Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid vague phrases like "maybe" and redundant clauses. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., use "prefer" or "enjoy" and specific platform names).

例: I don't enjoy reading physical books much; I prefer reading online articles and watching educational YouTube channels because they're easy to access on my phone. For example, I follow a science channel that summarizes research in short videos, which helps me learn quickly.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by two concise, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "and"). Avoid informal fillers like "first off" and unclear phrases like "library store". Use precise vocabulary such as "bookstore" or "library".

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it's more convenient and accessible, and because I don't have room to store many physical books. For instance, I can download ebooks or articles on my tablet and read them anywhere.

提案: Begin directly (avoid phrases like "That's a good question") and give clearer, more specific distinctions with linking words (e.g., "whereas", "however"). Provide an example of what careful reading involves (e.g., taking notes, checking references).

例: I read carefully when the material is scientific or technical because I need to understand details and often take notes; for example, I slow down to check data and references. Whereas for light news or most novels, I skim or read for general meaning without taking notes.

提案: Avoid repetition of previous phrases; answer directly with a topic sentence and two contrasting examples using linking words (e.g., "if... then..., but..."). Be specific about how you scan (headlines, first paragraph) and how you read in detail (annotate, reread).

例: It depends: I usually scan news by reading headlines and the first paragraph to get the gist, but I read scientific articles or novels in detail by highlighting key points and rereading difficult sections.

× I prefer reading on screen for multiple reasons. First off, because it's easier to access.

✓ I prefer reading on screen for multiple reasons. First off, it's easier to access.

The original sentence uses the conjunction 'because' after 'First off,' which creates a fragmented structure: 'First off, because...' is redundant. Removing 'because' yields a correct independent clause. Suggestion: use 'First off, ...' followed by a complete clause (subject + verb).

× I don't have to go to a library store and get a book plus.

✓ I don't have to go to a bookstore or library to get a book.

'Library store' is an incorrect collocation; the usual terms are 'bookstore' or 'library'. The word 'plus' at the end is unclear and informal. Also the construction 'go to a library store and get a book' is awkward; use 'go to a bookstore or library to get a book' for clarity. Suggestion: choose the correct noun ('bookstore' or 'library') and use 'or' and an infinitive phrase 'to get a book'.

× I don't have sufficient space in my room to keep physical books.

✓ I don't have sufficient space in my room to keep physical books.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It uses appropriate prepositions and structure. (Included to confirm no error under the given list.)

× I need to read carefully when the book or the article is scientific, so I need more concentration.

✓ I need to read carefully when a book or an article is scientific, so I need more concentration.

Using the definite article 'the' implies a specific book or article already identified; the speaker means any book or article of that type, so the indefinite article 'a' is more appropriate. Suggestion: use 'a' for non-specific nouns. Additionally, 'scientific' as an adjective is fine; consider 'is scientific' or better 'is scientific in nature' if desired.

× However, if it's news or or novel, I don't need to focus much.

✓ However, if it's news or a novel, I don't need to focus much.

There are two issues: a duplicated 'or' (typo) and a missing article before 'novel'. 'News' is uncountable and needs no article, but 'novel' is countable and requires an article: 'a novel'. Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'or' and add 'a' before 'novel'.

× Well, as I said before, that depends on the type of text I'm trying to read.

✓ Well, as I said before, it depends on the type of text I'm trying to read.

Using 'that depends' is not incorrect, but 'it depends' is more natural when referring to a general situation. 'That' as a demonstrative is acceptable but can sound slightly awkward in spoken English. Suggestion: prefer 'it depends' for smoother phrasing.

× I do read online articles and maybe watch educated YouTube channels and other platforms because it's more accessible to me.

✓ I do read online articles and maybe watch educational YouTube channels and other platforms because they're more accessible to me.

Two issues: 'educated YouTube channels' misuses the adjective 'educated' which describes people, not channels; 'educational' is correct. Also 'it's more accessible' mismatches plural subjects ('articles and channels and other platforms'); use 'they're more accessible'. Suggestion: use 'educational' and match verb agreement with plural subject.

× If it's a scientific article or a novel, I need to read more carefully and focus on the details.

✓ If it's a scientific article or a novel, I need to read more carefully and focus on the details.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches third person singular usage 'it's'. No correction needed.