Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one specific reason and a short illustrative detail. Avoid redundancy and grammar errors (e.g., "I do work a lot" is unclear).

例: Yes, I walk quite a lot. Because there is limited public transport near my home, I often walk 20–30 minutes to reach a bus stop or taxi stand. This routine has also helped me stay fit.

提案: Clarify tense and remove repetitions. Give one clear past-tense statement followed by a specific example of who you walked with or what you did. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because I grew up in a lively neighborhood. For example, my family and I used to stroll to the local park every weekend and sometimes walked with neighbors after dinner.

提案: Avoid tautology and be specific. Give one clear reason and support it with a concrete effect or example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example." Correct grammar: "decompress" and "after a long time" need refinement.

例: People like walking in parks because the green space and fresh air are relaxing. For example, a short walk among trees can reduce stress and help someone clear their mind after a busy workday.

提案: Directly answer the hypothetical with a clear location and reason. Keep it concise and avoid contradicting statements. Use a linking phrase like "because" to explain motivation.

例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk to a nearby café because having a destination motivates me. I could enjoy a coffee afterwards and read while resting.

提案: Use correct past tense and avoid repetition. Give one specific recent example and a brief reason or detail (when or why).

例: Recently I walked to my university to attend a lecture. It takes about 20 minutes on foot, so I usually walk there instead of taking transport.

× I do work a lot.

✓ I work a lot.

The original sentence uses the auxiliary 'do' unnecessarily with the main verb 'work'. When stating a habitual action in the present simple, do not add -ing or an extra auxiliary. Use the present simple: 'I work a lot.' This removes redundancy and matches the habitual meaning.

× That's because I can't find any nearby transportation, so I usually walk from 20 to 30 minutes to be able to find any means of transportation to go to any place around the city.

✓ That's because I can't find nearby transportation, so I usually walk for 20 to 30 minutes to find a means of transportation to go anywhere around the city.

Issues: 'any nearby transportation' is awkward — use 'nearby transportation'. Time duration uses 'for' (walk for 20 to 30 minutes). 'to be able to find any means' is redundant; use 'to find a means'. 'any place around the city' should be 'anywhere around the city'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary words and use correct prepositions for duration and place.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The word 'to have a walk' is nonstandard in this question; native speakers say 'for a walk'. The auxiliary 'did' is correct for past simple. Use 'for a walk' to express purpose of going outside.

× I grew up in a very extroverted neighborhood. That's why I usually I used to when I used to go to a lot of walks with my family and neighbors.

✓ I grew up in a very sociable neighborhood. That's why I used to go on a lot of walks with my family and neighbors.

Problems: 'extroverted neighborhood' is odd; 'sociable' or 'friendly' fits better. The sentence has redundant fragments 'I usually I used to when I used to'. Use a single past habitual form 'used to' and the correct collocation 'go on walks' (not 'go to a walk'). Remove duplicate words to fix structure.

× In my opinion it's because parks are parks and being in and outside or outdoors area is very refreshing and any person can decompress after a long time if they went to any park.

✓ In my opinion, it's because parks are outdoors and being outside is very refreshing, and anyone can relax after a long time if they go to a park.

Issues: 'parks are parks' is tautological; better: 'parks are outdoors'. 'being in and outside or outdoors area' is ungrammatical — use 'being outside'. 'any person' -> 'anyone'. Tense: conditional with general truth should use present 'if they go' rather than past 'if they went'. Use 'relax' rather than informal 'decompress' unless appropriate.

× I would prefer to go to any cafe nearby my house.

✓ I would prefer to go to a cafe near my house.

'Any cafe nearby my house' is awkward. Use 'a cafe near my house' or 'a nearby cafe'. 'Nearby' is an adjective or adverb; 'near my house' is a clearer prepositional phrase.

× I would walk to the cafe, which would be a motivation for me to go for a walk because I never go for a walk for no reason.

✓ I would walk to the cafe, which would motivate me to walk because I never walk for no reason.

Use simpler verb forms: 'which would motivate me to walk' (not 'be a motivation for me to go for a walk'). Also avoid double negatives: 'never go for a walk for no reason' is confusing; 'never walk for no reason' or 'I never walk without a reason' is clearer. Keep verb forms consistent ('walk').

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is often used with present perfect (Have you been walking lately?). In a past simple question with 'did', use 'recently' for natural phrasing. Change 'lately' to 'recently' to match the past simple.

× I went to my university so I tend to walk a lot to to arrive to my universities. That was the last place I walked to.

✓ I went to my university, so I tend to walk a lot to get to my university. That was the last place I walked to.

Errors: double 'to to'. 'Arrive to' is incorrect; use 'get to' or 'arrive at'. 'My universities' should be singular 'my university' to match context. Keep tense consistent: past event 'I went' followed by general habit 'I tend to walk a lot to get to my university.'