Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct short answer then expand with a clear reason and a specific detail. Avoid grammar mistakes (use correct tense/adverbs) and keep to 2–3 concise sentences. Use a linking phrase when adding detail.

例: Yes, I do. I usually walk in the evenings after work because it helps me relax and get some exercise. For example, I walk for about 30 minutes around my neighbourhood three times a week.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and redundant phrases; use correct comparative wording.

例: Not really — as a child I preferred playing in parks and playgrounds rather than going for walks. For instance, I spent afternoons on swings and playing games with friends at the local park.

提案: Provide a structured answer: give 2–3 clear reasons with linking words and specific examples. Use correct articles and plural/singular forms and avoid repeating phrases like 'maybe'.

例: People like walking in parks for several reasons. First, parks offer fresh air and a pleasant atmosphere for relaxing; second, they provide opportunities to meet friends or encounter new people. For example, many people join walking groups or stop to chat on benches.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, then add a specific reason and one detail about the place. Check factual accuracy (Central Park is in New York) and use varied vocabulary rather than repeating 'very'.

例: I would choose Hyde Park in London because it is spacious and has scenic paths along the Serpentine. I would enjoy a long walk there in the morning to see the gardens and perhaps stop at a café afterwards.

提案: Give a direct answer about the most recent walk and include specific details (when, where, how long). Use correct phrasing (e.g., 'treadmill' not 'truck') and smoother linking words.

例: I haven't had many opportunities to walk outside recently, so my last walk was on a treadmill at the gym last week for 40 minutes. I enjoyed it, although I prefer walking outdoors when I can.

× I work usually at evenings.

✓ I usually work in the evenings.

Adverb placement: 'usually' should come before the main verb 'work'. Preposition: use 'in the evenings' to refer to general times of day. Suggestion: place adverbs of frequency before the main verb and use 'in' for parts of the day. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Phrase choice: 'for a walk' is the correct collocation in English. The tense 'did...go' is correct for past habit; only preposition/object phrase needed correction. Suggestion: use 'go for a walk' when talking about taking a walk. Grammar problem type ID:5

× When I was a child, I remember that playing in general, in parks or in the playing area somewhere UMM is more familiar for me more than walking in general.

✓ When I was a child, I remember that playing in parks or playgrounds was more familiar to me than walking.

Multiple problems: incorrect word order and awkward phrasing. Use past tense 'was' for past memory. 'Playing in parks or playgrounds' is clearer than 'the playing area somewhere'. 'More familiar to me than walking' is correct comparison structure. Suggestion: simplify and use clear nouns (playground) and past tense verbs for childhood memories. Grammar problem type ID:26

× It's comfortable area and it's outdoors, so you get a fresh air and maybe you can meet your friends or maybe you can no new people and introduce yourself for them so you make new friends.

✓ It's a comfortable area and it's outdoors, so you get fresh air and maybe you can meet your friends or meet new people and introduce yourself to them, so you can make new friends.

Article: 'a comfortable area' requires 'a'. 'Fresh air' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Word choice: 'meet new people' not 'no new people'. Preposition: 'introduce yourself to them' is correct. Also simplify repeated 'maybe'. Suggestion: use 'a' for singular countable nouns, omit 'a' before uncountable nouns, and use correct prepositions for 'introduce'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I have never been in London in general, so I know that there's the Central Park and it's very big and it's very nice and it's so beautiful.

✓ I have never been to London, so I know there is Hyde Park and it is very large and beautiful.

Preposition: use 'been to' for visiting cities. Article: do not use 'the' before 'Central Park' unless specifying a particular park; also London does not have a 'Central Park'—Hyde Park is appropriate. Use concise adjectives: 'large and beautiful'. Suggestion: use 'been to' for visits and use correct place names. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So I think if I want to take a long walk by myself or with someone, I will choose Central Park in London.

✓ So I think if I had the chance to take a long walk by myself or with someone, I would choose Hyde Park in London.

Conditional form: the question asked a hypothetical 'Where would you like... if you had the chance?' Use second conditional: 'If I had the chance... I would choose'. Also use correct park name (Hyde Park). Suggestion: use 'would' + base verb for hypothetical present/future situations. Grammar problem type ID:7

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

Word choice: 'lately' and 'recently' are similar, but 'recently' is more natural with past simple 'did you go'. 'Lately' is more common with present perfect. Suggestion: match time adverb to tense: use 'recently' with simple past questions about specific past events. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Actually I had not an opportunity to walk outside so my last walk was at the gym on a indoor truck.

✓ Actually I did not have an opportunity to walk outside, so my last walk was at the gym on an indoor track.

Negative past simple: use 'did not have' rather than 'had not' in this conversational context. Article: 'an indoor track' uses 'an' before vowel sound. Word: 'track' not 'truck'. Suggestion: use 'did not' for simple past negation and check spelling of similar-sounding words. Grammar problem type ID:5

× So it was good and I actually prefer the outside area to work, but it's better than nothing.

✓ So it was good, and I actually prefer working outdoors, but it's better than nothing.

Verb form: use 'prefer working outdoors' or 'prefer the outdoors' rather than 'prefer the outside area to work'. Word order: 'working outdoors' is natural. Suggestion: use gerund after 'prefer' when describing activities and 'outdoors' as the adverb/adjective for outside environment. Grammar problem type ID:26