Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, um). Use correct possession and prepositions (e.g. my home key, key to my office). Keep it under 4–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I usually carry several keys. For example, I have a key to my flat, a key to my office, and a small locker key. I carry them together on a keyring so I don’t lose any.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence ('Yes, I have lost my keys before') and then give a brief, specific example with a time reference and result. Remove fillers and correct tense and phrasing (e.g. 'I had to get a replacement').

例: Yes, I have lost my keys before. For instance, last week I misplaced my house key and couldn’t find it, so I had to ask a friend to let me in and then order a replacement key.

提案: Answer directly ('Sometimes I do') and explain the reason with a clear, logical sentence. Use correct pronouns and avoid confusing phrasing. Give one specific habit change or precaution to show control over the problem.

例: Sometimes I do forget my keys because I often carry several bags and a key can get left in another bag. To avoid this, I now put my keys on a brightly colored lanyard so they are easier to spot.

提案: Provide a clear opinion and give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (because, however, for example). Avoid vague statements like 'no one can trust.' Offer a safer alternative to show balanced thinking.

例: I don't think it's a good idea to leave keys with a neighbour because it could be risky if they are unreliable. Instead, I prefer to leave a spare key in a secure lockbox or ask a close family member I trust to keep it.

× Yes, I always bring a lot of keys with you uh, because, uh, I have uh, a key of uh, my, uh, home and I need it away.

✓ Yes, I always bring a lot of keys with me, because I have a key to my home and I need it with me.

The speaker used 'you' instead of 'me' — incorrect pronoun for the subject 'I'. Also 'a key of my home' is incorrect preposition and noun phrase; correct is 'a key to my home'. 'Need it away' is ungrammatical; 'need it with me' correctly expresses possession when going out. Suggestion: use object pronouns that match the subject (I -> me) and the preposition 'to' for keys belonging to places.

× So, so I have a key over the of my office and uh, it's uh, necessary to bring it uh, also, uh, I.

✓ I also have a key to my office, and it's necessary to bring it.

'A key over the of my office' is incorrect preposition and word order. Use 'a key to my office'. The trailing 'I' is incomplete; restructure to a complete sentence. Suggestion: place 'also' before the verb or after the subject: 'I also have...' and end with a verb phrase 'bring it'.

× Unfortunately, I uh, some time, uh, lost, uh, my keys, uh, and uh yeah, in the last week or so, I have uh, this kind of experience.

✓ Unfortunately, I sometimes lost my keys, and in the last week or so I had this kind of experience.

The speaker mixed simple past and present perfect incorrectly. 'Some time' should be 'sometimes' for frequency or 'at some time' for one occasion. 'Have this kind of experience' should be past ('had') when referring to a past week. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events: 'I sometimes lost' or better 'I have sometimes lost' if describing recurring past experiences; for a specific recent period use 'I had'.

× I have lost uh, my key and I can't find it and I do another one.

✓ I lost my key and couldn't find it, so I got another one.

The original mixes present perfect ('have lost') with present tense 'can't find' and the incorrect 'I do another one'. For a completed past event, use simple past: 'lost' and 'couldn't find'. 'I do another one' is incorrect; use 'I got another one' or 'I made another key'. Suggestion: match tense and use appropriate verbs for obtaining a replacement.

× Sometimes I forget the keys and lock yourself myself out, uh, because uh, I have many bags, uh, and uh, sometimes one key, maybe keep another bag and uh, when I go uh, at work, uh, I maybe bring another one back and umm, my.

✓ Sometimes I forget the keys and lock myself out because I have many bags, and sometimes one key may be kept in another bag; when I go to work I may bring another one back.

The speaker used 'yourself' instead of 'myself' and had unclear clause structure. 'Lock yourself myself out' is redundant and incorrect pronoun. 'Keep another bag' should be 'kept in another bag'. 'Go at work' should be 'go to work'. Suggestion: use consistent first-person pronouns and standard prepositions ('to work'), and break into clearer clauses.

× No, I think it's not a good idea to leave your keys with a neighbor because, uh, I think, uh, it's uh, not secure.

✓ No, I don't think it's a good idea to leave your keys with a neighbor because I think it's not secure.

Switching between 'your' and 'I' is inconsistent in a personal response. Use 'your' when giving general advice, or 'my'/'I' when giving personal opinion. Here a consistent structure is 'I don't think it's a good idea...'. Suggestion: maintain consistent perspective in pronoun use.

× Uh, everyone, uh, has in our, uh, home, uh, some freshest things.

✓ People in our home have some valuable or fresh items.

The phrase 'some freshest things' is ungrammatical: 'freshest' is a superlative and needs a comparison context, and word order 'has in our home' is awkward. 'Everyone has in our home' mismatches subject and location. Suggestion: say 'People in our home have valuable things' or 'There are some valuable items in our home' (which would be a 'there be' correction if used). Use correct adjective forms like 'valuable' or 'fresh' not 'freshest' without context.

× Uh, so I, I think, uh, in today's, uh, no one can trust even.

✓ So I think that nowadays you cannot trust anyone.

The original is incomplete and misorders words: 'in today's' should be 'nowadays' or 'in today's world', and 'no one can trust even' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'nowadays' and standard negative structure 'cannot trust anyone' for clarity.