fin 5' is unclear; interpret as 'especially' and simplify. Use 'fried foods' and 'cooked in oil' for clarity and correct noun forms.

× Friendship or friendship, or maybe the. Chicken fry.

✓ Maybe french fries or fried chicken.

Original has repeated word and fragmentary sentence. Correct to common food items 'french fries' and 'fried chicken'. Use proper noun forms and remove unnecessary articles.

× No, I normally eat food in the normal time like eat breakfast, lunch and dinner and I think it depends on my situation in the weekend and I stop that I will just. Come by the bunch and have dinner.

✓ No, I normally eat meals at regular times: breakfast, lunch and dinner. On weekends it depends on my plans; sometimes I just come by a friend's place and have dinner.

Use 'meals' and 'at regular times' for natural collocation. Fix verb forms and sentence fragments. 'Come by the bunch' is unclear; interpret as 'come by a friend's place'. Use present simple for habitual actions and present tense for general statements.

× I think it's have a little bit change for me when I grow up, I can eat more spicy than when I was a kid and I can eat more vegetable than than the price such as the tomato or broccoli.

✓ I think my tastes have changed a little as I grew up: I can eat spicier food now than when I was a kid, and I eat more vegetables such as tomatoes and broccoli.

Replace incorrect 'it's have' with 'my tastes have'. Use past 'grew up' or present perfect 'have changed' for life changes. Use 'spicier' comparative form. Use plural 'vegetables' and plural nouns 'tomatoes'. Remove redundant words and fix word order.

× I I can eat it more than.

✓ I can eat them more now.

Avoid repetition 'I I'. Clarify pronoun to 'them' referring to vegetables. Use 'more now' to indicate increased frequency or quantity. Ensure sentence is complete with subject and verb.