Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap kısa ve doğrudan; ancak biraz daha ayrıntı ve bağlaç ekleyerek daha doğal ve etkili hale getirebilirsiniz. Örneğin neden kısa mesafeleri tercih ettiğinizi ve ne sıklıkta yürüdüğünüzü belirtin.

例: Yes, I walk quite regularly. I usually walk short distances, mainly for errands or to the nearby park, because I find it quicker and healthier than driving.

提案: Cevap tekrarlı ve dağınık; cümle yapısını düzeltip daha akıcı detay ekleyin. Hangi aktiviteleri yaptığınızı, kiminle yürüdüğünüzü veya ne sıklıkla yürüdüğünüzü belirtmek faydalı olur.

例: Yes, I did. I grew up in a village, so I often went for walks and hikes in the nearby forest with my friends and family, usually almost every weekend.

提案: Genel bir fikir vermişsiniz fakat doğru bağlam ve daha spesifik nedenler ekleyerek cümleyi güçlendirin. Ayrıca 'the States' gibi belirsiz ifadelerden kaçının ve insanlara görüş, temiz hava, güvenlik gibi sebepler sunun.

例: People like walking in parks because they offer fresh air, green space and a peaceful environment, especially in cities where there are many buildings and limited open areas.

提案: Cümledeki anlam belirsiz ve kelime seçimi hatalı. Neden deniz kenarını tercih ettiğinizi açıkça söyleyin ve duygusal ya da görsel detaylar ekleyin. Ayrıca cümle yapısını daha doğal hale getirin.

例: I would love to take a long walk by the seaside because I enjoy the sound of the waves and the open view, which helps me relax and think clearly.

提案: Cevap net fakat küçük bir tekrar hatası ve daha fazla bağlam eksik. Gitme zamanını ve yürüyüşün nasıl olduğunu, kiminle gittiğinizi veya ne kadar sürdüğünü ekleyerek yanıtı geliştirin.

例: Recently I went for a walk at Amar Lake since there is no sea nearby in Ankara; I went with a friend and we walked along the shore for about an hour, enjoying the scenery.

× Yes I do. I prefer walking for short distances.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer walking short distances.

The original sentence uses 'walking for short distances' which is not incorrect but slightly wordy. More natural English omits 'for' in this context: 'walking short distances.' Also a comma is needed after 'Yes'. Suggestion: use 'prefer' + gerund without 'for' when indicating general preference (prefer walking short distances).

× Yes, I did. I spent my childhood in the village, in my village. I used to. Hiking in forest.

✓ Yes, I did. I spent my childhood in my village. I used to go hiking in the forest.

Sentence fragments and repetition occur. 'I used to.' is a fragment; it should be followed by the activity. 'Hiking in forest' lacks an article and proper verb. Combine into a full sentence: 'I used to go hiking in the forest.' Also remove redundant 'the village, in my village' and use 'my village.'

× Because there are lots of buildings in the States and so people can only walk in the park.

✓ Because there are lots of buildings in the city and so people can only walk in parks.

The phrase 'in the States' is ambiguous and likely incorrect here; 'the city' or 'cities' fits better. Also 'the park' implies a single park; use plural 'parks' if speaking generally. Preposition 'in' is fine but article usage and noun choice should match generalization: 'in cities' or 'in the city' and 'walk in parks.'

× I usually prefer Seaside for a long walk because I like watching to see when I'm walking.

✓ I usually prefer the seaside for a long walk because I like watching the sea when I'm walking.

Proper noun/phrase needs an article: 'the seaside.' 'Watching to see' is ungrammatical; use 'watching the sea' or 'seeing the sea.' Also 'sea' not 'see.' Replace 'see' (verb) with 'sea' (noun).

× I went to to Amar Lake because there isn't a sea in Ankara.

✓ I went to Amar Lake because there isn't a sea in Ankara.

There is a duplicated 'to' (typo). The rest is fine: past tense 'went' is correct and present 'isn't' correctly states a general fact about Ankara. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'to' and ensure spacing is correct.