Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence saying you enjoy reading, then add one or two specific details (types of books and why). Avoid hesitations and incorrect grammar (e.g., "feeling me comfortable" and tense errors). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

例: I enjoy reading because it helps me relax. For example, I often read moral stories and novels about village life, which calm me when I am stressed.

提案: Good clear preference and reason. Improve grammar and natural phrasing: say "reading on paper" not "a read on papers"; combine ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. Add one specific example of when you choose paper over screen.

例: I prefer reading on paper because long screen time strains my eyes. For example, I choose paper books when I read in the evening to relax without blue light.

提案: This answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Begin with a clear topic sentence addressing both parts: when careful reading is necessary and when it's not. Provide concrete examples (e.g., reading contracts vs. skimming messages) and use linking words such as "when" and "but".

例: I need to read carefully when I review important documents, like contracts or instructions, because mistakes can have serious consequences. But I do not read carefully when I check casual messages or social media posts, where a quick skim is enough.

提案: You have a clear preference but should make it more fluent and precise. Remove repetitions and filler words, correct grammar (e.g., "rather than scanning"), and give a brief reason with a concrete example of what you might miss when scanning.

例: I prefer detailed reading rather than scanning because scanning can miss important information. For instance, when studying an article I read every paragraph carefully to notice key facts and examples.

× I love reading books of morals, stories of hunters, O uh, old village.

✓ I love reading books about morals, stories about hunters, or old villages.

The original uses 'of' where 'about' is more natural for topics, and 'O uh' is filler; 'old village' needs plural or article. Use 'or' for listing alternatives and pluralize 'village' to match general preference statements.

× It seems so relaxing and feeling me comfortable when I was deeply stressed.

✓ They seem very relaxing and make me feel comfortable when I am very stressed.

Subject must agree with plural 'books/stories' -> 'they'. Use present tense to describe habitual reactions ('am' not 'was'). Use correct verb pattern 'make me feel' rather than 'feeling me'.

× For a perfect relaxing I use a read on papers.

✓ For perfect relaxation I read on paper.

Use noun 'relaxation' instead of adjective 'relaxing' after 'for'. 'Read on paper' is the correct prepositional phrase; 'a read' and 'on papers' are incorrect.

× When sometimes talking important between the conversation and sometimes different scenes and when the impact main rules.

✓ When there is an important point in the conversation, or when scenes change and the main rules are affected.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Add 'there is' to introduce 'an important point' and restructure with conjunctions to clarify occasions when careful reading is needed. Use 'main rules' with 'are affected' for clarity.

× I prefer detailed reading rather than a scanning because I I rely more upon on my on my eyes.

✓ I prefer detailed reading rather than scanning because I rely more on my eyes.

Do not use the article 'a' before uncountable 'scanning'. Remove duplicated words 'I I' and 'on my' repetitions. Use 'rely on' rather than 'rely upon on'.

× Uh, instead of scanning it might miss some important doc, important document or sentences which are I can detect it.

✓ Instead of scanning, I might miss some important documents or sentences that I could detect with detailed reading.

Subject and object must be clear: 'I might miss' places the subject correctly. Use plural 'documents', avoid redundant 'doc, important document'. Replace 'which are I can detect it' with 'that I could detect' and remove extra pronoun 'it'.