Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the phrase “why I’m taking a bath” to “when I’m taking a bath,” avoid redundancy, and add a brief specific example of what you read. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

例: Yes, I love reading. I usually read in my free time or when I’m taking a bath because it helps me unwind; for example, I often read short stories or articles about psychology to broaden my horizons.

提案: Good clear response with a topic sentence and specific reasons. Improve by replacing the short filler “Yes” with a direct answer and adding a linking phrase to make it slightly more natural. Keep within 2–3 sentences and vary vocabulary a bit (e.g., ‘digital formats’ or ‘e-books’).

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it’s more convenient and flexible; for example, I can quickly switch between topics and adjust the font size and brightness to reduce eye strain.

提案: This answer is confusing and contains errors. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers both parts (when to read carefully and when not). Remove disfluencies like “uh” and correct unclear words (e.g., ‘Brazier’—likely ‘pleasure’ or ‘browsing’). Provide one specific example for each situation and use a linking word to contrast them.

例: I need to read carefully when I’m preparing for an exam because I must understand details and remember facts; for example, I study textbooks and highlight key dates. In contrast, I don’t read carefully when I’m just browsing news to get general ideas.

提案: Good content and clear examples but reduce disfluencies (“uh”), correct minor grammar (“saves time”), and use a stronger topic sentence. Consider adding a linking phrase to show when you would switch to detailed reading.

例: I prefer scanning most of the time because it helps me find information quickly and saves time; for instance, I scan news headlines and email subject lines, and only read the full article when a story seems important.

× I usually read in my free time or why I'm taking a bath because it helps me unwind and broaden my horizon.

✓ I usually read in my free time or while I'm taking a bath because it helps me unwind and broaden my horizons.

The student used 'why' incorrectly; the correct conjunction to indicate two simultaneous activities is 'while' (Grammar Problem Type ID 16). Also 'horizon' should be plural 'horizons' (Article/adjective issue tied to noun form but fits common usage). Suggestion: use 'while' to link simultaneous actions and use 'broaden my horizons' as the set phrase.

× Yes, I prefer reading on screen because it's more convenient and flexible.

✓ Yes, I prefer reading on a screen because it's more convenient and flexible.

The sentence omits the article before 'screen'. Use 'on a screen' or 'on screens' depending on meaning (Article errors/incorrect use of pronouns category fits ID 22 and 11, but per list choose Article errors). Correct form: 'on a screen' to refer to reading on a device's screen.

× For example, I can quickly switch between topics, adjust font size and brightness.

✓ For example, I can quickly switch between topics, adjust the font size and the brightness.

When mentioning specific features, include articles 'the' before countable nouns or use plural. This clarifies reference to particular settings (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Suggestion: add 'the' before 'font size' and 'brightness' or pluralize if general.

× Skimming uh, I need to read carefully when I'm prepared for an exam because I must understand details and remember facts, but I don't need to read carefully when I'm skimming the articles for general ideas or reading something for Brazier.

✓ Skimming, I need to read carefully when I'm preparing for an exam because I must understand details and remember facts, but I don't need to read carefully when I'm skimming articles for general ideas or reading something for pleasure.

'I'm prepared' is less natural than 'I'm preparing' for an upcoming exam (present continuous for planned action) (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'the articles' can be 'articles' in general. 'Brazier' appears to be a wrong word; likely intended 'pleasure' or 'browsing'. Suggestion: use 'preparing' for ongoing preparation, remove unnecessary articles, and replace incorrect word with correct vocabulary.

× I love, uh, scanning most of the time because I often need to find information quickly and it saves times.

✓ I love scanning most of the time because I often need to find information quickly and it saves time.

Use singular 'time' in the phrase 'saves time' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use the fixed expression 'save time'.

× For example, I scan news headlines and e-mail subject lines to decide what is important and then I read the full article if I need more details.

✓ For example, I scan news headlines and email subject lines to decide what is important, and then I read the full article if I need more details.

Comma needed before 'and then' to separate clauses (Sentence structure/Article errors ID 22 and 26). Also 'e-mail' is acceptable but 'email' is more common. Suggestion: add a comma for clarity and keep consistent spelling.