Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct, use a clear topic sentence, and avoid redundancy. Say when and how often you walk, give one reason and a short supporting detail. Use linking words like because or so.

例: Yes, I walk regularly, usually for about 30 minutes every morning because it keeps me fit and helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: Use past tense consistently, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific details about where you walked and why it was memorable. Use linking words such as and or because.

例: Yes, I often went for walks with my family when I was a child, especially in local gardens, and I remember those outings because we played games and had picnics together.

提案: Use correct verbs (walk, not work) and avoid vague phrases like "more vibe." Give one clear reason and a specific supporting detail. Use linking words such as because and for example.

例: People like walking in parks because the peaceful setting and fresh air help them relax; for example, the trees and flowers make the walk feel calming and refreshing.

提案: Keep the conditional structure correct (would/could), state the place clearly, and add a specific reason. Correct word choice (spot, not sport) and verb forms. Use linking words like because or since.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk around Sukhna Lake in Chandigarh because it is a scenic spot where many people exercise in the morning and the views are very pleasant.

提案: Use past tense for a recent action (went), be specific about when you went and why. Avoid repetition and correct plural/singular agreement. Use linking words such as after or because.

例: I went for a walk recently in our Central Park, which is in the heart of the city; I usually walk there after dinner because the paths are well lit and the atmosphere is pleasant.

× Yes I usually woke alert a lot because it keeps me my body fit and also unwinds me.

✓ Yes, I usually wake up early a lot because it keeps my body fit and also unwinds me.

The student used 'woke' (past tense) where present simple 'wake up' is needed because they describe a habitual action. Also word order and vocabulary: 'wake up early' not 'woke alert', and 'keeps my body fit' requires correct possessive 'my body'. Use 'unwinds me' is acceptable but 'also helps me relax' is more natural. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and correct verb forms and word order. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, when I was a child I go fun with my family outside and for walk for walking in gardens and it was a memorable experience to working with my family.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to have fun with my family outside and go for walks in gardens; it was a memorable experience to spend time with my family.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. 'I go fun' is incorrect; use 'I used to have fun' or 'I had fun' for past habitual actions. 'for walk for walking' should be 'go for walks' or 'walking' but keep consistent. 'to working' should be 'to spend time' or 'working' corrected to appropriate infinitive/noun form. Suggestion: use past simple or 'used to' for past habits, and use correct verb phrases like 'go for walks' and 'spend time'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I think mostly people like to work in parks because of their environment. The peaceful environment and the lush greenery gives a more vibe to work and also gives a good positive energy.

✓ I think most people like to walk in parks because of the environment. The peaceful atmosphere and the lush greenery give a better vibe and positive energy.

Multiple issues: 'mostly people' -> 'most people' (adverb/adjective use); 'like to work in parks' is wrong contextually — should be 'walk'. 'gives' is singular but the subject 'atmosphere and greenery' is plural so use 'give' (subject-verb agreement). 'a more vibe' is ungrammatical; 'a better vibe' or 'more of a vibe' works. Suggestion: choose correct verb for the activity, ensure adjective/adverb choice is correct, and maintain subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Well, if I get a chance, I want to walk near the Sukhna Lake. It's located in Chandigarh as it's a very highly tourist sport and many of individuals going work in the morning at Sukhna Lake and it's a great fun.

✓ Well, if I had the chance, I would like to walk near Sukhna Lake. It's located in Chandigarh and is a very popular tourist spot; many people go there to exercise in the morning, and it's a lot of fun.

Conditional tense: the question asks a hypothetical; use second conditional 'if I had... I would...'. 'the Sukhna Lake' should be 'Sukhna Lake' (no definite article). 'very highly tourist sport' should be 'very popular tourist spot'. 'many of individuals going work' is ungrammatical — use 'many people go there to exercise' or 'many people go there in the morning'. Suggestion: use proper conditional forms, correct article usage with place names, and common collocations like 'popular tourist spot' and 'a lot of fun'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Well I want to go for a walk lately on my on our Central Park that are located in the heart of the city and it's a great fun and the all environment is good for a walk lately after having a dinner.

✓ Well, I went for a walk recently in our Central Park, which is located in the heart of the city. It's great fun, and the whole environment is good for a walk after having dinner.

The student uses 'want to go' and 'lately' incorrectly for a past event; use 'went' or 'recently' to match past time. 'my on our Central Park' is incorrect; use 'our Central Park'. 'that are located' should be 'which is located' because 'Central Park' is singular. 'the all environment' -> 'the whole environment' or 'the overall environment'. 'after having a dinner' -> 'after having dinner' (no article). Suggestion: match tense to time expressions, ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct articles and determiners, and use natural collocations like 'recently' and 'after dinner'. Grammar problem type ID:6