Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, avoid repetition and minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details with linking words. Correct verb choices (walk, not work) and remove repeated phrases.

例: Yes, I walk quite often. I try to walk most days to stay fit, but when I am very busy I sometimes miss my walks. However, on free days I usually go for a 30–40 minute walk to relax and exercise.

提案: Be specific and avoid unclear phrases. Use correct verbs and vocabulary (e.g., 'playing games' instead of 'praying tickets'). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition'.

例: Yes, I often walked in my local park as a child, usually with my parents or grandparents. In addition to walking, I liked cycling and playing games with friends, which made outdoor time very enjoyable. I still enjoy walking now.

提案: Avoid garbled phrases and be clear. Begin with a simple reason, then add two specific supporting points with linking words. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'relax', 'reduce stress', 'socialize').

例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduce stress. Also, parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery, which refresh the mind. In addition, parks are good places to meet or chat with others, so they support socializing.

提案: Answer directly naming a place you would choose, then explain why with concise reasons. Avoid contradictory statements (saying it's tiring but you would take it) without clarification. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

例: I would like to take a long walk along a coastal path by the sea because the views would be calming and the fresh air invigorating. In addition, a long walk there would be excellent exercise and good for my mental well-being.

提案: Be precise and correct collocations (e.g., 'walk along the riverside' or 'visit the riverside'). Start with a clear topic sentence saying where and when, then add brief specific effects or feelings using linking words like 'and' or 'so'.

例: Yesterday I went for an evening walk along the riverside in my city. It was very relaxing after a hectic day, and the fresh air and scenery helped me clear my mind and feel physically refreshed.

× But I try to work a lot, but when I'm busy I'm not able to quite achieve this goal.

✓ But I try to walk a lot, although when I'm busy I'm not quite able to achieve this goal.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk', which is a lexical error related to meaning rather than grammar; however the sentence also has awkward connectors. Correct verb 'walk' fits the question context (Do you walk a lot?). Replace the second 'but' with 'although' and move 'quite' before 'able' to make natural present-tense phrasing and improve fluency. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, certainly when I was a child I often used to go out for a walk in my neighborhood park, maybe with my parents or grandparents, and I used to perform a lot of activities besides walking as well, such like cycling or praying tickets.

✓ Yes, certainly when I was a child I often used to go out for a walk in my neighborhood park, maybe with my parents or grandparents, and I used to do a lot of activities besides walking as well, such as cycling or playing cricket.

Several problems: 'perform' is wrong collocation for common childhood activities — use 'do'. 'Such like' is nonstandard; use 'such as'. 'Praying tickets' is nonsensical; likely intended 'playing cricket'. Keep past habitual 'used to' which correctly expresses past repeated actions. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× And I also tend to go for walk presently.

✓ And I also tend to go for walks at present.

Use plural 'walks' for habitual action (singular vs plural) and 'at present' is the correct phrase for 'currently'. 'Go for walk' lacks an article or plural; 'go for walks' is natural for routines. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× R10 dot walking in box help speakers to relax and axe.

✓ Walking in parks helps people to relax and unwind.

The original contains nonstandard fragments and possible speech-to-text errors ('R10 dot', 'box', 'axe'). Reconstruct to a coherent present-tense general statement: use third person singular 'helps' with singular subject 'walking' and choose correct verbs 'relax' and 'unwind'. Also replace 'speakers' with 'people'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× It acts as an escape from stresses and realities of the modern world.

✓ It acts as an escape from the stresses and realities of the modern world.

When referring to specific concepts like 'stresses and realities of the modern world', use the definite article 'the' to indicate particular stresses and realities shared by people. This makes the noun phrase natural and specific. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× So people tend to walk there to refresh their mind and maybe socialize with similar people like them.

✓ So people tend to walk there to refresh their minds and maybe socialize with similar people.

Use plural 'their minds' to agree with plural subject 'people' (pronoun-number agreement). 'Socialize with similar people like them' is redundant; 'similar people' is sufficient. Remove 'like them' to avoid awkward repetition. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× If I had the free time available to go for a long walk, I would definitely take it because I do think that my long walks can be quite tiring.

✓ If I had the free time to go for a long walk, I would definitely take it because I think long walks can be quite tiring.

This is a second conditional structure (If I had... I would...), which is correct. Improve wording by removing 'available' (unnecessary) and 'do think' (overly emphatic). Use 'I think long walks' instead of 'my long walks' to avoid implying possession that changes meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× So just yesterday I went to walk the sites the Riverside in my city.

✓ So just yesterday I went to walk the sites by the riverside in my city.

Original has articles and preposition errors. Use 'by the riverside' or 'to the riverside' and 'went to walk the sites' is awkward; 'went to walk by the riverside' is more natural. 'Riverside' often takes 'the' when referring to a specific riverbank. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I had quite a nice time view after a full on hectic day.

✓ I had quite a nice view after a full-on hectic day.

'Time view' is incorrect word order/choice; likely intended 'nice view' or 'nice time'. Hyphenate 'full-on' when used as an adjective. Keep the past tense 'had' to match 'yesterday'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Walking there in the evening definitely refreshed my brain and my mind and improved my physical health as well.

✓ Walking there in the evening definitely refreshed my mind and improved my physical health as well.

'Refreshed my brain and my mind' is redundant; use 'my mind'. Prefer concise phrasing. Past tense 'refreshed' correctly matches the time reference 'yesterday'. Grammar problem type ID: 12