Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise, use natural tense and vary vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one brief supporting detail and a reason. Avoid unnecessary future tense (‘I will be having’).

例: Yes, I walk quite regularly after work and try to reach at least 10,000 steps a day. I do this because it helps me stay fit and clears my mind after a busy day.

提案: Good structure and details. Improve by using one cohesive linking phrase and correcting verb forms for consistency (past simple). Slightly shorten to stay within 4–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I often went outside after school to walk or play with friends. We usually walked around the neighbourhood, rode our bikes and played outdoor games until it got dark.

提案: Strong answer with clear reasons and examples. To improve, use a linking word to connect points and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., ‘relaxing atmosphere’ instead of repeating ‘peaceful/serene’). Keep it concise.

例: People like walking in parks because they provide a relaxing atmosphere and greenery, which helps them escape city noise. Moreover, parks offer open spaces for gentle exercise and fresh air, improving both physical and mental well-being.

提案: Very natural and coherent. Tighten phrasing by combining similar ideas and using a linking phrase like ‘because’ or ‘so’. Avoid repeating ‘during that time’.

例: I would choose to walk early in the morning or at sunset because the temperatures are milder and there are fewer people. This peaceful setting helps me relax and clear my mind.

提案: Improve grammar, tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past simple or present perfect, then give one specific detail and a reason. Avoid comma splices and vague phrasing like ‘a lot of people like spending time there’.

例: Lately I've been walking in various parks around Singapore. Many families, friends and pet owners use those spaces, which creates a lively but pleasant atmosphere that helps me relax and reflect on my day.

× I ensure that I will be having at least 10,000 steps.

✓ I ensure that I will have at least 10,000 steps.

Using 'will be having' is an unnecessary continuous future (verb + -ing form) for a planned or certain quantity; 'will have' is the correct simple future. Use the simple future to state an intention or planned achievement. Suggestion: use 'I will have' or 'I ensure I get at least 10,000 steps.'

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The phrase 'to have a walk' is nonstandard in this context; 'for a walk' is the correct prepositional phrase for purpose. This is a past tense question using 'did', so base verb 'go' is correct. Suggestion: use 'go outside for a walk.'

× We usually walk around our neighborhood, rode our bikes or played outdoor games until it got dark.

✓ We usually walked around our neighborhood, rode our bikes, or played outdoor games until it got dark.

The sentence mixes present tense 'walk' with past tense verbs 'rode' and 'played' in a description of childhood. Maintain past tense consistently: change 'walk' to 'walked' (past participle not needed here, simple past). Suggestion: keep all verbs in simple past when describing past habitual actions.

× Parks are usually full of trees, flowers, and open spaces, which can actually help people escape the noise and stress of city life.

✓ Parks are usually full of trees, flowers, and open spaces, which can actually help people escape the noise and stress of city life.

This sentence is grammatically correct; the prepositions are used appropriately. No change needed. (Included here to acknowledge no preposition error.)

× If I had a chance, I would love to walk early in the morning or just before sunset.

✓ If I had the chance, I would love to walk early in the morning or just before sunset.

Use 'the chance' rather than 'a chance' when referring to a specific opportunity mentioned in the question. This is a pronoun/article choice that affects naturalness. Suggestion: use 'the chance' for a particular opportunity.

× The past weeks I've been walking in Singapore, there are a lot of people like spending time there with their family, friends or even their pets, making it more enjoyable to walk.

✓ Over the past few weeks I've been walking in Singapore. There are a lot of people who like spending time there with their families, friends, or even their pets, which makes walking more enjoyable.

Multiple issues: 'The past weeks' should be 'Over the past few weeks' (article and pluralization/phrase). Run-on sentence separated into two. 'People like spending' needs relative pronoun 'who'. 'Family' should be plural 'families' to match 'a lot of people'. 'Making it more enjoyable' is a dangling participle; revise to 'which makes walking more enjoyable' for correct grammar and agreement. Suggestion: break long sentences, use relative pronouns, and ensure noun number agreement.

× And walking at those times help me relax and reflect on my day.

✓ And walking at those times helps me relax and reflect on my day.

Subject-verb agreement: 'walking' (singular gerund) requires singular verb 'helps'. The original 'help' is incorrect for this subject. Suggestion: use 'helps' with singular gerund subjects.