Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition ("also" twice) and unnecessary capitalisation. Improve pronunciation of key words and use a natural phrase like "I walk a lot" rather than "I do work a lot."

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually go for a 30-minute walk every morning because it keeps me fit and clears my mind, which helps me concentrate during the day.

提案: Good direct answer and contrast. Make the sentence flow more naturally by using a clear linking phrase and a concise structure. Replace "did not used to" with "didn't usually". Add a brief specific example of outdoor play to enrich the answer.

例: Not really. I didn't usually go for walks as a child; instead, I spent a lot of time playing football and climbing trees with my friends.

提案: Provide a topic sentence then add a specific reason or example with linking words. Expand slightly to show vocabulary and detail (e.g., fresh air, scenery, safe paths).

例: I think people walk in parks because they are peaceful and relaxing; for example, the fresh air, greenery and safe paths make it easy to exercise or chat with friends.

提案: Use correct conditional tense and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence and add two specific details (scenery, atmosphere). Avoid filler sounds like "uh". Correct phrasing: "I would like to walk by Fewa Lake in Pokhara."

例: If I had the chance, I would like to walk along Fewa Lake in Pokhara because the views of the mountains are stunning and the lakeside is well-lit and lively in the evening.

提案: Answer directly, use past tense cleanly, and give one or two specific details about the place or your experience. Remove filler words and correct collocations ("go for a walk to Bhagnashtal" or "walk at Bhagnashtal").

例: Recently I went for a walk at Bhagnashtal, which is close to my home; it's a peaceful area with lots of trees and a small pond where I like to relax.

× Yes, I do work a lot because it makes me healthy and fit.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because it keeps me healthy and fit.

The original uses 'do work' incorrectly; the question asked about walking, so 'walk' or 'walk a lot' fits. Additionally, 'makes me healthy and fit' is grammatically okay but 'keeps me healthy and fit' is more natural for habitual activities. Use the base verb 'walk' for habitual action and 'keeps' (third person singular) to agree with the subject 'it'.

× Also I like walking because it also gives me Peace of Mind.

✓ Also, I like walking because it gives me peace of mind.

'Peace of Mind' should not be capitalized mid-sentence. The adverb 'also' is duplicated and unnecessary; one occurrence is enough. Use lowercase for the phrase and include a comma after 'Also' for clarity.

× Not particularly. When I was a child I did not used to go for a walk, but I used to play outdoors a lot.

✓ Not particularly. When I was a child I did not use to go for walks, but I used to play outdoors a lot.

After 'did' the bare infinitive 'use' should be used, not 'used' ('did not use to'). Also 'go for a walk' can be pluralized to 'go for walks' to indicate habitual action in childhood. Maintain past habitual 'used to' for the positive clause.

× In my opinion, they like to walk in park because it is peaceful.

✓ In my opinion, they like to walk in the park because it is peaceful.

When referring to a specific type of place generally, English requires the definite article 'the' before 'park' in this context: 'walk in the park.' Without the article the phrase is ungrammatical.

× If I had the chance, I will like walking by a lake, uh, preferably Fever Lake, which is situated in Pokhara only.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk by a lake, preferably Fever Lake, which is located only in Pokhara.

This is a second conditional sentence (unreal present), so 'would' plus base verb is required ('would like to walk'), not 'will like walking.' Use infinitive 'to walk' after 'would like.' 'Situated in Pokhara only' is awkward; 'located only in Pokhara' or simply 'located in Pokhara' is clearer.

× It is, uh, very beautiful when we, uh, walk and at the evening also everywhere there is lighting and uh.

✓ It is very beautiful when we walk, and in the evening there are lights everywhere.

Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas. Use 'in the evening' not 'at the evening.' 'There is lighting' is unnatural; use 'there are lights' or 'it is well lit.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'lights' plural with 'are.'

× Uh, recently I went, uh, to work on Bhagnashtal.

✓ Recently I went to Bhagnashtal to walk.

The original 'went to work on Bhagnashtal' is confusing. If the intent is to say they went to Bhagnashtal for a walk, rephrase to 'went to Bhagnashtal to walk.' Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas. Also avoid 'to work on' unless that was the intended meaning.

× It is, uh, very near to my home and it is really, uh, peaceful place.

✓ It is very near my home and it is a really peaceful place.

Remove filler words and adjust preposition: 'near my home' not 'near to my home' (both are acceptable in some dialects, but 'near my home' is more natural). Include the article 'a' before 'really peaceful place.' Ensure word order 'a really peaceful place.'