Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tenses and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two supporting details with linking words, and keep responses concise (max 3–4 sentences). Correct grammar (e.g., "it depends", past vs. present) and remove filler sounds (uh).

例: Yes, I walk a lot when I am at school because I move between classes and activities. For example, I often reach around 10,000 steps in a day. However, I walk much less on weekends when I stay at home.

提案: Use consistent past tense and more natural phrases. Provide a clear topic sentence, then add a specific detail or short example with linking words. Replace awkward phrases ("take some oxygen") with natural expressions like "get fresh air".

例: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child because my mother and I enjoyed exploring parks. For instance, we would bring a camera to take pictures of flowers and to get fresh air in the gardens.

提案: Give a clear, structured opinion and support it with two concise reasons using linking words (for example, "because", "also"). Avoid fillers and correct phrasing ("meet new friends who also like walking").

例: In my opinion, people like walking in parks because it is a social activity where they can meet new friends who also enjoy walking. Also, parks offer a pleasant environment and fresh air, which makes exercise more enjoyable.

提案: Produce a clear conditional sentence and state a specific destination with reasons. Use correct conditional form ("If I had the chance, I would...") and avoid unclear phrases. Give one or two specific reasons or examples.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the Great Wall of China because it offers stunning views and a unique historical experience. I would enjoy seeing landscapes and places that are different from my hometown.

提案: Answer directly in past tense and be specific about time and place. Use linking words to explain reasons and describe what you did. Correct grammar ("I usually walk in the shopping mall", "it had a festival") and avoid short, abrupt endings.

例: Lately I went for a walk in the shopping mall because there was a festival. I walked around the decorated areas and shopped with a friend, which made the visit enjoyable.

× Uh, it depend on where I was.

✓ Uh, it depends on where I am.

Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency: 'it' requires third-person singular verb 'depends' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 2 overlap, but choose Present tense issue ID 6). Also the context question is general (Do you walk a lot?), so present tense 'am' is appropriate instead of past 'was'. Suggestion: use 'it depends on where I am' for present habitual situations.

× If I was in the school and I usually walk a lot like 10,000 steps in one day.

✓ If I am at school, I usually walk a lot, about 10,000 steps in one day.

Incorrect tense and preposition plus sentence structure: use present conditional 'If I am' to match habitual action; use preposition 'at school' instead of 'in the school'; add commas and 'about' for clarity. This fixes tense consistency and improves sentence flow (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 11).

× But if uh, if we gain a uh, walk, not walk a lot.

✓ But if we go somewhere by car, we do not walk much.

Vague and incorrect word choice ('gain a walk') and sentence structure: 'gain a walk' is incorrect; clarify intended meaning. Use 'go somewhere by car' or another clear phrase; use 'do not walk much' for negative present habitual. This addresses word choice and sentence structure issues (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× Yes, I often walk outside when I was young with my camera and my mum.

✓ Yes, I often walked outside when I was young with my camera and my mum.

Tense consistency: describing past habitual actions requires past tense 'walked' not present 'walk' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). Keep 'was young' and change verb to past simple.

× We like to see new viewing and walk, garden and take some oxygen.

✓ We liked to see new sights, walk in gardens, and get some fresh air.

Word choice and collocation errors: 'new viewing' is not natural—use 'new sights'; 'walk, garden' should be 'walk in gardens'; 'take some oxygen' is unnatural—use 'get some fresh air'. Also change to past tense for past habitual action. This addresses incorrect use of adjectives/nouns and sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 26).

× In my opinion, uh, people like to walk in the park because they can meet their new friend that who like to walk to and they can hang out with them and yes.

✓ In my opinion, people like to walk in the park because they can meet new friends who also like walking, and they can hang out together.

Pronoun and relative clause errors: 'their new friend that who like to walk to' mixes pronouns and relative pronouns incorrectly. Use 'new friends who also like walking' and 'hang out together' for clarity and grammatical correctness. Also adjust plural agreement. This fixes pronoun misuse and sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type ID 12 and 26).

× Well, if I had sent to should we want to learn walk the places in China?

✓ Well, if I had the chance, I would like to walk in places in China.

Unclear and incorrect conditional structure and word choice: original is unintelligible ('had sent to should we want to learn walk'). Use a standard second conditional or past unreal structure: 'If I had the chance, I would like to walk...' This corrects sentence structure and tense (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 7).

× Yeah, because it's so huge condition.

✓ Yeah, because it is so huge.

Wrong noun choice: 'condition' is unnecessary and ungrammatical here. Use simple adjective phrase 'so huge' or more natural 'so large' to describe the country. This fixes incorrect adjective/noun usage (Grammar Problem Type ID 13).

× I can walk to see a new thing that my country doesn't have it.

✓ I can walk to see things that my country doesn't have.

Redundant pronoun and awkward phrasing: drop the extra 'it' and use plural 'things' or 'new things' for generality. Use 'see things that my country doesn't have' for natural expression. This addresses sentence structure and redundancy (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× The way I usually walk in shopping mall because it's have a festival and I like to shopping with my friend that's it.

✓ Lately I usually walk in the shopping mall because it has a festival, and I like shopping with my friend.

Tense and verb errors: use present simple 'I usually walk' or 'Lately I usually walk'; 'it's have' should be 'it has'; 'like to shopping' should be 'like shopping' or 'like to shop'. Also add articles 'the' or 'a' as needed. This fixes present tense and verb usage (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 11).