Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Use correct verb forms and prepositions, and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I walk almost every evening with my family. We usually go to the nearby park for about 30 minutes because it is peaceful and good exercise.

提案: Use past tense consistently and organise your answer: a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific examples. Avoid fillers and repeated words.

例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. For example, I would play games, run around the playground and sometimes go skipping with my friends after school.

提案: Give a concise main idea, then support it with two specific reasons. Use articles and plural/singular forms correctly and link ideas with connectors like 'because' or 'so'.

例: People prefer walking in parks because they are quieter and safer than roads. Also, parks have open spaces and playgrounds where children can play, and paths where adults can jog or walk comfortably.

提案: Be precise and coherent. State the place clearly, use conditional form for 'if I had the chance', and give a specific reason. Avoid repeating ideas.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk to the gurdwara about 30 kilometres away from my home. I would walk there to fulfill a personal wish and because many devotees prefer to make the journey on foot.

提案: Use past tense for a recent activity and be specific about when and why. Start with a clear past-tense sentence, then add one detail about the place or people.

例: Recently I went for a walk near my friend's house in the evening. There is a small park nearby where many people gather at night to walk and spend time with family.

× Yeah, I everyday I walk with my family in the evening I always go park and doing work.

✓ Yes, I walk with my family every evening. I always go to the park and do some chores.

The sentence has several present tense and word order problems: 'I everyday I walk' is incorrect word order; 'everyday' should be 'every evening' or 'every day' depending on meaning, and it should be placed after the verb phrase. 'I always go park' needs the preposition 'to' and article/structure: 'go to the park'. 'doing work' uses the -ing form incorrectly here; use the base verb 'do' for routine actions. Suggestion: place adverbs of frequency correctly (before main verb or after auxiliary), use 'go to the park', and use simple present for habitual actions.

× Of course, when I was a child, I go outside to play and for a walk with my friends.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I went outside to play and take walks with my friends.

The clause 'when I was a child' sets past time, so the verb should be past tense. 'go' should be 'went'. 'for a walk' is better expressed as 'take walks' or 'go for walks' in plural for repeated actions. Suggestion: match verbs to past time and use 'go for walks' or 'take walks' for habitual past actions.

× I always do some exercises and some activities like running, go walking or skipping go etcetera.

✓ I always do some exercises and activities like running, walking, or skipping, etc.

Mixed forms: list items should be parallel. 'running' and 'skipping' are correct gerunds, but 'go walking' and 'go' are incorrect here. Use 'walking' to match 'running' and 'skipping'. Also avoid repeating 'some' unnecessarily. Suggestion: use parallel gerunds in lists and remove redundant words.

× In in my childhood when my friends.

✓ (Remove or complete) In my childhood, I spent time with my friends.

This fragment 'In in my childhood when my friends.' is an incomplete sentence (no main verb) and has a duplicated word 'In'. It needs completion. Suggestion: either remove the fragment or complete it with a main clause, e.g., 'In my childhood, I often played with my friends.'

× Most of people like to walk in a park because there is a quietness.

✓ Most people like to walk in parks because they are quiet.

'Most of people' is incorrect; use 'Most people'. 'a park' is too specific when speaking generally—use plural 'parks' or 'the park' if specific. 'there is a quietness' is unnatural; use 'they are quiet' or 'it is quiet'. Suggestion: use 'most people', plural nouns for general statements, and natural expressions like 'quiet' instead of 'quietness' here.

× Most of children go to the park to play and there is a some area for doing running and walking.

✓ Most children go to the park to play, and there is an area for running and walking.

'Most of children' should be 'Most children'. 'a some area' incorrectly combines 'a' and 'some'; use 'an area' or 'some areas'. 'doing running and walking' is awkward—use 'for running and walking'. Suggestion: use correct quantifier forms and prepositional phrases: 'an area for running and walking.'

× So that's why most of people want to go park instead of on roads.

✓ So that's why most people want to go to the park instead of walking on the roads.

'Most of people' should be 'most people'. 'go park' needs 'go to the park'. 'instead of on roads' is ungrammatical; express comparison as 'instead of walking on the roads' or 'rather than on the road'. Suggestion: correct quantifier and add prepositions, and clarify the comparison.

× I want to go to the gurdwara, which is 30 kilometre from my house.

✓ I would like to go to the gurdwara, which is 30 kilometres from my house.

The question asked a hypothetical 'Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?' so 'would like' fits better than 'I want'. Also use plural 'kilometres' with numerals in British English; '30 kilometre' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'would like' for hypothetical preferences and correct noun number for units.

× It's my wish for my child and I go there by walking because I most of people go there by walking instead of doing transport using transport.

✓ It's my wish for my child and me to go there by walking because most people go there on foot instead of using transport.

Multiple errors: 'my child and I go there' should be 'my child and me to go there' in this infinitive structure. 'I most of people' is incorrect; use 'most people'. 'by walking' is acceptable but 'on foot' is more natural. 'instead of doing transport using transport' is wrong; use 'instead of using transportation' or 'instead of using transport'. Suggestion: use correct object pronoun 'me' in infinitive phrase, simplify to 'most people' and prefer 'on foot' or 'using transport'.

× I go to the for walk near my friend house because there is a some area for walk.

✓ I went for a walk near my friend's house because there is an area for walking.

Question 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' requires past tense: 'I went'. 'to the for walk' is garbled; use 'for a walk'. 'my friend house' needs possessive: 'my friend's house'. 'a some area' should be 'an area' and 'for walk' -> 'for walking'. Suggestion: use past tense for recent past, correct possessive forms, and proper articles.

× Most of people go there at night and spend time with their family and friends.

✓ Most people go there at night and spend time with their families and friends.

'Most of people' should be 'Most people'. 'their family' is better as 'their families' when referring to many groups of people. Suggestion: use correct quantifier and pluralize 'family' to agree with plural subject.