Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và độ rõ ràng: Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, tránh lặp ý và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể để giải thích lý do (ví dụ thời gian, loại nội dung bạn thích). Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc và giữ độ dài câu không quá 4-5 câu.

例: To be honest, I don't read very much. I find it hard to make time for books because I prefer short videos on TikTok. For relaxation I usually listen to music or podcasts instead of reading, since they are easier to follow when I'm tired.

提案: Nói rõ lý do cụ thể và sửa ngữ pháp: Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer reading on a screen). Giải thích cụ thể vì sao (ví dụ: portability, adjustable brightness) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Tránh tiếng lắp và từ không chính xác như "refresh" trong ngữ cảnh này.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it is more convenient and portable. For example, I can adjust the brightness and carry many articles on my phone. This makes it easier for me to read during short breaks.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng: Nên trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề (I need to read carefully when...). Sửa lỗi động từ và danh từ (e.g., "get better results"). Thêm ví dụ ngắn để cụ thể hóa (ví dụ đọc kỹ hướng dẫn đề thi hoặc hợp đồng).

例: I need to read carefully when I'm taking exams, because misreading a question can lead to wrong answers. However, I don't read carefully when browsing social media or skimming news headlines.

提案: Cải thiện sự mạch lạc và chọn từ vựng phù hợp: Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn (I prefer scanning or detailed reading depending on my mood). Tránh diễn đạt lặp và không chính xác như "detailed reading uh is can break my mood"; thay bằng lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: time, effort). Sử dụng linking words để làm rõ sự tương phản.

例: It depends on my mood: when I'm tired or short of time I prefer scanning because it's quicker. On the other hand, if I'm relaxed and interested in a topic I enjoy detailed reading so I can understand it deeply.

× Oh honestly not really, although I know it can help me have a healthy balance, strike my balance between work and my life.

✓ Oh, honestly, not really, although I know it can help me strike a healthy balance between work and life.

The pronoun usage 'have a healthy balance, strike my balance' is awkward and redundant; 'strike a healthy balance between work and life' is the natural idiomatic expression. Use 'a' with 'healthy balance' and remove the redundant 'have' and 'my'. Ensure commas for clarity.

× But I'd rather spend my time watching TikTok videos or especially on listening to obvious rather than learning or reading something new.

✓ But I'd rather spend my time watching TikTok videos or listening to music or other obvious content rather than learning or reading something new.

After 'rather' the verb should be base form or gerund depending on structure; 'spend my time' requires gerund 'watching' and 'listening'. The original 'on listening to obvious' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with a clear noun phrase. Clarify meaning and maintain parallel gerund forms.

× Umm, I don't actually love reading, but if I have to choose, I do reading on a screen because it make me feel much more convenient.

✓ Umm, I don't actually love reading, but if I have to choose, I read on a screen because it makes things much more convenient for me.

Use present simple 'read' rather than 'do reading'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it makes' not 'it make'. 'Feel much more convenient' is incorrect collocation; use 'makes things more convenient for me'.

× Uh, refresh and I can let my hair down without worrying about anything.

✓ I can quickly refresh and let my hair down without worrying about anything.

Fragment 'Uh, refresh and I can...' is ungrammatical. Reorder to subject + verb: 'I can quickly refresh' and 'let my hair down' are coordinated actions. Add adverb for clarity.

× Uh, I think is when I'm on my test, uh, because I need to read carefully to do every question exactly and, uh, so I have a chance to get a better results.

✓ Uh, I think it's when I'm taking a test, because I need to read carefully to answer each question correctly, so I have a chance to get better results.

Missing subject 'it' needed ('it's when'). Use 'taking a test' for natural phrasing. 'Do every question exactly' is incorrect: use 'answer each question correctly'. Remove article error 'a better results' -> 'better results'.

× Oh I think it depends on my mood.

✓ Oh, I think it depends on my mood.

Minor punctuation: add comma after 'Oh' for natural speech rhythm; pronoun usage is fine.

× If I'm a bad mood and have to read a detailed reading uh is can break my mood.

✓ If I'm in a bad mood and have to do detailed reading, it can spoil my mood.

Use correct preposition 'in a bad mood' and avoid 'a detailed reading' noun phrase; 'do detailed reading' or 'read in detail'. 'is can' is ungrammatical; use 'it can'. 'Break my mood' is unnatural; use 'spoil my mood'.

× However umm if it umm scan reading it can boost my mood and make my life refreshed.

✓ However, if I do scanning reading, it can boost my mood and make me feel refreshed.

Use 'do scanning reading' is still clumsy; better 'if I do skimming' or 'if I skim'. Verb form needed: 'make me feel refreshed' not 'make my life refreshed'. Keep gerund/verb forms consistent.