Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve ilgili fakat dilbilgisi ve akıcılık geliştirilebilir. 'For a day' yerine 'each day' veya 'every day' kullanın. Cümleleri daha akıcı hale getirmek için kısmi yeniden düzenleme ve bir bağlaç ekleyin. Ayrıca maksimum 5 cümle kuralına uyulmuş ancak daha spesifik detay (ne kadar süre yürüdüğünüz, nerede yürüdüğünüz) eklenirse skor artar.

例: Yes, I walk almost every day and try to reach a 10,000-step goal. I usually walk in the mornings in the park near my home to relax and reduce stress.

提案: Cevap anlaşılır fakat zaman uyumu (tense) ve mantıksal bağlamda hatalar var. 'When I grow up' yerine 'when I grew up' kullanın; geçmişten söz ederken geçmiş zaman şart. Ayrıca cevap tekrara düşüyor ('just going out for fun' ve 'having quality time' benzer anlamlar). Daha belirgin örnek veya anı ekleyin.

例: Not really. As a child I only went out to play with friends or have fun at the park. As I grew up, I started walking more for relaxation and to clear my mind after work.

提案: Fikir ilginç ama dilbilgisi ve netlik zayıf. 'are tend to' yerine 'tended to' ve 'isn't have' yerine 'doesn't have' kullanın. Cümlenizi bağlaçlarla düzenleyin ve daha basit, spesifik gerekçe verin (örneğin temiz hava, huzurlu ortam).

例: I think people enjoy walking in parks because humans historically lived close to nature, so green spaces feel calming. Also, parks offer fresh air and a peaceful environment away from busy streets.

提案: Cevap belirsiz ve tekrar eden ifadeler içeriyor. Kısa ve net bir tercih belirtin; ardından nedenleri somutlaştırın (örneğin hangi şehir, hangi özellikler). 'It will. It could be admiring' gibi parçalanmış cümlelerden kaçının.

例: I would love to take a long walk in Saint Petersburg, Russia, because I admire its historic architecture and vibrant street life. Walking there would let me enjoy the museums, canals and grand boulevards.

提案: Cevap gayet ilgili ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve kelime seçimi var. 'Nowadays I am walking around my apartment' yerine 'Lately, I have been walking near my apartment' kullanın. 'prefer walk' → 'prefer to walk'; 'it is being more quiet' → 'it is quieter'. Ayrıca bir örnek ekleyin (kaç dakika, hangi park).

例: Lately, I have been walking in the small park near my apartment because it's very convenient. I prefer to walk in the morning when it's quieter, and I usually spend about 30 minutes there.

× For a day I am trying to hit my 10,000 step goal and mostly I walk in the mornings to relax my mind and reduce my stress.

✓ I try to hit my 10,000-step goal each day, and I mostly walk in the mornings to relax my mind and reduce my stress.

The student used 'For a day I am trying' which mixes time expression and present continuous awkwardly. Use simple present 'I try' for habitual actions. Also add a hyphen in '10,000-step' as a compound adjective and use 'each day' or 'every day' for clarity.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to take a walk when you were a child?

The question uses past tense auxiliary 'Did', so the main verb should be base form 'go'. 'Have a walk' is non-idiomatic; use 'take a walk' in English.

× No, I don't think so. When I was a child I was just going out for fun and having quality time.

✓ No, I don't think so. When I was a child I just went out for fun and to spend quality time.

Mixing past continuous with general past is unnecessary. Use simple past 'I just went out' for habitual or repeated past actions. 'Having quality time' is awkward; use 'to spend quality time'.

× But when I grow up I go for a walk to reduce my stress and take my time.

✓ But when I grew up I went for walks to reduce my stress and take my time.

The student used present tense 'grow up' though referring to past life stage. Use past 'grew up' and plural 'went for walks' for habitual past actions. 'Take my time' fits but 'went for walks to relax and take my time' is clearer.

× I think it could be something evolutionary like our ancestors are tend to walk around trees in nature but modern humanity isn't have that kind of environment a lot.

✓ I think it could be evolutionary: our ancestors tended to walk among trees in nature, but modern people do not have that kind of environment often.

Problems: 'are tend to' mixes auxiliary with infinitive; correct form is past 'tended' for habitual past. 'Walk around trees' is better as 'walk among trees'. 'Modern humanity isn't have' is ungrammatical; use 'do not have'. Also simplify 'a lot' to 'often'.

× I don't have anywhere in my mind specifically, but maybe some place in Russia because I like the architecture and the energy of the Russian streets. It will. It could be admiring to walk around that city, that kind of.

✓ I don't have any specific place in mind, but maybe somewhere in Russia because I like the architecture and the atmosphere of Russian streets. It would be wonderful to walk around a city like that.

Use 'any specific place in mind' instead of 'anywhere in my mind'. 'Some place' -> 'somewhere'. 'It will. It could be admiring' is fragmented and incorrect; use conditional 'It would be wonderful' or 'It would be amazing'. 'Admiring' is wrong here; use 'wonderful' or 'amazing'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

When asking about recent activities with 'lately', use present perfect 'have you gone' rather than simple past 'did you go'.

× Nowadays I am walking around my apartment, There is a park nearby and it is easy to access for me.

✓ Nowadays I walk around my apartment. There is a park nearby, and it is easy for me to access.

Comma splice: two independent clauses joined incorrectly. Use a period or conjunction. 'I am walking' can be simple present 'I walk' for habitual action. 'Easy to access for me' should be 'easy for me to access'.

× Also, I prefer walk in the morning because it is being more quiet and easy.

✓ Also, I prefer to walk in the morning because it is quieter and more peaceful.

After 'prefer' use the infinitive 'to walk' or gerund 'walking'. 'It is being more quiet' is incorrect; use comparative 'quieter'. 'Easy' is vague here; 'more peaceful' or 'calmer' fits better.