Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like reading, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fragments and check grammar (e.g., articles, verb forms). Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I enjoy reading occasionally, though I wouldn't call myself a passionate reader. For example, I read the entire Harry Potter series by J.K. Rowling because I was curious about the story and characters, and I found the books really engaging.

提案: Start with a direct statement of preference, then give a specific reason and a brief contrast. Fix grammar and awkward phrases, and keep it to two or three sentences.

例: I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen because long screen time makes my eyes tired. For instance, when I study for hours on a computer I feel strained, so printed books are more comfortable for extended reading.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and then specific examples of situations that require careful reading versus casual reading. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "however") to make the contrast clear.

例: You need to read carefully when the information is important or when you're looking for specific facts; for example, I read contracts and exam questions in detail. However, when I'm skimming news articles or light fiction, I only read for the general idea.

提案: Answer directly, then support with clear examples and a linking phrase. Improve phrasing (e.g., "time-based exam", "in an emergency") and avoid repetition. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

例: I usually prefer detailed reading because it helps me fully understand the material. However, I scan or skim when I'm short on time—for instance, during a time-based exam or when I need to grasp the main points quickly before a meeting.

× Not very passionate about reading but still I have read a book that everyone of us have read before.

✓ I'm not very passionate about reading, but I have read a book that many of us have read before.

Original sentence lacks a subject and has awkward phrasing 'everyone of us have read' which is incorrect agreement and word choice. Use complete subject 'I'm not' and change 'everyone of us' to 'many of us' or 'everyone' with singular/plural agreement. Also add a comma before 'but' to join clauses. Suggestion: Include explicit subject and ensure subject-verb agreement; choose 'many of us have' or 'everyone has' depending on meaning.

× It is a very famous story written by JK Rowling.

✓ It is a very famous story written by J.K. Rowling.

The sentence is mostly correct grammatically but the author's name should be punctuated as 'J.K. Rowling' and using 'written by' is fine. Ensure proper capitalization and punctuation of names.

× It is Harry Potter.

✓ It is Harry Potter.

This sentence is acceptable as a short identification. No grammatical correction needed.

× I have read all the series which makes me.

✓ I have read the entire series.

Original sentence 'which makes me' is incomplete and unclear. 'All the series' is better expressed as 'the entire series.' Remove the fragment 'which makes me' or complete it (e.g., 'which makes me a fan'). Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and ensure each clause completes a thought.

× I would prefer reading on a paper rather than on the screen because after some time we feel so drained out looking into the screen for so much of time, so reading in the paper will not cause.

✓ I would prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen because after some time we feel drained from looking at a screen for too long, so reading on paper does not cause that.

Multiple errors: unnecessary articles ('a paper' -> 'paper', 'the screen' -> 'a screen'), incorrect prepositions ('looking into the screen' -> 'looking at a screen'), awkward phrase 'so much of time' -> 'for too long', and incomplete clause 'will not cause' -> 'does not cause that.' Suggestions: Use correct articles and prepositions, avoid redundant words, and complete the thought.

× We have to read carefully when there is something important or if there is something that we have to find out.

✓ We have to read carefully when something is important or when we need to find something out.

Redundant phrasing 'there is something' is wordy. Use consistent present tense constructions: 'when something is important' and 'when we need to find something out.' This improves clarity and conciseness.

× Other than that, if we are reading casually, there is no need to read it very carefully.

✓ Otherwise, if we are reading casually, there is no need to read it very carefully.

'Other than that' is conversationally acceptable but 'Otherwise' is more concise. Sentence is grammatically correct; minor stylistic change improves flow. Ensure pronoun 'it' clearly refers to the text.

× Just understand the overview.

✓ Just understand the overview.

Short imperative sentence is acceptable. No grammatical correction needed.

× That's enough.

✓ That's enough.

This is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× Skimming or scanning through the reading is important when there is a time based exam or if we are having an urgency but we have to read it before we go.

✓ Skimming or scanning is important during a timed exam or when we are in a hurry and have to read something before we go.

Errors: 'time based exam' should be 'timed exam'; 'having an urgency' is unnatural — use 'in a hurry'; 'skimming or scanning through the reading' is wordy — 'skimming or scanning' suffices. Also clarify 'read it' to 'read something.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations like 'timed exam' and 'in a hurry.'

× Other than that, I prefer reading in detail to better understand.

✓ Otherwise, I prefer reading in detail to gain a better understanding.

'Other than that' can be replaced with 'Otherwise' for concision. 'Prefer reading in detail to better understand' is understandable but 'to gain a better understanding' is clearer and more natural. Maintain present tense consistency.