Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中要更自然和简洁，避免频繁的填词（如 uh）和重复。开头直接给出主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持（例如路线、时间或频率）。注意发音清晰，纠正不明词汇（如“zometry”应为“dormitory”）。

例: Yes, I walk a lot at university. My dormitory is about one to two kilometers from most of my classrooms, so I walk there every day, usually in the morning and evening.

提案: 时态使用要一致（这里应使用过去时）。简化句子结构，避免冗长或啰嗦的表达，并提供具体例子（例如去哪儿、和谁、做什么）。

例: Yes, I did. I loved outdoor activities as a child, so I often walked long distances to visit parks and play with my friends after school.

提案: 避免重复表达（如重复说 good environment）。用连词组织逻辑，并提供具体原因或例子（例如放松、锻炼、空气好）。注意语法（主谓一致和动名词形式）。

例: I think people walk in parks to relax and escape their daily routines. The fresh air, greenery and peaceful atmosphere make it an ideal place for exercise and socializing.

提案: 回答要直接对应假设情形（if you had the chance），并用现在条件或虚拟语气更合适。减少填词，修正时态和冗余短语，给出具体地点或活动作为支持细节。

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on the weekends. I have more free time then, so I could go for a long hike in nearby hills or along the river.

提案: 很好提供了具体地点和感受。可以再补充时间或一次具体经历来使回答更具体生动，比如最近一次去的时间和做了什么。注意地名拼写（可能是 East Lake）。

例: Recently I went to East Lake in my hometown, Wuhan. I walked along the shore one summer evening, enjoyed the cool breeze and watched people rowing boats on the lake.

× Uh, yes, I do walk a lot when I'm in university.

✓ Uh, yes, I walk a lot when I'm at university.

句子使用一般现在时描述习惯动作，原句“do walk”虽可强调但不自然；更重要的是介词搭配错误，英语里应说"at university"表示在大学期间或在校。建议使用"I walk a lot when I'm at university."以保持自然表达。

× because of the distance of the, uh, classroom and my zometry, uh, I usually walk one or two kilometers per day.

✓ because of the distance between my classroom and my dormitory, I usually walk one or two kilometers per day.

原句中介词搭配不当且单词拼写错误：应使用"distance between A and B"表示两者之间的距离；"zometry"疑为"dormitory"的误写。建议改为"distance between my classroom and my dormitory"。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child? / Yes I do. When I was a child I am really passionate about outdoor activities which makes me walk every day very long distances.

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child? / Yes, I did. When I was a child I was really passionate about outdoor activities, which made me walk very long distances every day.

问题使用过去时，回答应一致使用过去时。原回答中"Yes I do"时态错误，应为"Yes, I did."此外句中"I am really passionate"时态错误，描述过去应用过去时"I was really passionate"；关系句子中谓语需对应过去时"made me walk"。建议将所有描述童年经历的动词改为过去时。

× people usually walk in the parks mainly because of the good environment which make them out of the daily routine and work.

✓ people usually walk in parks mainly because of the good environment, which takes them away from their daily routine and work.

原句中关系从句谓语与主语不一致且搭配不当："which make them out of"不符合英语习惯，应使用"which takes them away from"表示“使他们摆脱”。另外"in the parks"可简化为"in parks"。注意主谓一致：单数"environment"对应单数动词"takes"。

× Also they really enjoying the time walking in a such great great environment.

✓ Also, they really enjoy walking in such a great environment.

原句中缺少正确的动词形式：应使用动词原形"enjoy"而不是现在分词"enjoying"。"a such great great environment"词序和冠词错误，应为"such a great environment"或"a great environment"，并且不应重复"great"。建议改为"they really enjoy walking in such a great environment."

× Uh, I prefer to take a long walk mainly in weekends because I usually had a have a long time, a long free time on the weekends so I can manage it to get a jog or hike sometimes.

✓ Uh, I prefer to take long walks mainly on weekends because I usually have a lot of free time then, so I can manage to go for a jog or a hike sometimes.

介词应为"on weekends"而非"in weekends"；动词时态和形式混乱（"had a have a"为错误重复），应为现在时"have"描述习惯。短语"manage it to get a jog"语序和动词搭配不当，应为"manage to go for a jog"。此外复数/可数名词要注意："long walks"比单数更自然。

× In my hometown, Wuhan, there is a lovely lake called Easter Lake.

✓ In my hometown, Wuhan, there is a lovely lake called East Lake.

地名拼写错误：应为"East Lake"（如果指东湖，中文为东湖）。此外句型"there is"用于引出存在是正确的，注意专有名词首字母大写。建议确认湖名拼写并改为"East Lake"。

× I usually go there for a walk and enjoy the quiet summer nights.

✓ I usually go there for a walk and enjoy the quiet summer nights.

该句本身时态和结构正确，无需修改。说明：使用一般现在时描述经常性活动是合适的，因此保持原句。