Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ・トピックセンテンスはあるが、文法ミスや語彙の誤用が見られます（fictionは不可算名詞または複数形fiction(s)の取り扱い、作者名の綴りの誤りなど）。 ・情報は具体的で良いが、文と文のつながり（linking words）がやや単純です。短く重複する表現を避け、より自然な語順と語彙に直してください。 ・改善ポイント：1) fictionの扱いを正す、2) 作者名の正確な綴りを確認、3) 接続語（for example, because, so）を適切に使う、4) 文の長さを3〜4文に収める。

例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially fiction. For example, I often read mystery novels by Keigo Higashino, because his plots are clever and keep me guessing. I find these books exciting and hard to put down.

提案: ・語彙の誤用が目立ちます（'Peppers'は不適切）。意味を明確にする具体表現を使ってください。 ・文法的誤り（動名詞と不定詞の混同、時制や語順の誤り）を修正する必要があります。 ・接続詞や理由を示す表現（because, so, which makes）を使って論理的につなぐ練習をしてください。 ・改善ポイント：1) 不適切な語を置き換える（e.g. paper’s smell, ink, paper texture）、2) スクリーンによる影響は“eye strain”や“sleep problems”など具体的な表現で説明、3) 2〜3文で簡潔に答える。

例: I prefer reading on paper because I like the smell and texture of physical books. Also, reading on screens causes eye strain for me, and using devices late at night often affects my sleep.

提案: ・主張は明確ですが、繰り返し（'read read'）や語順の誤り、冠詞や所有の省略などの文法ミスがあるため減点されます。 ・理由説明は良いので、接続語（however, because, so）を使い分けて対比を明確にしてください。 ・改善ポイント：1) 冗長な語の削除、2) 冠詞や代名詞を正しく使う（e.g. 'because it's my hobby'）、3) 2〜3文で対比を示す。

例: I need to read carefully when studying for exams or doing assignments because I must understand details to get good marks. However, when I read for pleasure, I usually read more casually because it's relaxing and enjoyable.

提案: ・主張ははっきりしているが、繰り返し（'when I when I'）や冠詞の省略（'detailed reading'は可だが'article'の使い方注意）がある。 ・理由は具体的で良いが、より自然な接続表現（so, therefore, because）を用いて簡潔にまとめてください。 ・改善ポイント：1) 重複を取り除く、2) 'paragraph'の単複や冠詞を正しく使う、3) 2〜3文で理由と結果を示す。

例: I prefer detailed reading because I need to understand sentences and paragraphs thoroughly. That way I can answer questions accurately and clearly express my opinion.

× I usually read fictions, especially mystery books.

✓ I usually read fiction, especially mystery books.

'Fiction' as a genre is uncountable in English, so use 'fiction' not 'fictions'. Use plural 'mystery books' for individual items; keep 'fiction' for the general category. Suggestion: Say 'I usually read fiction' or 'I usually read fiction books.'

× I love the books written by Keiko Higashino.

✓ I love the books written by Keigo Higashino.

This sentence is grammatically correct in structure; however the author's name likely spelled Keigo Higashino. Use correct proper nouns. No preposition change needed. Suggestion: Verify proper name spelling.

× The mystery book often makes me thrilled and excited.

✓ Mystery books often make me feel thrilled and excited.

Use plural 'mystery books' to speak generally, and use 'make me feel' + adjective. Adjectives 'thrilled' and 'excited' describe feelings and need a verb 'feel' or passive structure. Suggestion: 'Mystery books often make me feel excited.'

× I prefer to read on paper because I love the smell of the ink and Peppers.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because I love the smell of ink and paper.

'Ink' and 'paper' are uncountable or mass nouns here and should not be capitalized; 'Peppers' is incorrect and irrelevant. Likely intended 'paper'. Also do not use the definite article unless specific. Suggestion: 'the smell of ink and paper' or 'the smell of the ink and the paper' if referring to specific items.

× In addition, screen reading makes me tired because using watching screen for a long time disturb my sleeping.

✓ In addition, reading on a screen makes me tired because using a screen for a long time disturbs my sleep.

Problems: awkward phrase 'screen reading' better 'reading on a screen'; 'using watching screen' is ungrammatical—choose 'using a screen' or 'watching a screen'; subject-verb agreement 'disturb' should be 'disturbs' for singular subject; 'my sleeping' is unnatural—use 'my sleep'. Suggestion: 'reading on a screen makes me tired because using a screen for a long time disturbs my sleep.'

× When I read a paragraph for exam or assignment, I need to read carefully to get a high score.

✓ When I read a paragraph for an exam or an assignment, I need to read carefully to get a high score.

Articles 'an' are needed before 'exam' and 'assignment' when speaking generally. Suggestion: add 'an' before singular countable nouns: 'for an exam or an assignment.'

× But when I read books for my hobby, I don't usually read read it carefully because it just my hobby and makes me happy.

✓ But when I read books as a hobby, I don't usually read them carefully because it's just my hobby and it makes me happy.

Errors: repeated word 'read read'; pronoun agreement—'books' requires 'them' not 'it'; missing verb 'is' in 'it's just my hobby'; add subject 'it' for 'it makes me happy'. Suggestion: 'I don't usually read them carefully because it's just my hobby.'

× I prefer a detailed reading because when I when I answer the question, I need to understand the sentences or paragraph deeply to answer it correctly and show my opinion.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because when I answer questions, I need to understand the sentences or paragraphs deeply to answer them correctly and express my opinion.

Remove duplicate 'when I'; 'a detailed reading' is awkward—use 'detailed reading' or 'reading in detail'; pluralize 'questions' and 'paragraphs' to match general meaning and use plural pronouns 'them'; 'show my opinion' is better as 'express my opinion'. Suggestion: 'I prefer detailed reading because when I answer questions, I need to understand the paragraphs deeply to answer them correctly and express my opinion.'