Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like reading, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., types of books or how often you read now). Avoid filler words like “uh” and irrelevant facts (e.g., being a topper) unless they directly support your point.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I usually read fiction and personal development books, and I try to finish about 10–12 books a year because reading helps me relax and learn new ideas.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence with two specific reasons and use linking words for coherence. Replace vague phrasing and correct grammar (e.g., "because it's physical and you can touch it"). Mention a brief contrast to screens with a linking phrase like "however".

例: I prefer reading on paper because it feels tangible and I find it easier to remember information when I hold a book. However, I sometimes use a screen for articles because it’s more convenient when I’m traveling.

提案: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and two contrasting specific examples. Use linking words such as "for example" and "on the other hand," and correct tense and phrasing. Specify what "carefully" means (e.g., taking notes, rereading) to show depth.

例: I need to read carefully when the material is complex or important, for example, when studying psychology or self-help books where I take notes and underline key ideas. On the other hand, I skim casual content like news headlines or light blog posts when I only need the main point.

提案: Give a clear preference or say you use both depending on purpose, then provide specific reasons and a linking phrase. Avoid fillers and improve grammatical accuracy. Explain situations when each method is useful.

例: I usually use both methods depending on my goal: I scan articles to find relevant information quickly, but I read in detail when I need to understand the structure, arguments, or nuances of a text, for example when preparing for exams or writing an essay.

× Yes, I like reading. So, uh, I read uh many books in uh, in a year when I was a child, uh, I was a Topper in my class. Yes, I like to read.

✓ Yes, I like reading. When I was a child, I read many books in a year, and I was the topper in my class.

The original mixes tenses and has awkward word order. 'So' and filler words removed for clarity. Use simple past 'read' for past actions. 'Topper' should be preceded by the definite article 'the'. Combine clauses with 'and' to form a clear sentence.

× I prefer to read on paper 'cause it's a physical and it's a like you can't touch it and feel it. So I don't like to read on a screen because it's when you see on the screen too much for a constant long time, it harms your day.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because it is physical and you can touch and feel it. I do not like reading on a screen because looking at a screen for a long time harms your eyes and your day.

Replace informal ' 'cause' with 'because'. Remove redundant phrases 'it's a like' and correct pronoun usage. Use gerund 'reading' for general preference. 'See on the screen too much for a constant long time' is ungrammatical; replace with 'looking at a screen for a long time'. Specify 'harms your eyes' for clarity.

× When there was a interesting topic in a book like a psychology or self help book, I mostly think to need read carefully and when there is not like a most important topic so I prefer to not carefully read that topic.

✓ When there is an interesting topic in a book, such as psychology or self-help, I think I need to read it carefully. If a topic is not important, I prefer not to read it carefully.

Use present tense 'is' for general statements. 'a interesting' should be 'an interesting' (article correction). 'There was' is unnecessary; use subject 'an interesting topic'. Change 'think to need read' to 'think I need to read'. Avoid double negatives and misplaced adverbs: 'not to read carefully' becomes 'prefer not to read it carefully'.

× Scanning is like, you can save your time by scanning, uh, but uh, if you read it detailed, so you know about that, uh, how it was written and what is it written in that thing.

✓ Scanning can save you time, but if you read something in detail, you understand how it was written and what it contains.

Avoid repetition of 'scanning'. Use modal 'can' for ability. 'Read it detailed' is incorrect; use 'read in detail' or 'read something in detail'. 'What is it written in that thing' is ungrammatical; replace with 'what it contains'. Maintain consistent verb tense and clear object references.