Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer and keep it concise. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verbs, and one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and irrelevant ideas (e.g., disease prevention is okay but be specific).

例: No, I don't walk a lot. I usually work early in the morning, so I prefer to rest afterward. As a result, I rarely go for walks during the day, though I sometimes walk on weekends to stay active.

提案: Answer directly and use past simple consistently. Keep sentences clear and avoid confusing pronouns. Provide one or two specific details (where, who, what you did) and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I often went for walks with my grandmother when I was a child. She liked to walk in the evenings, so I went with her to the nearby park where we would talk and watch birds.

提案: Start with a clear general statement and then give specific reasons, using linking words (for example, because, and, also). Keep sentences shorter and avoid awkward word choices ('working' -> 'walking').

例: People like to walk in parks because the environment is peaceful and attractive. For example, the fresh air and trees help them relax, and they can see others exercising or children playing, which makes the park lively.

提案: Use the conditional correctly ('If I had the chance') and make one clear choice. Give two specific reasons with linking phrases and avoid vague phrases like 'many scenes' or repetitive structures.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Rock Park because it is near my house and very spacious. Also, it has outdoor gym equipment and scenic paths, which would make a long walk enjoyable and good for exercise.

提案: Use past simple for completed actions and correct subject-verb order. Begin with a direct answer, then add one or two clear reasons or details. Avoid repetition and unnecessary phrases like 'eventually' or 'too much interest'.

例: Last week my family and I went to the Rose Garden. It is a popular park in my hometown, especially on weekends, because there are activities for children and sometimes special events or discounts.

× No, I usually not prefer to work a lot.

✓ No, I usually do not prefer to work a lot.

The original sentence uses incorrect negation and auxiliary placement. In present simple negative sentences you must use the auxiliary do/does + not before the base verb: 'do not prefer'. Also 'usually' typically comes before the auxiliary: 'I usually do not prefer' or 'I do not usually prefer'. Suggestion: say 'I usually do not prefer to work a lot' or 'I do not usually prefer to work a lot.'

× I already work in the early morning so that I feel relaxed and even I am stay away from different type of diseases.

✓ I already work in the early morning so I feel relaxed and I stay away from different types of diseases.

Problems: 'already work' is acceptable but awkward; 'so that' is unnecessary here, 'so' is better; 'even I am stay' mixes auxiliary and base form incorrectly. Use simple present 'I stay'. Also 'different type of diseases' should be pluralized as 'different types of diseases' or 'different kinds of diseases'. Suggestion: 'I work in the early morning so I feel relaxed and I stay away from different types of diseases.'

× That's why I usually prefer to work in morning otherwise I don't like to work.

✓ That's why I usually prefer to work in the morning; otherwise I don't like to work.

Missing article before 'morning' — use 'the morning'. Also run-on sentence needs a semicolon or 'and'. Suggestion: include 'the' and separate clauses: '...work in the morning; otherwise, I don't like to work.'

× Yes, I remember that when I was there I usually prefer to go outside with my grandmother for working because she always go for work in the evening time or morning time and they always asked me to go with her and I prefer to go with her for a.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was there I usually preferred to go outside with my grandmother because she always went to work in the evening or morning, and she always asked me to go with her.

This sentence refers to past habitual actions, so use past simple (preferred, went, asked). 'Prefer to go outside with my grandmother for working' is unnatural; use 'go outside with my grandmother'. 'They always asked' is wrong pronoun; use 'she always asked'. The ending 'for a.' is incomplete and removed. Suggestion: use past tense for past habits and correct pronouns: 'I usually preferred... because she always went... and she always asked me to go with her.'

× There are many people who like to go in parks for walking but they believe that while working in the park they feel relaxed and it's a beautiful environment there due to many old people are already there and doing some yoga and exercise, even some children are also playing.

✓ There are many people who like to go to parks for walks because they believe that while walking in the park they feel relaxed. It's a beautiful environment, with many older people already there doing yoga and exercise, and some children playing.

Use 'go to parks' or 'go to the park' not 'go in parks'. 'For walking' is better as 'for walks'. 'While working in the park' is wrong verb; use 'walking'. 'Due to many old people are already there' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'with many older people...'. Also use 'older' instead of 'old' for politeness. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and clearer clause order: 'go to parks for walks' and 'while walking in the park.'

× If I have a chance to go for a walk, I usually prefer to go to the rock park because it is one of the park which is near my house and it is too big and there are many scenes and there are many other tools of gyms are there which helps the person to lose their weight as well even there are some.

✓ If I had the chance to go for a walk, I would prefer to go to the Rock Park because it is one of the parks near my house. It is very large and has many scenic areas and gym equipment that help people lose weight.

The question asked a hypothetical 'Where would you like...' so use the second conditional: 'If I had... I would prefer...' Also 'one of the park' should be 'one of the parks'. 'Too big' is colloquial; use 'very large'. 'There are many scenes' is incorrect; use 'scenic areas'. 'Many other tools of gyms are there' should be 'gym equipment'. Remove the trailing incomplete clause. Suggestion: use correct conditional form and pluralization and replace awkward phrases with natural vocabulary.

× Usually I remember that last week me and my family go together for a Rose Garden park because it is one of the famous parks in my hometown and many people prefer to go there in weekends because in weekends there are many offers present there and many people eventually many children are there to play different type of games because they have too much interest to play.

✓ I remember that last week my family and I went to Rose Garden Park because it is one of the famous parks in my hometown. Many people prefer to go there on weekends because there are many events and offers, and many children go to play different kinds of games because they are very interested in playing.

Use past simple for completed actions: 'went'. Pronoun order should be 'my family and I' not 'me and my family'. 'For a Rose Garden park' is wrong article use — use the park name without 'a'. Use 'on weekends' not 'in weekends'. 'Offers present there' is awkward; 'events and offers' is clearer. 'Different type of games' should be 'different kinds of games'. Suggestion: correct subject order, past tense, prepositions, and pluralization.