Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 表达不自然且有多处词汇使用错误（把“walk”误为“work”）。句子重复且冗长，信息组织欠清晰。需要直接回答问题，使用明确主题句，随后用一到两句具体细节支持，并使用连接词使表达连贯。注意动词选择和时态。

例: Yes, I walk to work every day. It takes me about 20 minutes, which helps me stay fit and gives me time to plan my day. For example, I often use the walk to review my tasks and clear my mind before work.

提案: 回答总体相关但存在词汇混淆（again 用“working”应为“walking”），回答中有口语填充词和冗余。应先用主题句直接回答，再用具体细节（地点、频率、感受或原因）支撑，并用连接词连接句子。避免泛泛而谈的“etc.”。

例: Yes, I walked a lot as a child. I usually walked to school and to my grandparents' house, and I enjoyed meeting friends on the way, which made the trips fun and social.

提案: 回答含大量犹豫词和重复，语句啰嗦且不够精炼。内容可以更具体，例如列出公园步行的几个主要原因并用连接词衔接。注意减少填充词，使用更自然的表达。

例: People walk in parks mainly to exercise and relax. For example, older adults often walk there to keep fit and to socialize with friends, while others enjoy the fresh air and peaceful environment.

提案: 有表达意图，但发音停顿和重复（breath, ex exciting），句子结构不够紧凑。应先给出直接回答，然后用两到三个具体理由支持（如空气、风景、安静），并用恰当的连接词与正确时态。

例: I'd choose to walk in the mountains. The fresh air and peaceful surroundings would be refreshing, and I could enjoy beautiful scenery and discover interesting plants and wildlife.

提案: 多处把“walk”误说为“work”，词汇错误影响理解；句子有语法和搭配问题（e.g. “distant distance”）。回答应直接说明最近走到哪里，用准确动词和自然搭配，并给出具体时间或感受作为支持。

例: Recently I walked from the bus station to my office, which takes about seven minutes. I enjoy this short walk because it helps me clear my head before starting work.

× Yes, I do work a lot.

✓ Yes, I do walk a lot.

学生原句用“work”与考官问题“Do you walk a lot?”不匹配。此处需要重复或强调“walk”，而非“work”。建议在回答中使用与提问动词一致的过去/现在时态（此处为一般现在），所以改为“Yes, I do walk a lot.” 表示确实经常走路。

× I prefer walking to the workplace every day to taking any public transport.

✓ I prefer walking to the workplace every day rather than taking any public transport.

句中比较结构用法不正确。动词短语比较应使用“rather than”或“to ... rather than ...”。原句“to taking”与前面“walking to the workplace”结构混淆。建议使用“rather than taking”或把两者并列为“I prefer walking to the workplace every day instead of taking public transport.”

× I think that working helps me to keep fit and I can think a lot while I'm working on the way.

✓ I think that walking helps me to keep fit and I can think a lot while I'm walking on the way.

此处应保持主词动作一致，原句把“walking”与“working”混用，导致意思混乱。动词时态应为一般现在表示习惯动作，且与前句中的活动一致，因此将“working”改为“walking”，并把“I'm working on the way”改为“I'm walking on the way”或更自然的“while I'm walking.”

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ (No correction needed)

该问题句没有语法错误，时态与结构正确，适合提问过去的习惯行为。

× Sure, when I was a child I often walked to places such as school, my grandparents house, and some public places like shops, restaurants, et cetera.

✓ Sure, when I was a child I often walked to places such as school, my grandparents' house, and public places like shops and restaurants.

需要在“grandparents”后加所有格撇号（grandparents' house）。“some public places like shops, restaurants, et cetera”冗长且“et cetera”不自然，建议简化为“public places like shops and restaurants.”

× Uh, I preferred working because I could meet my friends on my way.

✓ Uh, I preferred walking because I could meet my friends on my way.

与上下文一致，应为“walking”而非“working”。动词选择错误改变句意。保持一般过去时“preferred”与从句“could meet”一致即可。

× Yes, I definitely notice this kind of phenomenon like, uh, especially the elderly people, uh, like uh, walking in the parks, maybe they want to keep fit by walking and they can, uh, chat with each other on their way walking and it is a kind of a very healthy habit.

✓ Yes, I definitely notice this kind of phenomenon, especially elderly people walking in parks. Maybe they want to keep fit by walking, and they can chat with each other on their walks. It is a very healthy habit.

句子冗长且有多处问题：去掉多余的“the”使“elderly people”泛指；“walking in the parks”改为“walking in parks”更自然；“on their way walking”不自然，改为“on their walks”。去掉多余冠词和填词，分句以提高可读性。

× Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?

✓ (No correction needed)

该条件句使用虚拟语气正确，would + have the chance 表达愿望，句子语法正确。

× I would like to walk in the distant mountains if I had chance to take a long walk because in the mountains you can breath, breath, uh, fresh air.

✓ I would like to walk in the distant mountains if I had the chance to take a long walk because in the mountains you can breathe fresh air.

“have chance”缺少冠词，改为“have the chance”。动词“breath”是名词，动词应为“breathe”。时态与虚拟语气搭配正确。

× And maybe you can find something very interesting and ex exciting.

✓ And maybe you can find something very interesting and exciting.

原句中“ex exciting”是重复或输入错误，删除多余部分并保留“interesting and exciting”。

× And of course you can enjoy the splendid landscape while you were, while you are.

✓ And of course you can enjoy the splendid landscape while you are there.

原句时态混用（were / are）且句尾缺词。保持一致用现在时“are”并补全地点词“there”以使句子完整自然。

× Lately I worked from the bus station to my workplace.

✓ Lately I walked from the bus station to my workplace.

问题句要求过去或最近的经历，“worked”与上下文不符，应为“walked”。如果想表达“我从车站走到工作地点”，用“walked”。

× It usually takes me 7 minutes from the station to the office and I enjoy this distant distance of working because I can make my brain fresh on the way.

✓ It usually takes me seven minutes from the station to the office and I enjoy this short walk because it freshens my mind on the way.

“7”写作单词“seven”更正式；“distant distance of working”表达重复且不自然，改为“short walk”。“make my brain fresh”不地道，改为“freshens my mind”。时态使用一般现在表示习惯正确。