Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, relevance and grammar. Begin with a direct topic sentence answering the question, avoid unrelated words (e.g. 'eating' instead of 'reading'), correct noun forms, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words if needed.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading a lot. For example, I often read contemporary Korean novels, and my favorite author is Park Eun-young because her stories are vivid and emotionally engaging.

提案: Reduce hesitation and repetition, correct common verb errors, and give a concise reason with a brief example. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to connect reason and example.

例: I prefer reading on a mobile phone because it is very convenient. For instance, I can carry many books at once and read on the bus or during short breaks.

提案: Make the contrast clear and correct grammar. State times when careful reading is necessary and when skimming is fine. Use linking words (for example, however) and avoid repetition. Be specific about reasons (noise, movement, respect for others).

例: I need to read carefully when I study or when the text is difficult because I must understand details. However, when I am on a moving bus or in a noisy place I usually skim the text so I don't lose my place or disturb others.

提案: Answer directly and organize reasons clearly. Correct verbs and word choice, reduce fillers, and use linking words (because, so) to connect reasons. Provide a brief example of when you scan versus when you read in detail.

例: I usually prefer scanning because I have limited time and want to get the main ideas quickly. For example, I scan news articles and summaries, but I read novels in detail when I have more free time.

× Of course, I really like eating.

✓ Of course, I really like reading.

The student used 'eating' (an action) instead of 'reading' (the intended activity). This is a word choice issue affecting sentence meaning; replace the incorrect verb with the correct one to match the question about reading.

× Especially I'm interested in a Korean novel.

✓ I'm especially interested in Korean novels.

Word order and article usage: 'especially' should come before 'interested', and 'a Korean novel' suggests one book while the student likely means the category; use plural 'Korean novels' for general interest.

× My favorite Korean noble owner is Park Eun Young.

✓ My favorite Korean novelist is Park Eun-young.

Incorrect word choice: 'noble owner' is wrong. The correct term for someone who writes novels is 'novelist'. Also capitalize and hyphenate name properly; use 'is' as predicate to identify the person.

× First Noble is very fascinating and exciting.

✓ Her first novel is very fascinating and exciting.

'Noble' is a misspelling of 'novel'. Also 'first novel' needs a possessive determiner 'her' to clarify whose first novel is meant. Ensure spelling 'novel' and correct use of determiner.

× Uh, I prefer to lead using uh, mobile phone, because it is very convenient, so whenever I go, whenever I go, I carry it, carry it, erase my phone, so I always can read the book from my mobile phone.

✓ Uh, I prefer to read using my mobile phone because it is very convenient, so whenever I go I carry it with me and I can always read books on my phone.

Multiple issues: 'lead' is incorrect; should be 'read' (verb). 'erase my phone' is wrong — likely 'have my phone' or 'carry it with me'. Use 'read books' (plural) for general statement. Removed repetitions and improved word order: 'carry it with me' is the natural phrase.

× When I take a bus, I usually read read a book doing moving doing so so I I doesn't doesn't like to disturb next to P people.

✓ When I take a bus, I usually read a book while I am moving because I don't like to disturb the people next to me.

Errors: repeated words and wrong verb forms. 'Doing moving' should be 'while I am moving' (present continuous). 'doesn't' is wrong with subject 'I' — use 'don't'. 'next to P people' is unclear; corrected to 'the people next to me'. Clean up repetition and fix subject-verb agreement.

× So I carefully lead lead my book.

✓ So I read my book carefully.

'Lead' is incorrect; should be 'read'. Word order: 'read my book carefully' is the correct adverb placement. Removed duplicate word.

× Uh, I usually prefer to lead, uh, scanning, uh, because uh, I enjoy lead and read every book.

✓ Uh, I usually prefer scanning because I can't read every book in detail.

Multiple problems: 'prefer to lead, scanning' mixes forms; use 'prefer scanning' or 'prefer to scan'. 'I enjoy lead and read every book' is ungrammatical — likely intended meaning is they cannot read every book in detail. Rewrote to convey intended contrast between scanning and detailed reading.

× Uh, but I, I little, I don't have enough time, So too many, uh lead too many book. I prefer to read scanning.

✓ But I don't have enough time; there are too many books to read, so I prefer to scan them.

Problems: 'I little' is extraneous. 'So too many, uh lead too many book' is ungrammatical: should be 'there are too many books to read'. 'Prefer to read scanning' mixes forms; use 'prefer to scan them' or 'prefer scanning'. Fixed noun plural 'books' and word order.