Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid confusing pronouns ("him"). Improve vocabulary precision (e.g. "various sauces", "stir-fried noodles").

例: My favourite food is pasta with various sauces. However, my favourite cuisine is Asian because I enjoy dishes like fried rice and sushi. I also like Italian dishes such as spaghetti with tomato and basil sauce.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct grammar and word choice. Use linking words to connect reasons and give specific examples. Fix unclear phrases (e.g. "Was young" and "pretty bad" which contradicts context).

例: When I was young, I enjoyed traditional Austrian dishes, especially spinach dumplings. This was mainly because my grandmother cooked them often, and food always tasted better when she made it. I also liked pasta, particularly simple tomato or cheese sauces.

提案: Answer directly and tighten up repetition. Use clear linking phrases and slightly more precise vocabulary (e.g. "seasonal and local produce"). Mention one or two specific examples and a brief reason to show coherence.

例: Yes. For example, in October I eat a lot of pumpkin because we grow pumpkins in our garden. Generally, we try to eat seasonal and local produce; in summer we eat many fresh vegetables because it is harvest season.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence about whether it changed, then support with specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitation words ("umm") and redundancy. Use linking words like "because" and "for example".

例: Yes, my preferences have changed — I'm less picky than I used to be because I have tried many dishes from around the world. For example, trying sushi and Thai curries expanded my tastes, so I now enjoy a wider variety of foods.

× it's pasta with all kind of sauces.

✓ it's pasta with all kinds of sauces.

Use of quantifier 'all kind' is incorrect; plural 'kinds' is required after 'all' when referring to multiple types. Suggestion: use 'all kinds of' or 'all sorts of'.

× But if you would ask him what my favorite cuisine was, I would say Asian because I love just fried rice, sushi, fried noodles.

✓ But if you asked me what my favorite cuisine was, I would say Asian because I love fried rice, sushi, and fried noodles.

The original mixes conditional forms and an incorrect pronoun 'him' for the student. Use second conditional 'if you asked me' or 'if you were to ask me'. Also include 'and' in a list and remove unnecessary 'just'. Suggestion: keep conditional consistent and use correct pronoun for the speaker.

× I also really like Italian food.

✓ I also really like Italian food.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included here to indicate no error with third person singular.

× Was young.

✓ When I was young.

Fragment 'Was young.' lacks subject and auxiliary; correct complete clause needs subject 'I' and 'when' to indicate time. Suggestion: use 'When I was young' or 'I was young' depending on context.

× I really love traditional Austria food like spinach dumplings just because my grandma used to cook it for us a lot and I think everything tastes so much better when your granny cooks it for you.

✓ I really loved traditional Austrian food like spinach dumplings because my grandma used to cook it for us a lot, and I think everything tastes so much better when your granny cooks it for you.

Tense inconsistency: question asks about past preference, so use past 'loved' and adjective form 'Austrian' instead of 'Austria'. 'Just because' can be simplified to 'because'. Maintain past tense 'used to cook'. Suggestion: match past tense throughout when speaking about childhood.

× I also really loved pasta because it was pretty bad.

✓ I also really loved pasta because it was pretty cheap.

The original 'pretty bad' conflicts with 'loved'; likely wrong adjective. If meaning is positive, use 'cheap' or 'simple' depending on intent. If intent was to say it tasted bad, then 'but it was pretty bad' would make sense. Suggestion: clarify meaning; here 'cheap' fits if referring to affordability.

× So for example, in October, I eat a lot of pumpkin just because we grow pumpkin in our garden.

✓ So, for example, in October I eat a lot of pumpkin because we grow pumpkins in our garden.

Number agreement: 'pumpkin' should be plural 'pumpkins' when referring to many; remove unnecessary 'just'. Present tense 'eat' is acceptable for habitual actions. Suggestion: use plural with 'grow pumpkins'.

× And then we tried, we tried to eat very seasonal and regional.

✓ And then we tried to eat very seasonally and locally.

Adverbs needed: 'seasonal' and 'regional' are adjectives; modify verb 'eat' with adverbs 'seasonally' and 'locally'. Also remove repeated 'we tried'. Suggestion: use adverbs when modifying verbs and avoid repetition.

× For example, in the summer, we eat a lot of vegetables just because it's harvesting season.

✓ For example, in the summer we eat a lot of vegetables because it's harvest season.

Use noun phrase 'harvest season' rather than 'harvesting season' for naturalness. 'Eat' is fine as habitual present. Remove 'just because' for conciseness.

× I feel like I'm not a picky eater as it used to be just because I've tried a lot of new dishes from all over the world and that's why I think it changed.

✓ I feel like I'm not as picky an eater as I used to be because I've tried a lot of new dishes from all over the world, and that's why I think I changed.

Comparative structure incorrect: use 'not as picky an eater as I used to be'. Also 'it used to be' should be 'I used to be'. 'I changed' is clearer than 'it changed'. Suggestion: use correct comparative pattern 'not as ... as' and keep subject consistent.

× Umm, and I think that's normal.

✓ Umm, and I think that's normal.

Sentence is acceptable; present tense 'think' suits current opinion. No correction needed.

× But I'm really happy that I'm not a picky eater anymore.

✓ But I'm really happy that I'm not a picky eater anymore.

Sentence is grammatically correct and fits present state. No correction needed.