Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 発言は自然で要点は伝わりますが、

例: Yes, I walk most evenings with my dog as part of my nightly routine, which helps me relax after work.

提案: 直接的で明確な答えです。さらに具体性を加えるために、頻度や活動の例を1つ加えると良いでしょう（理由の補強）。

例: Not really. I rarely went for walks as a child because I usually played football or tag with my friends at the park several times a week.

提案: 単語の選択ミス（working→walking）があり、語彙の精度が重要です。また、追加説明で具体例や結果を示すと説得力が上がります。

例: People enjoy walking in parks because the fresh air and greenery help them relax, reduce stress, and think more clearly after a busy day.

提案: 動詞の誤用（work→walk）や時制・語順の不自然さがあります。話を整えるために主語・理由・具体的な期待（何を見たいか）を順序立てて述べてください。

例: If I had the chance, I would walk from my house to Tokyo Station because I have only seen it by car and would love to explore the streets and admire the station's historic architecture.

提案: ここでも動詞の誤用（working→walking）と発音の詰まり（uh）があります。理由は良いですが、語彙の正確さと文の簡潔さを意識し、文を2文以内にまとめてください。

例: Lately I have been walking around my neighborhood because my dog dislikes long walks, but he is gaining weight, so I try to exercise him regularly.

× Yes, I usually walk every evening with my dog as part of my Nitro routine. Uh, which helps me relax.

✓ Yes, I usually walk every evening with my dog as part of my Nitro routine, which helps me relax.

The clause 'which helps me relax' is a relative clause that should be attached to the previous main clause with a comma, not isolated as a fragment. Combine the sentences to avoid a sentence fragment and improve flow. Suggestion: attach the clause with a comma so it modifies the routine.

× Not really. When I was a child I rarely went for walks because I preferred playing sports with my friends at the park.

✓ Not really. When I was a child, I rarely went for walks because I preferred playing sports with my friends at the park.

A comma is needed after the introductory time clause 'When I was a child'. This is punctuation rather than verb tense, but it affects sentence structure and clarity. Add a comma after the introductory phrase.

× I think people like working in parks because it helps them relax and clear their minds after a busy day.

✓ I think people like walking in parks because it helps them relax and clear their minds after a busy day.

The verb 'walking' is correct for the activity; 'working' is incorrect and changes meaning. Replace 'working' with 'walking' to match the question about walking in parks.

× If I had a chance, I would work from my house to Tokyo Station because I have only visited it by car, so I wanted to explore streets. Uh yeah. So I would enjoy seeing the architecture.

✓ If I had the chance, I would walk from my house to Tokyo Station because I have only visited it by car, so I would like to explore the streets. I would enjoy seeing the architecture.

Multiple issues: 'work from my house to Tokyo Station' uses the wrong verb; 'walk' is appropriate. 'If I had a chance' is better as 'If I had the chance' (idiomatic). 'So I wanted to explore streets' mixes tenses and lacks articles; use 'I would like to explore the streets' to match the hypothetical conditional. Also split into clearer sentences and remove filler 'Uh yeah.'

× Recently I have been working around my neighborhood because my dog dislikes lo long walk but he is uh, getting weight so I try to exercise him regularly.

✓ Recently I have been walking around my neighborhood because my dog dislikes long walks, but he is gaining weight so I try to exercise him regularly.

Several problems: 'working around my neighborhood' is the wrong verb; use 'walking'. 'lo long walk' contains typos and should be 'long walks' (plural for general preference). 'he is uh, getting weight' is ungrammatical; use 'he is gaining weight'. Ensure commas separate clauses and maintain present perfect continuous 'have been walking' for recent repeated action.