Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant with a good structure (topic sentence + explanation). To improve, make it slightly more concise, avoid redundancy (e.g. "now" and "since my schedule became much busier" convey similar timing), and add a brief linking phrase to connect past and present (e.g. "however"). Also vary vocabulary (use "regularly" alternatives like "frequently").

例: I don't walk much at the moment. I used to take long walks regularly, but since my schedule became busier two years ago, I can only manage short walks near my home now. However, I try to walk at least three times a week to stay active.

提案: Good concise response with specific detail (Anita, two hours). To improve, add a linking word to connect ideas (e.g. "instead") and vary phrasing to sound more natural. You could also briefly note why you preferred badminton to walking (e.g. competitive, fun).

例: I wasn't really into walking as a child; instead, I preferred playing badminton with my friends. I often played with a friend called Anita for about two hours at a time because it was competitive and social, which kept me active.

提案: Your answer covers several good reasons and includes social and health aspects. To improve, break into two short sentences, use linking words for clarity (e.g. "Firstly", "Additionally") and correct minor grammar ("use park" -> "use parks"). Replace general words with slightly stronger vocabulary (e.g. "keep fit" or "boost motivation").

例: People walk in parks mainly to keep fit and enjoy the fresh air. Additionally, parks serve as social spaces where people meet neighbors or join walking groups, which helps them make friends and stay motivated.

提案: Strong, vivid answer with reasons and imagery. To improve further, tighten phrasing slightly and include a linking phrase (e.g. "because") to connect clauses smoothly. You could add a small detail about what kind of photos or which season for more specificity.

例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in Buddha Garden because I've heard it's full of beautiful, unique flowers. I imagine it would be peaceful, so I could stroll slowly, enjoy the scenery, and take close-up photos of the blooms.

提案: Very clear, well-structured answer with specific details (three sections). To improve, combine sentences with linking words (e.g. "the park is divided into three sections:"), use articles and numbers in words ("three" spelled out) and perhaps add a brief personal preference sentence (why you prefer the quiet path).

例: I recently went for a walk in Nehru Stadium Park. The park is divided into three sections: a playground, an area with swings for children, and a quiet walking path, which I prefer for my exercise because it's peaceful and less crowded.

× 'People walk in parks mainly to stay fit and enjoy fresh air and also they use park as social spaces to meet neighbors or join walking groups which helps them make friends and stay motivated.'

✓ 'People walk in parks mainly to stay fit and enjoy fresh air, and they also use parks as social spaces to meet neighbors or join walking groups, which helps them make friends and stay motivated.'

'Errors: incorrect use of prepositions and count nouns. The phrase "enjoy fresh air" is fine, but "use park as social spaces" should use the plural noun "parks" or add an article (the/a) and make "space" singular/plural consistently. Also missing commas for clarity. Suggestion: make the noun number agree with the general statement (use plural "parks") and add commas to separate clauses. Example improvement: "...enjoy fresh air, and they also use parks as social spaces, which helps...'. '} ,{