Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сконцентрируйтесь на чёткой структуре: дайте краткий топик-сентенс, затем 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретикой. Избегайте повторов и ошибок в грамматике. Практикуйте связки (because, so, and, therefore) и корректные фразы: "I prefer walking", "it's good for my health". Работайте над произношением и контролем пауз, чтобы не использовать заполнители типа "I and I".

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I prefer walking because it is great exercise and helps my health, so I usually walk to work and in the evenings. For these reasons I often recommend walking to my friends.

提案: Давайте полные, грамматически правильные предложения: начните с короткого ответа и добавьте конкретный пример. Избегайте незаконченных фраз и повторов. Используйте прошедшее время (went, played) для описания прошлого. Уточняйте где и с кем вы гуляли.

例: Yes, I did. I often went out with my friends to play in the streets and sometimes we hiked in the nearby mountains. I also visited my grandfather and enjoyed walking around his village when I stayed there.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и ясно: начните с общей причины, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных преимущества. Избегайте недопустимых слов и бессмысленных вставок. Используйте подходящую лексику: "relax", "fresh air", "safe space", "family time". Будьте кратки (не более 3–4 предложений).

例: People like parks because they are relaxing and provide fresh air. They are great places to spend time with family or friends and to enjoy nature, which helps reduce stress.

提案: Используйте условные формы и корректную временную последовательность: "If I had the chance, I would...". Дайте причину и конкретные детали (что именно вы хотите увидеть). Избегайте повторов и неверных словосочетаний. Практикуйте словосочетания: "the city centre", "modern architecture", "cultural attractions".

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the city centre of Tashkent. I would enjoy the modern architecture and cultural attractions, and it would be a good way to learn about the city's history and everyday life.

提案: Говорите в прошедшем времени и используйте простые, понятные фразы: "Recently I went to...". Убирайте заполнители (uh, I mean) и исправляйте неверные глаголы (struggled → went). Дайте конкретику: где именно, с кем и зачем, и что вы делали во время прогулки.

例: Recently I went for a walk with my friends in the Nabahar countryside. We were there for a training related to my career, and during our hike we talked and enjoyed the scenery.

× Yes, definitely. I always prefer work a lot, especially be able and I because it is a very useful and the benefits for my health and I can I and I can wait out by it and it's I think I always recommend it for everyone.

✓ Yes, definitely. I prefer to work a lot because it is very useful and beneficial for my health, and I can relax afterward; I always recommend it to everyone.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: missing infinitive marker 'to' after 'prefer', wordiness, incomplete clauses, unnecessary repetitions, and incorrect connectors. Combine ideas into clear clauses, use 'prefer to work' not 'prefer work', use 'beneficial' instead of 'the benefits', and use 'recommend it to everyone'. Suggestion: break into shorter clauses, use correct infinitive forms and appropriate connectors (because, and, afterward).

× Yes, of course I often go go outside with my friends and and I kicking a lot together to mountains and the streets in my neighborhood. Especially when I go to the grandfather home I always.

✓ Yes, of course. I often went outside with my friends, and we often hiked together in the mountains and walked in the streets of my neighborhood. I always visited my grandfather's home.

The student mixes present and past tenses; the question asks about childhood (past). Use past tense 'went', 'hiked', 'walked', and correct noun phrase 'grandfather's home'. Also remove repetitions and complete the fragment 'I always'. Suggestion: Maintain past tense consistently when talking about childhood and use possessive form for 'grandfather's'.

× The first leads are very interesting and the awesome place for a Vulcan, especially with their parents, friends or girlfriends and it's glorious and they can take a lot of experience from it and go go every interesting and enjoyable places and it.

✓ Parks are very interesting and are awesome places for walking, especially with parents, friends, or partners; they offer wonderful experiences and many interesting and enjoyable spots to visit.

Errors include incorrect nouns ('Vulcan' likely intended 'walking'), singular/plural mismatches, awkward adjectives, and repetition. Use 'parks' as subject, 'awesome places for walking' and 'partners' instead of 'girlfriends' for neutrality. Use 'offer experiences' not 'take a lot of experience'. Suggestion: Use appropriate nouns and plural forms, avoid literal translations, and structure with subject + verb + object. Replace repeated words and colloquialisms with clear terms.

× If I had to choose opportunity, I wanted to go center of the town, especially Tashkent city, because because of its convenience and the very enjoyable and interesting for everyone. And I can I can watch every modern buildings and take a lot of experience from it.

✓ If I had the opportunity, I would like to go to the center of town, especially Tashkent, because it is convenient and enjoyable for everyone. I could see the modern buildings and gain a lot of experience from it.

This conditional requires the second conditional: 'If I had the opportunity, I would like/would go'. Correct prepositions: 'go to the center of town'. Use 'could see' or 'would be able to see' and 'gain experience' rather than 'take a lot of experience'. Remove repeated words. Suggestion: Use standard conditional forms and correct prepositions; 'Tashkent city' should be 'Tashkent' or 'Tashkent city' sparingly.

× If I'm not a mistake, I struggled with my friends to Nabahar countryside and because, uh, I had the one, uh, practice there, uh, related, related to my career and I, uh, hicking there with my friends and I and we talk.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, I went with my friends to the Nabahar countryside because I had a practice session there related to my career. We hiked there with my friends and we talked.

The student used incorrect verbs: 'struggled' is wrong for 'went'; mixing present and past is confusing. Use 'If I'm not mistaken' and past simple 'went', 'had', 'hiked', 'talked' to describe a recent past event. Also correct noun 'countryside' and remove repetitions. Suggestion: Choose verbs that convey the intended meaning ('went' for travelling), use past tense consistently for past events, and avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeated phrases.