Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且有语法和词汇错误。要直接回应问题（walk 而非 work），用一到两句清楚表述自己的习惯并给出简短原因。注意主谓一致和词汇选择（lazy people → a bit lazy / not very active）。

例: Not really. I don't walk much—maybe once in a while—because I'm a bit lazy and often commute by bike or bus.

提案: 回答混乱且语法错误多（时态、人称、词汇）。要直接给出过去习惯的陈述，使用正确过去时并提供具体细节或例子，避免不必要的口头语。

例: I can't remember everything, but I usually walked a lot as a child. We didn't have mobile phones, so I often walked to school and played outside with friends every day.

提案: 总体思路可以，但表达不够清晰且有词汇误用（care time？start to working）。建议先给一到两条主要原因，用连接词展开并举具体例子或结果。注意用词：spend time, exercise, relax。

例: I think people walk in parks mainly to relax and exercise. For example, many young people go jogging or brisk-walking there to stay fit, while others walk to enjoy fresh air and relieve stress.

提案: 回答较清楚但有小错误（more fresher 重复比较级）。可以用一到两句说明原因并加一点细节（景色、quietness）。注意比较级用法（fresher）。

例: I'd like to walk along the river near my house because it's convenient and the air there is fresher. The riverside is also peaceful and has nice scenery, which makes long walks enjoyable.

提案: 时态和句子结构有误（混用现在时和过去时），表达不够简洁。应直接说最近去了哪里，用过去时并说明原因，注意逻辑连接。

例: Recently I went for a walk in a nearby park because my mother suggested it—she thought it wasn't healthy for me to stay indoors all day, so I went to get some fresh air.

× No, I don't work a lot and I work once in a while because I'm the kind of some lazy people.

✓ No, I don't walk a lot — I walk only once in a while because I'm the kind of lazy person.

句中有代词和名词搭配错误：“some lazy people” 用法不当且与前文的主语单数含义不一致。应使用单数短语“the kind of lazy person”或复数结构重新组织句子。此外原句把 walk 写成 work（拼写/词义错误），需要改为 walk。建议：注意代词与名词的一致性，并检查单词拼写与语义。

× Or Even so, I can't remember some details, but I guess I go went for a walking on a daily basis when I were a child because you know, I didn't have a cell phone when I was young. So the only way to care time is working outside.

✓ Even so, I can't remember some details, but I guess I went for a walk on a daily basis when I was a child because, you know, I didn't have a cell phone when I was young. So the only way to pass the time was to go outside.

句中动词时态和形式多处错误：1) “go went” 是重复且错误的形式，应为过去式 went；2) “for a walking” 名词用法错误，应为 “for a walk” 或 “to go for walks”；3) “when I were a child” 主语与动词不一致，应为 “when I was a child”；4) 后半句时态应与前句一致，使用过去时 “was” 和不定式结构 “to go outside” 更自然。建议：回顾过去时用法和名词短语的固定搭配（go for a walk, pass the time）。

× Where I think there are many reasons to do that. As I mentioned they may be just care time and more and more young people start to working in the parks because they think it is a healthy way for them to lose weight.

✓ I think there are many reasons for that. As I mentioned, they may be just to pass the time, and more and more young people start working in the parks because they think it is a healthy way for them to lose weight.

句首使用了错误的疑问词“Where”，应为陈述句“I think...”。另外：“care time” 用法错误，应为“pass the time”；“start to working” 动词形式错误，正确为 “start working” 或 “start to work”。建议：注意句子引导词的使用，记住常见动词短语（pass the time, start working）。

× Maybe I would like to take a walk along the river because there is a river next to my house so it is convenient and the air is more fresher along the river.

✓ Maybe I would like to take a walk along the river because there is a river next to my house, so it is convenient and the air is fresher along the river.

问题包括比较级使用错误和冗余副词：“more fresher” 是重复比较，应只用 “fresher”。句子中逻辑和连接可用逗号分隔使更清晰。建议：比较级不需要 “more” 与 -er 同时使用，检查冗余词。

× Where I go for a walk in a park nearby and my mom told me to do so because it is not here safe for me to sit for the whole day.

✓ I went for a walk in a nearby park and my mom told me to do so because it is not safe for me to stay at home all day.

句首不应使用“Where”，应直接陈述“I went...”。时态应为过去式“went”。“a park nearby” 词序更自然为 “a nearby park”。“it is not here safe” 词序错误，正确为 “it is not safe here” 或更自然的 “it is not safe for me to stay at home all day”。建议：注意英语中地点词顺和形容词位置，使用合适时态表达过去的动作。