Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'romance' and 'teen romances'), avoid redundancy, and keep within 3–5 sentences. Use a linking phrase to give examples. Also pronounce or name examples clearly.

例: I really enjoy reading, especially fantasy and teen romance. For example, I like Percy Jackson and The Land of Stories. I also read books about art sometimes because I enjoy the descriptions and illustrations.

提案: Structure your answer: give a clear opinion, then two concise reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition ('person with short sighted person'). Use correct collocations ('short-sighted' or 'nearsighted') and reduce wordiness.

例: I prefer reading on paper for two reasons. First, I enjoy the physical feel of a book and the cover design. Second, reading on paper is easier on my eyes because I am short-sighted and screens strain my vision.

提案: Answer the question directly about situations requiring careful reading. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating when careful reading is needed, then give a brief contrasting example of when it's not necessary. Avoid irrelevant personal anecdotes unless they illustrate the point concisely.

例: I need to read carefully when I study for exams or when the text contains complex information, because I must understand details. In contrast, I don't read carefully when I'm skimming for general ideas or browsing light fiction for fun.

提案: Use present tense and a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition ('are are') and vague phrases ('just a fact'). Provide a concise comparison between scanning and detailed reading.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it lets me immerse myself in the story and understand characters' emotions. By contrast, scanning is useful only when I need quick facts, but it doesn't give me a deep understanding.

× I love reading a lot.

✓ I love reading very much.

'A lot' is colloquial and typically follows verbs; 'very much' is more natural with 'love' in formal spoken English. Use 'very much' to modify the verb phrase more appropriately.

× Usually I like to read books that are about the art, fantasy, romantic, especially teenage Romans.

✓ Usually I like to read books that are about art, fantasy, and romance, especially teenage romances.

Incorrect use of definite article 'the' with 'art' and wrong adjective form 'romantic' used as a noun. 'Romance' is the noun; 'romances' fits plurality. 'Romans' is a misspelling. Also add 'and' to join list items correctly.

× And the books I like to read are for example, Percy Jackson, the Land of Stories.

✓ For example, the books I like to read include Percy Jackson and The Land of Stories.

Sentence structure improved by placing 'for example' at the start and using 'include' to introduce examples. Use 'and' between items and capitalize book title 'The Land of Stories'.

× I prefer reading on paper because I like the feeling of owning a book and I like the texture of the papers and I think that reading on screen is bad to our eyes because especially I am a person with short sighted person so I need to take care of my eyes really well.

✓ I prefer reading on paper because I like the feeling of owning a book and the texture of the pages, and I think reading on a screen is bad for our eyes. I am nearsighted, so I need to take good care of my eyes.

Use 'pages' not 'papers' for book pages. 'Bad for our eyes' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Especially I am a person with short sighted person' is ungrammatical and repetitive; use 'I am nearsighted' or 'short-sighted' and a concise clause 'so I need to take good care of my eyes.' Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× So when I was young, I always sneak out to read books so that my parents would not find out because I didn't really want to study.

✓ When I was young, I always sneaked out to read books so that my parents would not find out because I did not really want to study.

Narration of past habits requires past tense 'sneaked' (or 'snuck') and 'did not' instead of present 'didn't' forms should match past context. Maintain past tense consistently.

× So whenever I read, I read very carefully because I'm scared that my parents will notice.

✓ Whenever I read, I read very carefully because I was afraid my parents would notice.

Context refers to past events, so tense should be past: 'was afraid' and 'would notice' to match past habitual action.

× I preferred detailed reading because I like absorbing myself into the story and understanding what the characters are are actually feeling.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because I like immersing myself in the story and understanding what the characters are actually feeling.

Question asks about general preference, so present tense 'prefer' is appropriate rather than past 'preferred.' 'Absorbing myself into' is unnatural; use 'immersing myself in.' Remove duplicated 'are.' Keep present tense to match ongoing preference.

× Because scanning is just a fact. Just look through the book quickly so you may not be able to understand.

✓ Scanning is just for facts; you just look through the book quickly, so you may not be able to understand everything.

Avoid sentence fragment 'Because scanning is just a fact.' Recast into a full sentence explaining purpose: 'Scanning is just for facts.' Add comma and complete clause 'so you may not be able to understand everything' for clarity.