Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and unclear phrases. Also correct grammar (use present perfect or simple past appropriately) and phrasing (e.g., “I’ve eaten sushi since I was a child” and “there are many types such as salmon and tuna”).

例: I love sushi. I’ve eaten it since childhood, and I especially enjoy varieties like salmon and tuna. Because it’s a traditional Japanese dish, it reminds me of family meals and cultural celebrations.

提案: Use correct tense and more precise vocabulary. Begin with a direct topic sentence about the past (I liked…), then give one reason with linking words (because, so) and an example. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing like “I would I like” or “junkie foods.”

例: When I was young, I liked hamburgers and other fast foods. I enjoyed them because they tasted rich and gave me a quick energy boost after playing outside, so I often asked my parents to buy them.

提案: Answer the question directly about seasonal changes (different times of year). Use linking words (however, nowadays, in summer/winter) and specific examples of seasonal foods. Improve grammar (use present tense for habits) and remove fillers.

例: Yes. In summer I prefer lighter, cooler foods like salads and grilled fish, while in winter I eat more comforting dishes such as stews and baked pasta. However, nowadays I try to choose healthier options year-round.

提案: Be specific and grammatical. Start with a clear statement that your preferences changed, then contrast past and present with linking words (but, however, now). Correct unclear words (“license” is wrong) and give a reason for the change.

例: Yes, it has changed. I used to prefer pizza and pastries, but now I prefer Japanese dishes like sushi and grilled fish because I appreciate fresher, lighter flavors and healthier ingredients.

× My favorite food is sushi. I have eaten sushi from when I was a child and there were lots of various types of sushi including salmon, tuna, and in addition are uh.

✓ My favorite food is sushi. I have eaten sushi since I was a child, and there are many different types of sushi including salmon and tuna.

Errors: incorrect use of preposition 'from when' (should use 'since' for a continuing action), awkward phrase 'lots of various types' (use 'many different types'), extraneous words 'and in addition are uh' and punctuation. Suggestion: Use 'since' to indicate an action from a point in time continuing to the present; use 'many different types' for variety; remove filler words and keep the list parallel.

× Since it's traditional Japanese food, I can always remember the Japanese.

✓ Since it is traditional Japanese food, I can always remember Japan's food traditions.

Errors: vague and ungrammatical phrase 'remember the Japanese.' The sentence likely aims to express memory of Japanese culinary traditions. Suggestion: Clarify the object ('Japan's food traditions') and use full form 'it is' or 'it's'. Ensure the noun after 'remember' clearly refers to what is remembered.

× When I was young, I like hamburgers.

✓ When I was young, I liked hamburgers.

Error: tense mismatch. 'When I was young' sets a past time reference, so the verb must be past tense 'liked'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time expression.

× I would I like in junkie foods, including hamburgers because these foods are tasty and I always enjoy it when I got tired and it made me energize, but.

✓ I used to like junk food, including hamburgers, because these foods are tasty and I always enjoyed them when I was tired because they gave me energy.

Multiple errors: 'I would I like' is ungrammatical (sentence structure error); 'junkie foods' should be 'junk food' (word choice); verb tense inconsistency ('enjoy' vs past context); pronoun agreement ('it' should be 'them' referring to plural 'foods'); awkward phrase 'it made me energize' should be 'they gave me energy'. Suggestion: Simplify to 'used to like' for habitual past, keep pronouns consistent, and use clear collocations like 'gave me energy'.

× Yes, when I was young I like junk food including pizza and hamburgers.

✓ Yes, when I was young I liked junk food including pizza and hamburgers.

Error: tense mismatch—past time reference requires past tense 'liked'. Suggestion: Use past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was young'.

× However, listen to I like eating much healthier food including umm, salads or fishes.

✓ However, now I like eating much healthier foods, including salads and fish.

Errors: 'listen to I like' is ungrammatical filler; 'fishes' is incorrect in this context—use 'fish' as an uncountable noun; 'much healthier food' should be 'much healthier foods' or 'a much healthier diet'. Suggestion: Remove filler, use 'now' to contrast past and present, and use correct noun forms.

× These umm food diet.

✓ This is my current food diet.

Errors: fragment and wrong word order ('These umm food diet' is not a complete sentence). Suggestion: Make a full sentence such as 'This is my current diet' or 'This is my current food diet' and avoid filler 'umm'.

× Yes, it has changed.

✓ Yes, it has changed.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct in present perfect tense to indicate change from past to present.

× When I was young, I liked eating. Pizza or pastries, but when I got older I Li prefer eating license or other Japanese traditional food.

✓ When I was young, I liked eating pizza or pastries, but when I got older I preferred eating sushi or other traditional Japanese foods.

Errors: unnecessary period after 'eating'; 'Li prefer' is a typo and wrong tense—should be past tense 'preferred' to match 'when I got older'; 'license' is incorrect word—likely 'sushi'; 'Japanese traditional food' word order awkward and pluralization ('foods'). Suggestion: Correct punctuation, use past tense 'preferred' for the past time frame, replace incorrect word with 'sushi', and use 'traditional Japanese foods'.

× These food always demand.

✓ These foods are always in demand.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and word choice—'These food' should be 'These foods' (plural) and 'always demand' is wrong voice; you need passive 'are always in demand' to express popularity. Suggestion: Use 'are always in demand' or 'are always popular'.