Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be a bit more specific and vary vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, add one supporting detail and a brief reason. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I walk quite a lot, particularly in the mornings as part of my daily exercise routine. For example, I usually walk for about 30 minutes around my neighborhood because it helps me wake up and stay fit.

提案: Use past tense consistently and give a specific example or frequency. Limit to two or three sentences and use linking words like "often" or "usually."

例: Yes, I often played outside when I was a child. For instance, I usually went out to play from morning until mid-afternoon with my friends because we enjoyed bike rides and games in the park.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Improve grammar (use articles and adjectives correctly) and avoid repetition.

例: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and offer fresh air. In addition, parks have green spaces and benches, which make them comfortable and sociable places to relax.

提案: Be concise and avoid repeating the same adjectives. Use linking words and provide a brief reason or a specific image to make the answer vivid.

例: I would like to take a long walk along the seashore because the sound of waves and the fresh sea breeze are very calming and refreshing.

提案: Use correct tense and clear subject references. Give a specific, coherent answer: say where you walked, when, and why. Keep to two sentences and avoid unclear pronouns.

例: Lately I have been walking in the park near my house every morning as part of my daily exercise. I walk there for about 30 minutes because it helps me stay healthy and start the day positively.

× Yes, I love to walk, especially in the morning as my exercise routine.

✓ Yes, I love to walk, especially in the morning as part of my exercise routine.

The original sentence is mostly correct but omits a preposition/phrase 'part of' which makes the meaning natural and idiomatic. Suggestion: add 'part of' to indicate that walking is included in the routine.

× Yes, when I was a child, I love to play outside, especially in the morning until in the afternoon.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I loved to play outside, especially from the morning until the afternoon.

The sentence describes past habits, so the verb should be in the past tense ('loved' not 'love'). Also 'from the morning until the afternoon' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and correct preposition 'from...until'.

× Because it's so relaxing and calm place, it feels like open environment, specially a friendly environment.

✓ Because it's such a relaxing and calm place, it feels like an open, especially friendly, environment.

There is a missing determiner and incorrect collocation: use 'such a' before 'relaxing and calm place' and include 'an' before 'open environment'. Also 'specially' should be 'especially'. Suggestion: add correct articles and use 'especially' for emphasis; combine adjectives with commas or 'especially' to be natural.

× I love to walk in the seashore because for me it feels like an open environment and feels calm, quiet and feels so refreshing and relaxing.

✓ I would love to walk on the seashore because, for me, it feels like an open environment and feels calm, quiet, refreshing and relaxing.

Question asks hypothetical 'Where would you like... if you had the chance?', so use conditional 'I would love'. Also correct preposition is 'on the seashore' or 'along the seashore'. Remove repetitive 'feels' for fluency and list adjectives with commas. Suggestion: use conditional form and correct preposition; avoid repeating the verb unnecessarily.

× We do have a park near in her house so every morning as my daily routine. I work everyday as my exercise.

✓ We have a park near her house, so I go there every morning as part of my daily routine. I walk every day as my exercise.

Several issues: 'near in her house' is incorrect — use 'near her house'. 'We do have' is unnecessary emphasis; use 'We have'. Sentence fragment and verb misuse: 'every morning as my daily routine' should be connected with a main verb ('I go there every morning'). 'I work everyday as my exercise' is wrong meaning; replace with 'I walk every day as my exercise'. Also 'everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverb) — use 'every day'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions, include necessary verbs, choose correct words ('walk' for walking) and separate 'every day'.