Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 発音の曖昧さや繰り返し、不要な詰まり（

例: To be honest, I don't walk much now, but I used to walk more two years ago.

提案: 文法ミス（'preferred to playing'）と不要なフィラーが多い点を改善してください。答えは直接で明確にし、具体例を一つ加えると良いです。

例: Yes, I did. As a child I preferred playing outside with my friends, especially exploring the nearby woods after school.

提案: 表現が冗長で語順や構文が不自然です。理由を一つか二つに絞り、接続詞（because, so）を使って論理を明確にしてください。

例: People like walking in parks because green spaces are relaxing and reduce stress, and the fresh air and quiet also help them unwind.

提案: 語彙の誤用（'work around the city'→'walk'）と繰り返しが多いです。1文目で直接答え、その後理由を具体的に示してください。

例: I'd like to take a long walk around the city to see the skyscrapers and watch people working in busy streets and cafés.

提案: 発音や語の選択が不明瞭（'Allegra', 'MMM'）で、情報を整理して短く明確に答える必要があります。過去の出来事は過去形で簡潔に述べ、場所の具体性を加えてください。

例: Lately I walked around my neighborhood. I live in a coastal area, so I often walk along the seaside road near my house.

× To be honest, I, I don't uh, exercise Allegra working, but uh, two years until two years, two years ago.

✓ To be honest, I don't exercise regularly, but I did for two years until two years ago.

The original sentence has disfluent fragments and incorrect word choice ('Allegra' likely intended 'regularly' and 'working' is unnecessary). The tense and time phrase were unclear: 'two years until two years ago' is redundant. Use a clear past duration expression: 'I did for two years until two years ago.' Improve fluency by removing fillers and repeating words. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Generally, yes. Umm, when I was a child, uh, I, I preferred to playing outside, uh, with my friend.

✓ Generally, yes. When I was a child, I preferred to play outside with my friend.

After 'preferred' the base verb (infinitive without 'to' or 'to' + verb) should be used; both 'preferred to play' or 'preferred playing' are acceptable, but 'preferred to playing' is incorrect. Remove fillers and extra commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× It seems that many people feel comfortable in green places and, uh, in the surrounding, uh, by surrounded by, uh, green people can reduce their stress.

✓ It seems that many people feel comfortable in green places and their surroundings; being surrounded by greenery can reduce stress.

Preposition and noun usage is confused: 'in the surrounding' should be 'in their surroundings' and 'by surrounded by green people' is incorrect. Use 'being surrounded by greenery' or 'by green spaces' to convey the idea. Also simplify sentence structure to avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Well, it's very interesting question. Uh, I would like to work around the city because I, uh, I, I love, uh, skyscraper and uh, so I, I love to see the people, uh, work working.

✓ Well, that's a very interesting question. I would like to walk around the city because I love skyscrapers and I like to see people working.

Article and noun number errors: 'very interesting question' needs 'that's a' for naturalness. 'Work around the city' should be 'walk around the city' given the context. 'Skyscraper' should be plural 'skyscrapers'. 'See the people work' or 'see people working' are correct; 'see the people, work working' is ungrammatical. Use correct noun plurality and verb forms. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× As I mentioned, I didn't do Allegra exercise. It's a bad MMM, yeah, I, I worked around my house. I live in the marine area, so I, I walked.

✓ As I mentioned, I didn't do regular exercise. It's bad, but I walked around my house. I live in a coastal area, so I walked.

Misused words and tense consistency: 'Allegra' should be 'regular', and 'didn't do regular exercise' is correct past negative. 'It's a bad MMM' is unclear; replace with 'It's bad'. Use past tense 'walked' to match 'didn't' and the context of 'lately' if referring to recent past. 'Marine area' is odd; 'coastal area' or 'near the sea' is more natural. Ensure consistent tense and clearer vocabulary. Grammar problem type ID: 5