Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use correct verbs and tenses, answer directly and concisely, and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one specific detail. Correct common mistakes: 'work'→'walk', 'planning'→'plan', 'a walking'→'to go for a walk'.

例: I don't walk a lot at the moment because I am very busy with work and study. However, I plan to go for a walk in the forest with friends next month to relax and enjoy nature.

提案: Use correct past tense and clearer phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific example or reason using linking words. Correct errors: 'spend almost time'→'spent most of my time', 'when I was small'→'when I was a child', 'we can viewing'→'we could view' or 'see'.

例: Yes, I spent most of my time outdoors when I was a child because walking made me feel relaxed. For example, I often walked along the river in my hometown and enjoyed the peaceful scenery.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and use plural/singular and articles correctly. Use linking words to connect points. Be specific about features that attract people to parks (paths, benches, greenery). Avoid vague phrases like 'many round to spare'.

例: People like to walk in parks because they offer well‑maintained paths and plenty of benches where friends can sit and chat. In addition, the fresh air and green surroundings create a relaxing atmosphere for exercise and socialising.

提案: Use the conditional and verbs correctly: 'If I had the chance, I would...' State one clear place and give a specific reason with linking words. Replace 'work' with 'walk' and correct adjectives: 'thrilling and exciting'.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk through a forest because I find the scenery thrilling and calming. I would go with friends so we could talk and explore the trails together.

提案: Use past simple for recent actions and clear word order. Start with a direct answer naming the place, then add one specific detail about the conversation. Remove filler words and fix grammar: 'I went to another park with my parents' and 'we talked about my exams and their work stress.'

例: Recently, I went to a nearby park with my parents. We talked about my upcoming exams and my parents shared how stressed they have been at work.

× I don't work a lot because I don't have enough time for walking hobbies, but I try my best to planning a walking in the forest with my friends in the future.

✓ I don't walk a lot because I don't have enough time for walking as a hobby, but I try my best to plan a walk in the forest with my friends in the future.

The sentence contains multiple errors: 'work' should be 'walk' (word choice, but falls under sentence structure 26—however we only correct types from the provided list, so treat as article/phrase adjustment). 'planning' is incorrect after 'try my best to' which requires the base verb 'plan' (Grammar Problem Type 8: Verb + -ing form) and 'a walking' is incorrect; use 'a walk' (article and noun form error). Also 'walking hobbies' is unnatural; 'walking as a hobby' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'try my best to plan' and 'a walk' rather than 'planning a walking'.

× I try my best to planning a walking in the forest with my friends in the future.

✓ I try my best to plan a walk in the forest with my friends in the future.

After expressions like 'try my best to' we must use the base form of the verb (infinitive) not the -ing form. 'Planning' is incorrect here; use 'to plan'. Also 'a walking' is wrong because 'walking' as a noun is uncountable in this sense; use the countable noun 'a walk'.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This sentence is already correct in past tense form using 'Did you... go' for a past habit. No change needed. (Included here to indicate it meets tense requirements.)

× Yes, I spend almost time when I was small walking outside because I feel it's very relaxed and we can viewing the peaceful of my hometown.

✓ Yes, I spent most of my time walking outside when I was small because I felt it was very relaxing and we could enjoy the peacefulness of my hometown.

Mixed tenses: the activity is in the past, so use past tense 'spent' and 'felt' not present. 'Almost time' is incorrect; use 'most of my time'. 'Walking outside when I was small' should follow past tense. 'Very relaxed' should be the adjective 'very relaxing' describing the activity. 'We can viewing' is wrong: after 'we could' use base verb 'enjoy' not 'viewing'; 'viewing the peaceful of my hometown' is incorrect noun phrase—use 'enjoy the peacefulness of my hometown.'

× Because Park had many round to spare and we can sit on the grass to talk with my friends.

✓ Because the park has many round spaces to spare and we can sit on the grass to talk with my friends.

Articles and prepositions: 'Park' needs the definite article 'the' and should be lowercased. 'Had' should be 'has' if speaking generally (present tense). The phrase 'many round to spare' is unclear; likely 'many round spaces' or 'many round areas' and 'to spare' is unnecessary but acceptable. Preposition 'on the grass' is correct. Also 'talk with my friends' is fine. Suggest using 'the park has many open/round spaces' for clarity.

× Also, the atmosphere here is very comfortable and fresh. We can also enjoy the peaceful place together.

✓ Also, the atmosphere there is very comfortable and fresh. We can also enjoy the peaceful place together.

Tense and deictic term: If referring to parks in general, use 'there' instead of 'here' in a description. Otherwise sentence is grammatically acceptable in present tense. 'Enjoy the peaceful place' is OK though 'enjoy the peaceful atmosphere' may be more natural.

× If I had a chance, I will work on the forest through the forest because I think it's very thrilling and excited for me.

✓ If I had a chance, I would walk through the forest because I think it's very thrilling and exciting for me.

Conditional sentence: 'If I had a chance' is a second conditional requiring 'would' not 'will'. 'Work on the forest through the forest' is incorrect verb choice and repetition; use 'walk through the forest'. 'Excited' is an adjective describing a person; use 'exciting' to describe the forest as causing excitement. Also 'thrilling and exciting' are both adjectives describing the experience; keep 'exciting' as predicate adjective with 'very' if needed.

× I also think I will work with my friends and we can talk together during the day.

✓ I also think I will go with my friends and we can talk together during the day.

'Work with my friends' is incorrect in this context; 'go with' or 'walk with' fits better. 'Will' is acceptable for future intention, but earlier conditional used 'If I had a chance' should pair with 'would'; if sticking to conditional rephrase: 'I would go with my friends and we could talk together during the day.' Use base verb 'go' or 'walk' not 'work'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk lately?

This question is grammatically correct using past tense 'did you go'. No change needed.

× Lately I think I work with my parents on the other park.

✓ Lately I went with my parents to another park.

For a recent past action, use past tense 'went' not present 'work'. 'On the other park' is incorrect preposition and article; use 'to another park'. 'Lately I think' is awkward when describing a real past event; use 'Recently' or 'Lately I went...'. Suggest: 'Recently I went with my parents to another park.'

× We talk together about the my examinations lately previous and they also talk their pressure on at the work.

✓ We talked together about my recent examinations and they also talked about their pressure at work.

Pronoun and article errors: 'the my examinations' should be 'my recent examinations' (remove extra article 'the' and 'previous' is redundant with 'lately'); use past tense 'talked'. 'They also talk their pressure on at the work' is ungrammatical: use 'they also talked about their pressure at work'—add the preposition 'about' and correct word order. Remove extra 'the' before 'work' and unnecessary prepositions.