Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency and sentence structure: give a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail without fillers. Combine short fragments into one or two coherent sentences and avoid hesitation sounds like 'umm'. Add a specific example or type of reading to enrich content.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading because it helps me relax. For example, I usually read a short novel or articles on my phone for about 30 minutes before going to bed every night.

提案: Clarify your preference and give a reason with a specific comparison. Use a direct topic sentence stating your choice, then explain why, and include a brief example. Avoid contradictory phrases and incomplete sentences.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it is easier on my eyes and reduces screen glare; for example, I read physical books during long study sessions to avoid eye strain from my laptop.

提案: Organize your response into two clear parts: when you read carefully and when you do not. Use linking words (for example, however, whereas) and provide specific situations and reasons. Correct grammar (e.g. 'skimming videos' not 'crawling the videos') and reduce hesitations.

例: I need to read carefully when I'm studying or handling important documents, such as exam instructions or official forms, because mistakes can have consequences. However, I skim content like social media posts or casual videos when I only want a quick overview.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence stating your preference and explain why with a specific context or example. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar (e.g. 'I prefer detailed reading because I need to understand things deeply'). Remove repetitions and filler words.

例: I prefer detailed reading because I need to understand topics deeply, especially when learning new skills or studying for exams; for example, I read textbooks carefully and take notes to remember important points.

× I prefer you don't prefer because it.

✓ I don't prefer reading on a screen because it hurts my eyes.

The original sentence uses 'I prefer you don't prefer' which incorrectly mixes subjects and verbs. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure. Replace with a clear subject and verb ('I don't prefer') and state the reason. Also add a clear object ('reading on a screen') to make the meaning explicit.

× It is helpful for my eyes for example.

✓ Reading on paper is better for my eyes, for example.

'It' is ambiguous here and does not clearly refer to 'reading on paper' or 'screen'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns. Replace 'It' with the specific noun phrase and add a linking structure ('is better for my eyes') to clarify meaning.

× I need to read carefully when I'm studying or low working at the something important like documents or my exam instructions.

✓ I need to read carefully when I'm studying or working on something important, such as documents or my exam instructions.

The original sentence has confused word order ('low working at the something') and incorrect filler words. This is a sentence structure error. Remove incorrect words, use 'working on' rather than 'working at', and use 'such as' to introduce examples.

× Uh when When I'm only crawling the videos then I'm not read carefully.

✓ When I'm just scrolling through videos, I don't read carefully.

'Crawling the videos' is incorrect verb choice; 'scrolling' is the correct -ing form for browsing videos. Also 'I'm not read carefully' mixes auxiliary and base verb incorrectly; use 'I don't read carefully'. This matches the required -ing form and correct auxiliary use.

× I I prefer detailed reading because, uh, when I I need to. Go deeply for, uh, anything.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because when I need to, I go into something deeply.

The original contains repetition and sentence fragments ('when I I need to. Go deeply'). This is a third person singular issue label may not perfectly match, but the main problems are subject-verb construction and sentence fragmentation. Correct by removing duplicated words and combining clauses into a single complete sentence, using 'I go into something deeply' to express the idea.

× For example, I usually detailed reading.

✓ For example, I usually do detailed reading.

'I usually detailed reading' lacks an auxiliary verb and misuses noun/verb forms. This is an article/structure error: add the auxiliary 'do' to form the verb phrase 'do detailed reading'. Alternatively, 'I usually read in detail' would also be correct. Use correct verb structure to complete the sentence.