Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with a specific reason or example. Improve tense consistency: use “hated” and “thought” when referring to childhood. Also, connect contrasting ideas more naturally with “although” or “however,” and avoid repeating “reading” and “books.”

例: Yes, I love reading because it is one of my main hobbies. I can read around fifty books a year, especially novels and biographies. However, I hated reading when I was a child because I thought it was boring.

提案: State your preference clearly and avoid repeating the same point about eye pain. Use natural expressions such as “reading on a screen strains my eyes” instead of “my eyes are hurt.” Complete the final idea and use a linking word such as “also” to introduce the highlighting benefit.

例: I prefer reading on paper because screens tend to strain my eyes, especially when I read for a long time. Also, paper books allow me to highlight important words and phrases. For example, I often mark useful expressions when I am studying English.

提案: Your answer is relevant, but explain when you do not need to read carefully because the question asks for both situations. Replace “school books” with the more natural “textbooks,” and use “formulas,” not “formals.” Add a specific contrast, such as reading headlines or online posts quickly.

例: I need to read carefully when I study textbooks, especially sections containing historical dates or mathematical formulas. I also read exam instructions slowly so that I do not miss important details. However, I usually scan online news or social-media posts when I only want to find the main idea.

提案: Give one clear reason without repeating “because.” Use the natural phrase “remember what I have read” instead of “remember about what I have read,” and distinguish scanning from detailed reading more clearly. A brief example would make your answer more specific and effective.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand and remember the information more clearly. When I read a novel, for example, I can imagine the characters and follow the story in detail. I only scan texts when I am looking for a specific fact, such as a date or a name.

× I love reading. It's my hobby. I can read fifty books in a year so it's very interesting for me but when I was a child I hate reading books and I thought it would be very boring.

✓ I love reading. It's my hobby. I can read fifty books in a year, so it's very interesting to me, but when I was a child, I hated reading books and thought it would be very boring.

The time expression 'when I was a child' refers to the past, so the verb 'hate' must be changed to the past tense 'hated'. Use the past tense consistently when describing past feelings or habits.

× I prefer to read on paper because on screen when I read it's bad for my eyes. My eyes are hurt when I read on screen and if I read on paper, it's better because I can highlight words that I like, highlight phrases of the

✓ I prefer to read on paper because when I read on a screen, it's bad for my eyes. My eyes hurt when I read on a screen, and if I read on paper, it's better because I can highlight words that I like and phrases that I find useful.

Use the article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'screen' when referring to any screen in general. The phrase 'on a screen' is the natural form in this context.

× My eyes are hurt when I read on screen.

✓ My eyes hurt when I read on a screen.

The verb 'hurt' can be used as an intransitive verb when describing pain. 'My eyes hurt' is the correct present-tense form. 'Are hurt' incorrectly suggests that someone or something is hurting the eyes.

× I can highlight words that I like, highlight phrases of the

✓ I can highlight words that I like and phrases that I find useful.

The original phrase is incomplete and ends with 'of the', so it does not form a complete grammatical structure. Complete the noun phrase and connect the two parallel objects with 'and'.

× I need to read carefully when I read school books, paragraphs that I need to learn.

✓ I need to read carefully when I read school books and paragraphs that I need to learn.

The comma incorrectly separates two objects of the verb 'read'. Use the conjunction 'and' to connect 'school books' and 'paragraphs' clearly.

× I prefer detailed reading because Because I can imagine what I read, I can understand better because when I only scan I don't remember about what I have read, I don't memorize things.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because I can imagine what I read and understand it better. When I only scan, I don't remember what I have read or memorize things.

The conjunction 'because' is repeated unnecessarily at the beginning. Also, the original sentence contains too many clauses joined together without clear coordination. Use 'and' and 'or' to connect related ideas more clearly.

× I don't remember about what I have read.

✓ I don't remember what I have read.

The verb 'remember' takes a direct object and does not require the preposition 'about' before a noun clause. Say 'remember what I have read', not 'remember about what I have read'.