Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite food, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also correct vocabulary (e.g., 'paneer bhurji', 'rice with curry') and reduce hesitations.

例: My favourite food is Indian cuisine. For example, I often eat paneer bhurji with chapatis and rice with curry, and I also enjoy a Masala Baji burger from A&W because it combines spicy flavours and familiar textures.

提案: Avoid inappropriate or incorrect words ('drunk') and reduce fillers. Begin with a clear topic sentence about childhood preferences, then give specific reasons or examples with linking words. Use past tense consistently when talking about the past.

例: When I was young, I preferred homemade food. For example, I often ate rice with curry because it was tasty and a traditional dish in my family, so my parents cooked it almost every day.

提案: Be more fluent and complete your sentences. Start with a direct answer, then use linking words (for example, 'for instance' or 'also') to list specific dishes and occasions. Provide one brief reason for each example and avoid trailing off.

例: Yes, I do. For instance, during Lohri we eat saag and makki roti because they are traditional seasonal dishes, and at Diwali we prepare a variety of sweets and snacks to share with family and guests.

提案: Give a clear, direct response and avoid confusing expressions ('does not change with my eyes'). Use past and present tense correctly and provide a brief reason or example to support your answer. Reduce hesitation and correct dish names ('makki roti').

例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed much since I was a child. I still prefer homemade dishes such as rice with curry and saag with makki roti because they remind me of family meals and childhood traditions.

× To be honest, I like the Indian food.

✓ To be honest, I like Indian food.

Use of the definite article 'the' before national or cuisine names is incorrect here. 'Indian food' (no article) is the general, uncountable reference to that cuisine. Remove 'the' to be natural.

× My favorite burger is Masala Baji burger from A&W and I also like the paneer burji with the chapatis and rice rice with Curry.

✓ My favourite burger is the Masala Bhaji burger from A&W, and I also like paneer bhurji with chapatis and rice with curry.

Multiple issues: redundant word 'rice rice' and inconsistent article and capitalization. Use 'the' before a specific burger, correct spelling to 'Masala Bhaji'/'paneer bhurji', and use lowercase for generic dishes. Maintain parallel structure with 'and'.

× These are the Indian food.

✓ These are Indian foods.

Using 'the' and singular 'food' conflicts with 'these' (plural). For plural demonstrative 'these', use plural noun 'foods' and omit 'the' when speaking generally. Alternatively 'This is Indian food' could be used for general reference.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? -> To be honest, I preferred homemade food whenever I was drunk.

✓ To be honest, I preferred homemade food when I was young.

The student used 'whenever I was drunk', which is incorrect and likely a word choice error. The question asks about childhood, so use 'when I was young'. Also 'preferred' correctly past tense; ensure context matches the question.

× Umm, I always like Curry with rice because it's a tasty and, uh, traditional food of my country.

✓ I have always liked curry with rice because it's a tasty and traditional dish of my country.

Question asked about past liking; use present perfect 'have always liked' to connect past habit to present. 'Curry' and 'rice' should be lowercase; 'dish' is a better noun than 'food' here. Remove filler words.

× Yes, I do uh, we eat different, uh, foods at the different festivals.

✓ Yes, we eat different foods at festivals.

Remove 'I do' which is unnecessary and 'the' before 'different festivals' is incorrect when speaking generally. Use plural 'festivals' without 'the'.

× Umm, I eat saag and Maki jyoti at the festival of Lodi because it's a traditional dish of my family.

✓ I eat saag and makki ki roti at the festival of Lohri because they are traditional dishes of my family.

Correct dish names and spelling: 'makki ki roti' and festival 'Lohri'. Use plural 'they are' or 'these are' because two dishes are mentioned, and 'traditional dishes' plural. Also remove filler 'Umm'.

× Uh, at the festival of Diwali, we prepare sweets and snacks at home because.

✓ At Diwali, we prepare sweets and snacks at home.

Sentence was incomplete ending with 'because.' Remove the unfinished clause to make a complete sentence. Also 'At Diwali' is more natural than 'at the festival of Diwali'.

× To be honest, uh, my favorite food does not change with my eyes.

✓ To be honest, my favourite food has not changed.

Original phrase 'does not change with my eyes' is incorrect idiom and tense. Use present perfect 'has not changed' to indicate continuity from past to present. Remove filler.

× Umm. I liked the homemade food at my childhood days.

✓ I liked homemade food when I was a child.

'At my childhood days' is ungrammatical. Use 'when I was a child' or 'in my childhood'. Also 'homemade food' does not need 'the'.

× Right now, I also like the homemade food like rice with Curry and saag with makidi roti.

✓ Right now, I also like homemade food such as rice with curry and saag with makki ki roti.

Remove 'the' before uncountable 'homemade food'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples, lowercase 'curry', and correct 'makki ki roti'. Maintain consistent phrasing.