Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence stating whether you like reading, then give one or two specific supporting reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Keep your answer within 3–4 concise sentences and use linking words (for example, because, for instance) to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I mainly read short articles and advertisements online because they are quick and informative. For example, when I scroll through social media my eye often stops on interesting headlines, so I read those to learn something new.

提案: Good direct answer and clear reason. Improve by reducing filler words and repetition, and add one specific detail or contrast to strengthen the response. Keep it concise and use a linking phrase like ‘for example’ or ‘also’.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it is convenient and portable. For example, when I commute I read articles on my tablet, which saves me from carrying books. Also, digital text lets me adjust font size for comfort.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence that answers both parts (when you read carefully and when you don't). Provide one or two specific examples with reasons, and avoid trailing off. Use linking words such as ‘when’ and ‘whereas’ to contrast the situations.

例: I read carefully when the information affects my studies or exams, because I need to understand deadlines and instructions. Whereas for casual messages or social posts I usually just skim them since they are not important.

提案: Answer directly and give a balanced reason. Avoid awkward phrasing and fillers. State preference, explain why with a clear example, and mention any exceptions where detailed reading is necessary. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘however’.

例: I usually prefer scanning because it saves time and helps me find key points quickly. However, if the text is academic or legal, I read it in detail because accuracy is important.

× Nowadays reading has not left as an option, whereas it is a composition as there are lot.

✓ Nowadays reading has not been left as an option; it is a common activity because there are many sources.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical (sentence structure error). 'Has not left as an option' is incorrect phrasing; use 'has not been left as an option' or better 'has not been left out as an option' but clearer: 'has not been left as an option.' 'There are lot' is missing an article and plural form; use 'many sources.' Rephrase to make the idea clear and grammatically correct. Suggestion: break into two clauses and use correct verbs and quantifiers.

× For example, there are so many holdings for for as an advertisement.

✓ For example, there are so many advertisements and promotional materials.

The phrase 'holdings for for as an advertisement' is ungrammatical and uses wrong noun choice and repeated preposition. This is an incorrect use of words (adjectives/nouns/adverbs). Replace with 'advertisements and promotional materials' to convey the intended meaning.

× So it's it's just your eye catches that template and then you just start reading so.

✓ So your eye catches that headline and you just start reading it.

The original has repetition ('it's it's'), an unclear noun 'template', and unnecessary filler 'so.' This is a sentence structure problem. Use concise structure: subject + verb + object. Replace 'template' with 'headline' if referring to an attention-catching element and remove redundant words.

× Well, I usually prefer to read on a screen because it is more convenient and portable.

✓ Well, I usually prefer to read on a screen because it is more convenient and portable.

This sentence is acceptable; no change needed. It uses pronouns correctly. Included here to explicitly confirm it meets the allowed grammar types.

× For example, uh, while commuting to to some place, I usually open my tablet and just read it.

✓ For example, while commuting, I usually open my tablet and read.

Double 'to' and the phrase 'to some place' are wordy; 'commuting' already implies travel. 'Read it' is unnecessary—'read' suffices. This is a sentence structure issue; remove redundancy and simplify.

× So it's so it is more convenient that I can read it any place.

✓ So it is more convenient because I can read anywhere.

Awkward repetition ('So it's so it is') and 'any place' is less natural than 'anywhere.' Simplify the pronoun usage and remove repetition. This is an incorrect pronoun/word choice issue.

× Well, there are different situations in which I need to read it with some concentration and in some not.

✓ Well, there are different situations in which I need to read with concentration and others when I do not.

The structure 'and in some not' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Rephrase to parallel structures: 'in which I need to read with concentration and others when I do not.' This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× Well, the things on which I have to put concentration are the notifications about my study material or if I have booked some exams so notification about that I have to read it and on the other hand.

✓ The things that require my concentration are notifications about my study materials or exam bookings; I have to read those carefully.

The original mixes relative clauses awkwardly and misuses pronouns ('it') and articles. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure. Use 'that' for defining clauses, pluralize 'study material' to 'study materials', and replace vague 'it' with 'those' to refer clearly to notifications.

× Well-being in the content contemporary era, I usually prefer to read just so scan like a scanning.

✓ In the contemporary content era, I usually prefer to just scan material.

'Well-being in the content contemporary era' is ungrammatical and word order is wrong. 'So scan like a scanning' is redundant. This is a sentence structure and word order error. Use 'In the contemporary content era' and 'prefer to just scan' for clarity.

× I don't prefer reading it thoroughly deeply because it feels like it's just a wasted of time reading so deeply.

✓ I don't prefer reading thoroughly because it feels like a waste of time to read so deeply.

'Thoroughly deeply' is redundant and awkward; 'a wasted of time' is incorrect—use 'a waste of time.' This is incorrect use of adverbs/adjectives. Remove redundancy and use correct noun forms.

× So instead of that, I just want, uh, just a brief note of that notification, not.

✓ Instead, I just want a brief summary of the notification.

The original ends abruptly with 'not' and includes filler 'uh' and repeated 'just.' This is a sentence structure error. Use a complete, concise statement like 'I just want a brief summary of the notification.'