Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要时态一致并更直接。开头可用主题句回答当前情况，然后补充过去经历或习惯，避免冗长不连贯的句子。使用连接词如“also”或“usually”使表达更自然。注意语法：把“When I was a child”放在过去时的句子中。

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk around my university to get to classes and shops, and when I was a child I walked to school every day.

提案: 注意时态一致和单词拼写，句子要更流畅。先用一句主题句直接回答，然后用一两句具体细节说明（频率、活动、原因）。避免词语重复和拼写错误（例如“relieve”）。

例: Yes, I often went out for walks when I was a child. I walked to the nearby park after studying, where I played games with my friends to relieve stress.

提案: 回答要简洁有逻辑，避免重复词语。使用连接词（because, so, therefore）清晰表达因果关系，注意词序和搭配（e.g., “unwind” 不需要“their selves”）。

例: People like walking in parks because modern life is fast-paced and stressful, so they need a quiet place to unwind and relax.

提案: 表达假设时用正确的虚拟语气（If I had the chance, I would...）。句子要具体说明原因和活动，避免不清楚的短语（例如“really work there”）。说明景点特色或活动，例如风景、空气或徒步路线。

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on the Xizan Plateau because of its stunning scenery and clear air, which would make hiking very enjoyable.

提案: 注意时态一致并使用更自然的表达。先用过去时直接回答问题，然后说明原因和经历。避免字面翻译式表达（如“release”），应说“relieve stress”或“relax”。

例: I went to a coastal park last month with my friends. We were preparing for final exams and wanted to relax, so a walk by the sea helped us relieve stress.

× Yes, of course, I usually walk to school when I was a child.

✓ Yes, of course, I usually walked to school when I was a child.

句子中描述“当我还是个孩子时”的动作，时间点在过去，因此动词应使用过去时。原句用了现在时“walk”，与时间状语“when I was a child”时态不一致。建议把动词改为过去式“walked”。

× Besides, I prefer to walk to other places around my university.

✓ Besides, I prefer to walk to other places around my university.

该句本身时态使用正确（一般现在时表述习惯性动作），无需修改。仅保留以示无误。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

该问题句为过去时的一般疑问句，结构正确，无需修改。保留原句。

× Yes, of course. Every day I walk to the park near my home after study.

✓ Yes, of course. Every day I walked to the park near my home after studying.

句子描述过去习惯（when child），因此应使用过去时“walked”。另外短语“after study”不自然，应使用动名词“after studying”或改为“after my studies”。建议改为“walked”并把“after study”改为“after studying”或“after my studies”。

× I usually play games with my friends there and rela relieve my stress.

✓ I usually played games with my friends there and relieved my stress.

原句中“rela relieve”为拼写/重复错误，并且时态应与描述的过去习惯一致，使用过去式“played”和“relieved”。动词“relieve”需变为过去式“relieved”。建议注意拼写并保持时态一致。

× I think it is because most people are living in a fast-paced lifestyle, so they were they are under immense pressure.

✓ I think it is because most people live a fast-paced life, so they are under immense pressure.

句子第一部分应使用一般现在时表述事实，改为“most people live a fast-paced life”。“are living in a fast-paced lifestyle”虽可，但冗长且语法搭配不当。原句还包含“they were they are”的重复和时态混用，需删去重复并保持一般现在时“they are”。建议简化为“live a fast-paced life”并删除多余词。

× As a result, they need a way to unwind their selves and relax.

✓ As a result, they need a way to unwind themselves and relax.

“their selves”为错误拼写/分写，应合并为“themselves”。此外“unwind themselves and relax”搭配正确。建议记住反身代词为一个词，如“themselves”。

× I don't know if I had a chance, I will take a long walk to in Xizan Plateau because it is a good way for people to really work there due to the landmarks.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on the Xizan Plateau because it is a good place to explore because of its landmarks.

原句中条件句与结果句时态搭配错误。对虚拟与不真实条件应使用过去式从句加would（If I had the chance, I would...）。原句“I don't know if I had a chance, I will...”结构不当。并且“take a long walk to in Xizan Plateau”介词使用错误，应为“on the Xizan Plateau”或“in the Xizan Plateau”视语义而定；“a good way for people to really work there”语义不通，改为“a good place to explore”。建议使用虚拟语气“If I had the chance, I would...”并修正介词和表达。

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

问题中时间副词“lately”（最近）通常与现在完成时连用，问及最近的经历应使用现在完成时“have you gone”，而不是过去时“did you go”。建议使用现在完成时以与“lately”搭配。

× I go to a coastal park. Last month I went there with my friends because we are so stressful that we are preparing for the final exam. So it is a choice for us to release.

✓ I went to a coastal park. Last month I went there with my friends because we were so stressed as we were preparing for the final exam. So it was a way for us to relax.

句子混用了现在时和过去时。描述过去的事件应全部使用过去时（I went; we were preparing）。“we are so stressful”错误，正确表达应为“we were so stressed”或“we felt so stressed”。“a choice for us to release”语法和搭配错误，应改为“a way for us to relax”。建议统一使用过去时，并用正确形容词“stressed”和短语“a way to relax”。