Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and natural: state your preference clearly, give a concise reason and an example. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Use one or two linking words to connect sentence parts.

例: I don't enjoy reading very much; I find videos easier to follow because they explain ideas visually. For example, when I learn about history I prefer documentary clips because they combine narration and images, which helps me remember facts.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid hesitations and repeated ideas. Mention a concrete contrast between screen and paper.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it's faster and more convenient: I can search for words and carry many articles on one device. However, I sometimes enjoy paper books for novels because the physical format feels more relaxing.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence answering both parts, then give specific examples and use linking words like 'because' or 'whereas'. Fix grammar (e.g. 'I must understand it' not 'I must to understand it'). Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

例: I read carefully when the information is important or relevant to my work or studies, because I need to understand details and remember them. Whereas if I'm reading for entertainment, like a light novel or online posts, I usually skim and don't focus on every detail.

提案: Give a clear preference and explain reasons with specific examples. Avoid unclear or irrelevant phrases. Use correct grammar and linking words (e.g. 'because', 'however'). Keep to two or three sentences max.

例: I usually prefer scanning because I want to find key points quickly, especially when researching online. However, I know detailed reading is better for complex topics, so I read carefully when the subject is difficult or important.

× No, I don't like reading but I want to watch the video which made me easily to understand it.

✓ No, I don't like reading, but I want to watch the video that makes it easy for me to understand.

The sentence misuses relative pronoun and tense. 'which made me easily to understand it' is unnatural. Use 'that' (or 'which') + present tense 'makes' because the video generally makes understanding easier. Also replace 'made me easily to understand it' with 'makes it easy for me to understand' for correct verb form and word order.

× Uh, maybe I will prefer to read on a screen because it would I can quickly to touch it and if I chose the book, I must go to the bookstore to try a book, Which one? I like it, of course the book it is very good, but I prefer to.

✓ Uh, maybe I prefer to read on a screen because I can quickly access it, and if I choose a book, I must go to the bookstore to look for one. I like books, of course they are very good, but I prefer screens.

Multiple problems: unnecessary future 'will' after 'maybe' and incorrect modal/infinitive forms ('would I can quickly to touch it'). Use present simple 'prefer' and 'can' for general preference and ability. Use 'choose' not 'chose' (present). Replace 'try a book' with 'look for one' for clarity. Fix pronoun/number agreement: 'the book it is' -> 'books are'. Sentence was fragmented; combine into coherent sentences.

× Yeah, maybe something I'm very, very interested in it and I must to understand it, so I will read it in this.

✓ Yeah, maybe something I am very interested in and I must understand, so I will read it carefully.

Pronoun 'in it' is redundant after 'interested in' if structure was wrong; better: 'interested in something' or 'something I am very interested in' but here rephrase. Remove incorrect infinitive 'must to understand' (should be 'must understand'). 'Read it in this' is unclear; replace with 'read it carefully' to match question about careful reading.

× But if I think it's just for the entertainment and I maybe I don't need to use it in my lifestyle and.

✓ But if I think it's just for entertainment and I don't need to apply it in my life, I won't read it carefully.

Unnecessary extra 'I maybe' and tense/auxiliary confusion. Use present simple 'think' and 'don't need'. 'Use it in my lifestyle' is unnatural; 'apply it in my life' is clearer. Complete the sentence by stating consequence: 'I won't read it carefully.'

× Maybe I prefer to the scanning the book.

✓ Maybe I prefer scanning the book.

Definite article 'the' is unnecessary before gerund 'scanning' and 'to' should be removed. Use 'prefer scanning' or 'prefer to scan' not 'prefer to the scanning'.

× I think that was a long time I didn't to have a very degree in soul.

✓ I think it has been a long time since I haven't read much for the soul.

Original sentence is ungrammatical. 'That was a long time I didn't to have' mixes tense and structure. Use 'it has been a long time since' + present perfect or rephrase to 'I haven't read much for the soul' for clear meaning. 'Degree in soul' is unclear; interpret as 'reading for the soul'.

× I have happy they just scan their book, but I doesn't think it's a good habit.

✓ I am happy that they just scan their books, but I don't think it's a good habit.

'I have happy' is wrong; use 'I am happy'. 'They just scan their book' needs plural 'books'. 'Doesn't' conflicts with subject 'I'; use 'don't'. Adjust sentence to proper subject-verb agreement and pronoun/reference consistency.