Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接だが、文法ミス、繰り返し、語順の不自然さが目立ちます。具体的には時制の一致（過去/現在）、重複した語（when when）、不要な仮定節の混在（if I went some if I go somewhere）を改善してください。また一文を短くして明確な理由を1つか2つ述べ、接続詞（because, so）を使って論理をはっきりさせましょう。発音で疲労感（tired）の語尾が不明瞭だと減点されるので注意。

例: No, I don't walk much. I prefer driving because I get very tired after long walks, and driving is faster when I need to go somewhere.

提案: 答えは肯定しているが、時制や語順の誤り、語の重複（I often I often）、冠詞や前置詞の欠如（to the shopping mall, to buy food）が見られます。過去の習慣を表すために“used to”や“usually”を使うと自然です。具体的な頻度や目的を一つ追加して内容を豊かにしましょう。

例: Yes, I used to walk to school every day when I was a child. I also usually walked to the local shopping mall to buy food with my family.

提案: 意見は述べられているが、名詞の単複（park -> parks）、文のまとまり、語彙選択（endangeredは不適切）が問題です。代わりに『少ない交通、静かさ、自然環境』など明確な理由を列挙し、接続詞（and, also, because）や比較表現を使って論理的に繋ぎましょう。

例: People like walking in parks because there is little traffic and the environment is quiet. Also, parks have greenery and fresh air, so people feel relaxed and safe.

提案: 意図は明確だが語法の誤り（along the mountain → along the mountain trail / up the mountain）、単語の複数形の誤用（viewings → views）、冗長な断片文（See the viewings...）が見られます。条件節と理由を滑らかに接続し、視覚的な描写を一つ加えると良いです。

例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk up the mountain near my house because I enjoy the fresh air and the fantastic views from the summit.

提案: 過去の経験を述べている点は良いですが、時制が混在（walked / I walk）、不要な繰り返し、冠詞の使い方（a very famous temple / the temple）に注意が必要です。できれば具体的な活動や感想（how you felt, what food you tried）を一つ加えて話を豊かにしましょう。

例: When I visited Kyoto, I walked from Kyoto Station to Nishihonganji, a very famous temple. I explored the temple grounds and tried some local street food, which was delicious.

× No, I don't. I don't like walking because I get so tired when when I walk the last day.

✓ No, I don't. I don't like walking because I get so tired when I walk for a long time.

The speaker mixes time expressions incorrectly. 'the last day' is incorrect here and 'when I walk the last day' is ungrammatical. Use a general present tense time expression 'when I walk for a long time' to match the habitual present 'I don't like'. Suggestion: replace the phrase with 'for a long time' to express duration.

× I prefer driving a car if you if I went some if I go somewhere.

✓ I prefer driving a car if I go somewhere.

The original has mixed conditional forms and extra words. 'Prefer' plus a conditional should use present tense ('if I go') for real situations. Remove 'if you' and 'if I went some' which are incorrect. Suggestion: keep 'if I go somewhere' to express general preference.

× Yes, I always walk to school and I often I often go to shopping mall near my house buy food.

✓ Yes, I always walked to school and I often went to the shopping mall near my house to buy food.

The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense: 'walk' -> 'walked', 'go' -> 'went'. Also need articles: 'the shopping mall', and an infinitive 'to buy' to indicate purpose. Suggestion: use past tense for habitual actions in the past and include 'the' before specific places.

× I think that park is the best place to walk because there is no cars and any, any things, uh, endangered for people and there are also very quiet and people feel comfortable.

✓ I think that the park is the best place to walk because there are no cars or dangerous things for people, and it is also very quiet so people feel comfortable.

Use the definite article 'the park' when referring to a specific type of place. 'There is no cars' is incorrect number agreement; use 'there are no cars'. 'Any, any things ... endangered' is ungrammatical; use 'dangerous things' or 'anything dangerous'. 'There are also very quiet' incorrectly refers to the park; use 'it is also very quiet'. Suggestion: correct article usage, subject-verb agreement with 'there are', and clearer noun/adjective order.

× I would like to walk along the mountain near my house because I like mountain and see the view. See the viewings from the top of mountain.

✓ I would like to walk along the mountain near my house because I like the mountains and to see the view from the top of the mountain.

Use plural or definite article: 'I like mountains' or 'the mountains'. 'See the view' should be part of the infinitive phrase 'to see the view'. 'Viewings' is not appropriate; use 'the view'. Also add 'the' before 'mountain' when specifying a particular mountain. Suggestion: use consistent articles and correct noun forms.

× When I visited Kyoto, I walked to I walk from Kyoto station to Nishihonganji, which is very famous temple in Japan. And I also walk around the, uh, the temple and eat some food.

✓ When I visited Kyoto, I walked from Kyoto Station to Nishihonganji, which is a very famous temple in Japan. I also walked around the temple and ate some food.

Narration about a past trip requires past tense: change present 'walk' and 'eat' to past 'walked' and 'ate'. Remove redundant 'to I walk'. Add the article 'a' before 'very famous temple'. Capitalize 'Station' as part of the proper noun. Suggestion: keep all verbs in the past tense for past events and include appropriate articles.