Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并纠正词汇使用。不要把“work”用在想表达“walk often”时；句子要简洁，控制在最多5句内，并用连接词自然过渡。可以增加频率、时间或原因等具体细节。

例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially in my free time. I usually take a 30-minute walk along the seaside because I enjoy the fresh air and the scenery. It helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: 回答要完整并注意语法时态一致。不要留下不完整的句子（如“because.”）。可交代频率、去的地方和感受，使用连接词使叙述流畅。

例: Yes, I did. I often went for walks with my father when I was a child because he enjoyed exploring new places. We visited parks and markets, and I remember feeling excited to see different sights.

提案: 表达要更自然和连贯，避免直译式短语（如“relax themselves”）。用更合适的连接词并提供具体原因或例子，注意语法（例如时态和句子结构）。

例: People like to walk in parks because it helps them relax and escape from daily stress. For example, the greenery and quiet atmosphere make it easier to unwind after a long day at work.

提案: 回答要直接回应地点问题并补全句子。不要用“Yes”开头，改为说明地点并给出具体理由或感受，保持句子简洁并避免不完整结尾。

例: I would like to take a long walk along a coastal path. I enjoy the fresh sea breeze and the sound of the waves, which I find very calming and inspiring.

提案: 回答要简洁并注意时态与表达自然性。避免填充词（如“Umm”），把细节具体化，使用连词使句子更流畅，例如描述景色和感受。

例: Yesterday I went to Yunnan Park. There were many beautiful sights, such as colourful flowers and birds flying around, and I enjoyed taking photos of the scenery.

× Yes, I work often, especially in my spare time. I usually walk along the seaside and enjoy the fresh air.

✓ Yes, I walk often, especially in my spare time. I usually walk along the seaside and enjoy the fresh air.

问题类型ID应选择与动词使用和时态相关的项：6（Present tense issue）或27（Subject-verb agreement errors）。该句中“work often”用法不当。上下文问的是“Do you walk a lot?”，学生应回答“I walk often”或“I often walk”。“work often”表示经常工作，与问题不符。建议用一般现在时表习惯动作，位置可改为“I often walk”或“I walk often”。

× Yes, I did. I used to go out with my father because. He always takes me to many places.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to go out with my father because he always took me to many places.

问题类型ID：5（Past tense issue）。原句有两个问题：1）“because.”后多余句点导致句子断裂，应与后句连成从句；2）时态不一致。前句用“used to”表示过去的习惯，后句应使用过去时“took”而非现在时“takes”。建议统一使用过去时描述过去的习惯性行为。

× From my perspective, the people like to relax themselves. And after the long term working so it can reduce their stress.

✓ From my perspective, people like to relax. After a long period of work, walking can reduce their stress.

问题类型ID：12（Incorrect use of pronouns）和26（Sentence structure errors）以及11（Incorrect use of prepositions）或14（Incorrect use of quantifiers）。原句问题：1）“the people”在泛指时不需要定冠词，应为“people”；2）“relax themselves”冗余，英语中通常直接说“relax”；3）“the long term working”语序和表达不自然，应改为“a long period of work”或“long working hours”；4）连词和句子结构混乱，使用“so it can”不当，建议分句并明确主语，如“walking can reduce their stress”。给予简明改写以符合习惯表达。

× Yes, I would like to take a long walk because I can enjoy the breathtaking feel such as the fresh sea breeze and the sound of waves when walking along the.

✓ Yes, I would like to take a long walk because I can enjoy breathtaking feelings, such as the fresh sea breeze and the sound of waves when walking along the seaside.

问题类型ID：26（Sentence structure errors）与11（Incorrect use of prepositions）。原句有不完整短语“when walking along the.”，缺少名词（如“seaside”）。另外“breathtaking feel”搭配不自然，改为“breathtaking feelings”或“breathtaking scenery”。建议补全名词并使用自然搭配。

× Umm yesterday I went to Yunnan Park because there are many beautiful landscapes such as the birds are flying and other beautiful flowers.

✓ Umm, yesterday I went to Yunnan Park because there were many beautiful sights, such as birds flying and many beautiful flowers.

问题类型ID：5（Past tense issue）和1（Singular and plural issue）/22（Article errors）。原句时态不一致：主句为过去时“went”，从句却用现在时“are flying”，应改为过去时“were”或用-ing短语“birds flying”；“beautiful landscapes”用词不太恰当，可改为“beautiful sights”或“scenery”；“the birds are flying”里不需定冠词“the”如果泛指多只鸟。建议保持时态一致并使用更自然的名词搭配。