Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar and add a brief specific detail (title or author) to make it more vivid. Use linking words if you add a second sentence.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading in my spare time. I usually choose novels and history books; for example, last month I read a romance novel about Paris and Jim called The Lovers of Paris, which I liked because of its rich historical setting.

提案: Give a clear preference or say you like both, then explain with concise, grammatically correct reasons and use linking words (for example, "because" or "however"). Avoid unclear phrases and check verb forms and prepositions.

例: I like both paper and screen reading. For example, I enjoy reading a printed newspaper with my parents in the morning because it feels more social, but I also read news on my phone when I'm commuting because it is convenient.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and then contrast the two situations with linking words (e.g., "however" or "but"). Use correct tense and smoother phrasing: say "when I'm stressed or in a hurry, I skim." Give a short example of what careful reading involves.

例: I need to read carefully when preparing presentations or doing important office tasks because accuracy matters. However, when I'm stressed or in a hurry I tend to skim documents and miss details, for example I might only read headings and key sentences to save time.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases like "go deep through the reading" with specific actions (e.g., "analyse structure, vocabulary, and meaning"). Limit to two sentences maximum.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it lets me analyse the structure and meaning of an article. For instance, when I read a paper carefully I check vocabulary, identify arguments, and correct any mistakes I made.

× Last month I read novel on the love story of Paris and Jim.

✓ Last month I read a novel about the love story of Paris and Jim.

Missing article 'a' before singular countable noun 'novel' and incorrect preposition 'on'. Use 'a novel' for singular and 'about' to indicate subject. Suggestion: use 'a' with singular countable nouns and 'about' for topics.

× I prefer both paper and on screen for reading.

✓ I prefer both paper and screens for reading.

Inconsistent preposition and form: 'on screen' should be 'screens' (plural) when paired with 'paper' or use 'on screen' without 'both'. Better: 'paper and screens' or 'paper and on screen'. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and match prepositions.

× While I have spare time, I usually set with my parents and read newspaper regarding the current news and when I have a time I carry phone for reading the news on.

✓ When I have spare time, I usually sit with my parents and read the newspaper to catch up on current events, and when I have time I use my phone to read the news.

Multiple issues: wrong verb 'set' should be 'sit'; missing articles 'the' before 'newspaper'; awkward phrasing 'regarding the current news' -> 'to catch up on current events'; unnecessary 'a' in 'a time'; unnatural 'carry phone for reading the news on' -> 'use my phone to read the news'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, use correct verbs, and include articles.

× When I'm doing my presentation work or my office work, I read carefully every paper and while I am in stress and also in hurry, I usually read not carefully.

✓ When I'm preparing a presentation or doing office work, I read every document carefully, but when I am stressed or in a hurry, I usually do not read carefully.

Tense and phrasing: 'doing my presentation work' -> 'preparing a presentation' is more natural; 'every paper' -> 'every document'; 'in stress' -> 'stressed'; 'read not carefully' -> 'do not read carefully'. Maintain present continuous for current habits and use negative auxiliary 'do not'. Suggestion: use correct adjectives and place 'not' before the verb phrase.

× I prefer detailed reading of any article and a paper because I can go deep through the reading and to find out my mistakes and also the meaning of that paper.

✓ I prefer detailed reading of any article or paper because I can read more deeply, find my mistakes, and understand the meaning of the text.

Problems with verb forms and collocations: 'go deep through the reading' is incorrect; use 'read more deeply' (adverb after verb). 'to find out my mistakes' should be 'find my mistakes' (parallel structure). 'a paper' redundant with 'any article' so use 'article or paper' and 'the meaning of that paper' -> 'the meaning of the text'. Suggestion: keep parallel verb forms and use appropriate adverbs for manner.