Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp, sửa lỗi phát âm/văn phạm và làm câu trả lời tự nhiên, ngắn gọn. Tránh lặp từ và nói rõ mục đích: nêu câu chủ đề rồi giải thích ngắn gọn với lí do cụ thể. Ví dụ: “Yes, I do. I enjoy reading because it helps me learn new ideas and improve my vocabulary, which will be useful for university and my future career.”

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy reading because it helps me learn new ideas and improve my vocabulary, which will be useful for university and my future career.

提案: Cần nói rõ lựa chọn và giải thích mạch lạc, tránh tiếng ồ ạt và lặp lại. Dùng liên từ để kết cấu câu: nêu sở thích, nêu lí do, rồi nêu điểm yếu nếu cần. Giữ dưới 3-4 câu ngắn gọn.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it’s more convenient and easy to carry. However, printed books are better for intensive study because they are easier on the eyes and I can make notes more easily.

提案: Cần hiểu câu hỏi: trả lời khi nào cần đọc kĩ (ví dụ: hợp đồng, học tập) và khi nào không cần (ví dụ: tin tức nhẹ). Tránh trả lời lạc đề (như nghe nhạc). Sử dụng cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể + ví dụ.

例: I need to read carefully when I study for exams or sign legal documents because accuracy is important. On the other hand, I don’t read carefully when I browse social media or light news articles, because they are just for general information.

提案: Cần nêu rõ chọn scanning hay detailed reading và giải thích lý do bằng các ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ừ ờ. Dùng linking words (‘because’, ‘so’, ‘for example’) để làm rõ mạch văn.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand complex information and remember important points. For example, when I study a textbook I read carefully and take notes so I can review later.

× Yes I do, I enjoy reading books because it helps me give a a canola college and a opportunity job in the future.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy reading books because they help me get into a good college and have better job opportunities in the future.

The sentence has several article and word choice errors. 'a a' is duplicated; 'a opportunity' should be 'an opportunity' but 'job opportunities' (plural) and 'a good college' are better choices. Also subject-pronoun agreement: 'books' (plural) needs 'they help' not 'it helps'. Use 'get into a good college' for clarity. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use correct articles ('a' vs 'an'), match plural subjects with plural verbs and use more natural collocations like 'get into' and 'job opportunities'.

× I enjoy rest on the screen because it's more convenient and easy to carry around. But I, I can know, uh, but I can know that, umm, this advantage.

✓ I enjoy reading on the screen because it's more convenient and easy to carry around. But I know that it has some disadvantages.

'rest on the screen' is incorrect; use 'reading on the screen'. Pronoun reference 'this advantage' is unclear; better to say 'it has some disadvantages' or 'there are disadvantages'. Also remove filler repetitions. Suggestions: use correct verb 'reading', ensure pronouns clearly refer to the intended noun ('it' refers to reading on the screen), and avoid repeated fillers.

× I think I need to rethink carefully when I am listening to music and watching film and. Enlist both because this kept me consensual and realistic.

✓ I think I need to read carefully when I am listening to music or watching films because both distract me and reduce my concentration.

The original has several structural errors and incorrect word choices: 'rethink carefully' should be 'read carefully'; 'watching film' should be 'watching films'; 'Enlist both' is incorrect; 'this kept me consensual and realistic' makes no sense. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning: reading carefully when distracted by music or films and explains why. Suggestions: choose verbs that match the action ('read'), use correct plurals, and state the reason clearly ('distract me and reduce my concentration').

× Uh, I like your detail listing because it has near asset to uh, information content and uh, uh, focused on, uh, uh, focus on its plan.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand the information better and focus on the structure or the plan.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'your detail listing' is incorrect; should be 'detailed reading' or 'detailed lists'. 'Near asset to information content' is not meaningful; improved to 'helps me understand the information better'. Repetition of 'focus on' should be cleaned. Suggestions: use correct noun forms ('detailed reading'), clear verbs ('helps me understand' and 'focus on'), and avoid filler words.