Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific reason or example. Use linking words to connect ideas and limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is anything with matcha, especially matcha bubble tea. I have loved matcha since childhood because I enjoy its slightly bitter flavor, and I often try matcha cakes and ice cream when I find them.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, remove informal filler phrases, and explain briefly with a clear reason. Use a linking word like 'because' and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: When I was young I liked sweet foods such as cookies and candies. This was partly because my parents often forbade them, so I wanted them more and ate them whenever I could.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. State the pattern, then give a specific example with a linking phrase. Remove hesitations and repetition.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at certain times of the year. For example, during Lunar New Year my family always eats sour cabbage as a traditional dish, but we rarely have it at other times.

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear statement about change, then give one specific contrastive example using a linking word like 'however' or 'but'. Avoid stammering and repetition.

例: My favourite food hasn't changed much because I still prefer matcha and sweets. However, my tastes have broadened: for instance, I disliked coconut as a child but now I can tolerate its smell and occasionally enjoy coconut dishes.

× I would say matcha and boba tea. I don't know why but I am so into matcha when since I was a kid and I just can't help but like every different kind of matcha products like matcha bubble tea and matcha cake and everything which is included with matcha.

✓ I would say matcha and boba tea. I don't know why but I have been into matcha since I was a kid and I just can't help but like every kind of matcha product, like matcha bubble tea and matcha cake, and everything made with matcha.

Original uses incorrect combination 'when since' and awkward phrasing 'matcha products' plural agreement; 'have been into' uses present perfect to show a continuing state from the past to now; 'every kind of matcha product' is clearer and more natural; 'made with matcha' is a concise replacement for 'which is included with matcha'. Suggestions: remove redundant words ('when'), use present perfect for continuing states, use singular 'product' after 'every kind of', and use natural collocation 'made with'.

× I would say sweet food, for example, cookies and candies, because my parents used to prohibit me to eat this kind of food and you know, grass is always greener in the outside, so I just can't help but keep eating this kind of sweets.

✓ I would say sweet foods, for example, cookies and candy, because my parents used to forbid me from eating these kinds of food and, you know, the grass is always greener on the other side, so I just couldn't help eating these sweets.

Errors: incorrect verb + preposition ('prohibit me to eat' -> 'forbid me from eating'); wrong preposition in idiom ('in the outside' -> 'on the other side'); number and article issues ('this kind of sweets' -> 'these sweets' or 'this kind of sweet'). Corrections: use 'forbid ... from doing' or 'prohibit ... from doing'; use correct idiom 'the grass is always greener on the other side'; match demonstrative and plural ('these sweets'). Suggestions: learn verb-preposition patterns, fix idioms, and ensure agreement between demonstrative and noun number.

× Maybe I would say maybe some seasonal food or festival food in for festival. For example, I usually eat sour cabbage during Lunar New Year is kind of our family tradition to eat it, but we don't usually eat it except on that day.

✓ Maybe I would say seasonal foods or festival foods. For example, I usually eat sour cabbage during the Lunar New Year; it is kind of a family tradition to eat it, but we don't usually eat it except on that day.

Original is repetitive ('maybe' twice) and has incorrect preposition 'in for festival' and a run-on sentence 'during Lunar New Year is kind of...'. Corrections: remove redundancy, use plural 'foods' for general reference, include definite article 'the' before 'Lunar New Year', separate clauses with a semicolon or period, and add 'a' before 'family tradition'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, place articles correctly, and break long sentences into clear clauses.

× I don't think my favorite food change since I really like matcha and other sweet things now.

✓ I don't think my favorite food has changed since I really liked matcha and other sweet things as a child.

Original mixes present tense 'don't think' with base verb 'change' and unclear time reference. If referring to change since childhood, use present perfect 'has changed' to show change over time. Also clarify past preference 'liked' when referring to childhood. Alternatively, if speaker means no change up to now, use 'has changed' with 'have liked' depending on nuance. Suggestions: use present perfect for changes over time ('has changed') and keep time references consistent.

× For example, I don't like coconuts when I was a child, but now I I I wouldn't say I like it but I can accept that scent.

✓ For example, I didn't like coconuts when I was a child, but now I wouldn't say I like them, although I can tolerate the smell.

Errors: incorrect tense 'don't like ... when I was a child' should be past tense 'didn't like' for a past time; pronoun-antecedent number 'it' should be 'them' for 'coconuts' (plural) or 'it' for 'coconut' (singular); repetition 'I I I' is disfluent. 'Accept that scent' is awkward; 'tolerate the smell' is more natural. Suggestions: match verb tense to time expressions (use past tense for past times), ensure pronoun number agrees with noun, and avoid filler repetition; choose natural verbs like 'tolerate' or 'can stand' for smells.