Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng về thời điểm hiện tại, dùng thì đúng và ngắt câu hợp lý. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (thì), sửa phát âm ý không rõ, và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể/ ví dụ để tự nhiên hơn. Nên dùng tối đa 3-4 câu, nối ý bằng liên từ thích hợp (e.g., but, because, so).

例: I enjoyed reading as a child, but I don't read much now because I spend a lot of time on my phone. For example, I often scroll social media in the evening instead of reading books. I hope to read more when I have free time.

提案: Ý chính rõ ràng và có lý do, nhưng câu hơi dài và có vài lỗi nhỏ (article -> articles, my paper -> paper books). Nên chia thành 2 câu, dùng từ vựng chính xác và thêm một ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ như because và for example để mạch lạc.

例: I prefer reading on a screen, especially my phone, because it is portable and I can look up words instantly. For example, when I read English articles I open a dictionary app to check unfamiliar vocabulary.

提案: Câu trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng thiếu sự mạch lạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp (really important -> is really important; exam, test redundant). Hãy dùng cấu trúc chủ đề + nguyên nhân và thêm ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ trong 2-3 câu.

例: I need to read carefully when the information is important, for example before an exam or when I prepare for an event. In those cases I read slowly and take notes to avoid mistakes.

提案: Cần sửa lỗi từ vựng quan trọng (breathing -> reading) và ngữ pháp (didn't -> don't/ won't) đồng thời làm rõ ý về ‘time upgrading’ — có lẽ bạn muốn nói 'time-related updates' hoặc 'latest updates'. Trả lời ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ để giải thích vì sao. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về tình huống bạn đọc kỹ.

例: I prefer detailed reading because when I just scan I often miss important updates in the news. For example, if I read an article about schedule changes I read every paragraph carefully to understand the exact times.

× Yes, I like reading when I was a child however, when I was adult I don't like reading because I spend too much time on my phone screen and I spend time rolling my.

✓ Yes, I liked reading when I was a child; however, as an adult I don't like reading because I spend too much time on my phone and I spend time scrolling.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly. 'When I was a child' refers to the past so use 'liked' (past tense). 'When I was adult' is missing the article 'an' and should be 'as an adult' or 'when I was an adult'. 'Don't like' is present simple and is fine for current habit. 'Phone screen' is unnatural here; 'on my phone' is preferred. 'Rolling' is incorrect verb; 'scrolling' is the proper gerund for using a phone. Suggestion: keep past events in past tense ('liked') and present habits in present ('don't like'), include articles where needed, and use correct verbs for actions on phones.

× I prefer to read on my phone instead of my paper because with my phone I can hold it anywhere I want and I can check the dictionary when I read English article.

✓ I prefer to read on my phone instead of on paper because with my phone I can hold it anywhere I want and I can check the dictionary when I read an English article.

The preposition 'on' should be used with 'paper' to mirror 'on my phone' ('on paper'). 'My paper' is incorrect in this context; use 'paper' or 'a paper' depending on meaning. Also add the article 'an' before 'English article'. Suggestions: use parallel prepositions ('on my phone' and 'on paper') and include articles for singular countable nouns ('an English article').

× I need to read carefully when the information really important, such as an exam, test or when I have some important event.

✓ I need to read carefully when the information is really important, such as for an exam or test, or when I have an important event.

Missing verb 'is' creates a tense/structure error: 'the information really important' should be 'the information is really important'. Also use appropriate preposition 'for an exam' and avoid redundant words ('some important event' -> 'an important event'). Suggestions: always include the linking verb 'is' for descriptions and use correct prepositions ('for an exam').

× I prefer detailed breathing because if I scan I didn't understand the the time upgrading on newspaper.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because if I scan I don't understand the time changes in the newspaper.

Multiple errors: 'breathing' is the wrong word; should be 'reading' (word choice). The clause 'if I scan I didn't understand' mixes present condition with past tense; use present simple 'I don't understand' for general truth. 'The the' is duplicated. 'Time upgrading' is incorrect collocation; likely means 'time changes' or 'timing updates' — 'time changes in the newspaper' or 'the dates and times' depending on intended meaning. Also use 'in the newspaper' as correct preposition. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary ('reading'), keep tense consistent in conditional general statements (use present tense), remove duplicate words, and use natural collocations ('in the newspaper').