Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，但开头的“work a lot”应为“walk a lot”，而且两个分句之间缺少连接词和标点。建议先直接回答，再说明步行的频率、目的和效果；“daily working”表达不自然，应改为“walking every day”。

例: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I usually walk to a nearby coffee shop every morning, and this daily routine helps me stay healthy and energetic.

提案: 回答方向正确，但语法错误和自我修正较多，影响流畅度。例如“school schedules”应为“school schedule”，“I only have”应使用过去时“I only had”，“P classes”含义不清，可能想表达“PE classes”；“at least weekend”应改为“at least once a weekend”。建议删去不相关或不清楚的内容，并用过去时完整说明原因和频率。

例: Not really. I had a busy school schedule and only had two PE classes a week, so I rarely went for walks. I usually stayed indoors after school, although I sometimes walked around my neighborhood at the weekend.

提案: 回答提供了原因，结构也比较清楚，但“earlier busy lives”不自然，应改为“a busy day”或“their busy lives”；“use bars to kick feed”意义不清，可能想表达“use parks to keep fit”。建议使用准确的动词和搭配，并补充一个具体活动作为例子。

例: People like walking in parks because it helps them clear their minds after a busy day. In addition, the fresh air and greenery can improve their mood. Some people also walk or jog there to keep fit.

提案: 回答切题，观点和细节都比较充分，使用了“would let me”和“could”等结构，整体连贯。需要改进的是“trees whining”搭配错误，树木通常用“swaying”或“rustling”；句首“And”可以与前句合并，使表达更自然。还可以说明选择森林的具体原因，例如远离城市噪音。

例: I would love to take a long walk through a quiet forest. I could breathe in the crisp, fresh air and relax away from the noise of the city. I would also enjoy listening to music and watching the trees sway in the wind.

提案: 回答包含地点和经历，但有多处词汇及语法问题，影响清晰度。“upfrontly”不适合描述居民当时的态度；“photos that include”应使用过去时“photos that included”；“the left layer”应为“I left the area quickly”。建议按“地点—发生了什么—感受—结果”的顺序叙述，并使用“concerned about their privacy”等自然表达。

例: I recently went for a walk in Beverly Hills. I took a few photos that included some houses, but several residents approached me because they were concerned about their privacy. I felt uncomfortable, so I apologized and left the area quickly.

× Yes, I work a lot I usually go to a nearby coffee shop every morning and daily working has helped me stay healthier and more energetic.

✓ Yes, I work a lot. I usually go to a nearby coffee shop every morning, and working daily has helped me stay healthier and more energetic.

原句把两个完整句子直接连接在一起，形成连句错误。应使用句号分开，或使用逗号加并列连词连接。

× Yes, I work a lot I usually go to a nearby coffee shop every morning and daily working has helped me stay healthier and more energetic.

✓ Yes, I work a lot. I usually go to a nearby coffee shop every morning, and working daily has helped me stay healthier and more energetic.

“daily working”中的动名词短语排列不自然。这里应使用“working daily”，表示“每天工作”。

× Not really, we had a very busy school schedules and a few organised activities.

✓ Not really, we had a very busy school schedule and a few organised activities.

“a”后面必须接单数可数名词，因此“schedules”应改为单数形式“schedule”。

× I only have two P classes each week.

✓ I only had two PE classes each week.

问题询问童年时期的情况，叙述过去的习惯时应使用一般过去时。“have”应改为“had”。

× I usually it's that I usually work around the neighborhood at least weekend.

✓ I usually walked around the neighborhood at least once a weekend.

原句包含重复和不完整的结构，如“I usually it's that I usually”。应删除重复部分，并重新组织为完整句子。

× I usually it's that I usually work around the neighborhood at least weekend.

✓ I usually walked around the neighborhood at least once a weekend.

上下文是在谈论童年时期的活动，因此“work”应使用过去式“walked”。这里根据语境将活动表达为“walked around”。

× I usually it's that I usually work around the neighborhood at least weekend.

✓ I usually walked around the neighborhood at least once a weekend.

表示“每周至少一次”时，不能直接说“at least weekend”。应使用“at least once a weekend”或“at least once every weekend”。

× Many other people also use bars to kick feed by jogging.

✓ Many other people also use parks to keep fit by jogging.

原句中的“kick feed”不能构成正确的英语动词短语，导致句子结构和意思不清楚。表达“通过慢跑来保持健康”应使用“keep fit”。同时，结合上下文，“bars”应为“parks”。

× The residents there seemed quite upfrontly because I took some photos that include their houses.

✓ The residents there seemed quite unfriendly because I took some photos that included their houses.

“seemed”是系动词，后面通常接形容词，而不是副词。“upfrontly”不能正确表达居民的态度；这里应使用形容词“unfriendly”。此外，照片已经拍摄完成，因此“include”改为过去式“included”更符合语境。

× They confronted me about privacy concerns so I felt uncomfortable and the left layer quickly.

✓ They confronted me about privacy concerns, so I felt uncomfortable and left the area quickly.

原句中的“the left layer”不能构成正确的句子结构。“left”前不需要使用“the”，并且“layer”不是这里正确的名词。应改为“left the area”，表示“离开了那个地方”。同时，在“so”前加逗号可以清楚地连接两个完整分句。