Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and word choice, and add one brief reason with a linking word. Avoid unclear phrasing like “use the footprint”.

例: No, I don't carry many keys. These days my phone or fingerprint unlocks most doors, so I only carry one or two keys for rare situations.

提案: Provide a clearer, coherent account with correct grammar and sequence words. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific time and circumstance using linking words (e.g., "once," "when").

例: Yes, I have. For example, last year when I was cycling back to my college dormitory I dropped my dorm key and only noticed later that I had lost it on the bike lane.

提案: Avoid fillers and repetition; use correct modal forms and tidy sentence structure. Answer directly, then give a typical consequence and one specific detail using a linking word like "so" or "then".

例: Yes, it happens sometimes, especially in my college dormitory. When I forget my key, I usually knock and ask a roommate to let me in, so I rarely have to wait long.

提案: Make your opinion clear and support it with concise, logical reasons. Use linking words such as "but" and "however" correctly, and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "trustworthy neighbour").

例: Yes, it can be a good idea, but only if the neighbour is trustworthy. If you trust them and have discussed how they'll keep the keys safe, leaving a spare key can be convenient; otherwise it's better not to.

× 'I would say no, actually I didn't have a large amount of keys.'

✓ 'I would say no; actually I didn't have a large number of keys.'

'Keys' is countable so use 'a large number of' rather than 'a large amount of'. Also use past simple 'didn't have' is okay if referring to a past time; punctuation improved.'

× 'Nowadays we really use the footprint rather than keys, so I didn't.'

✓ 'Nowadays we really use a fingerprint rather than keys, so I don't.'

'Footprint' is incorrect for biometric access; 'fingerprint' is the correct noun. Also the contrast with 'nowadays' requires present tense 'I don't' rather than past 'I didn't'.'

× 'Yes I have, my college dormitories uses key to open the door and everyone was equipped with one just last year.'

✓ 'Yes I have. My college dormitory uses a key to open the door and everyone was equipped with one last year.'

'Dormitories' (plural) should match singular verb 'uses' if referring to one dormitory; choose singular 'dormitory' or change verb to 'use'. Also 'key' is countable and needs the article 'a'. 'Just' before 'last year' is unnecessary; 'last year' is sufficient.'

× 'I have lost it during bike lane.'

✓ 'I lost it while cycling on the bike lane.'

'During' is used with nouns (during the meeting); for an action use 'while'. Also 'I have lost' is present perfect which doesn't fit the specific past time—use simple past 'I lost'. 'Bike lane' needs a preposition and verb form 'cycling on the bike lane' to be natural.'

× 'Yes, especially in the college dormitories.'

✓ 'Yes, especially in the college dormitory.'

If the speaker refers to their own dormitory, use singular 'the college dormitory'. If speaking generally about dormitories, keep plural but adjust context; articles must match intended meaning.'

× 'Uh, I really forgot that and I should knock the door to to let my dorm mates to help me open the door.'

✓ 'Uh, I really forget that and I have to knock on the door to get my dorm mates to help me open it.'

'Forgot' (past) conflicts with general habit; use present 'forget'. Use 'have to' or 'should' consistently; 'knock on the door' is the correct phrase and remove duplicate 'to'. 'Let' is not appropriate for requesting help; 'get my dorm mates to help me' is natural. Use 'it' for the door.'

× 'That really happens.'

✓ 'That really happens.'

'That really happens' is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. (Included for completeness.)'

× 'I never thought of that but I think you should give the neighbor you trust in rather than casual one.'

✓ 'I never thought of that, but I think you should give it to a neighbor you trust rather than to a casual one.'

'Give the neighbor you trust in' is ungrammatical. Use 'give it to a neighbor you trust' and include the article 'a' before 'casual one'. Also add commas for clarity.'

× 'If you guarantee the safety, it's a good idea.'

✓ 'If you can guarantee its safety, it's a good idea.'

'Guarantee the safety' needs an object: 'its safety' refers to the key. Also add modal 'can' to express ability/condition.'

× 'Otherwise you should think twice before you do that.'

✓ 'Otherwise you should think twice before doing that.'

'Think twice before you do that' is understandable but 'before doing that' is more natural and avoids repeating 'do'.'