Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate with grammar and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details with linking words. Use correct verb forms (e.g., 'I like reading') and precise categories (e.g., 'fiction, novels, and comics'). Avoid vague phrases like 'some kind of' and unclear clauses like 'to feel.'

例: I enjoy reading. I mainly read contemporary fiction and novels, and sometimes graphic novels or comics. For example, I recently finished a contemporary novel about family relationships, which I found very engaging. However, I haven’t had much time to read lately because of work.

提案: Clarify preference with correct vocabulary and coherent reasons. Use one clear topic sentence stating preference, then give a linked reason and a contrasting concession. Replace unclear words ('live on a paper', 'leave on the screen') with 'read on paper' and 'read on a screen.' Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

例: I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen because print feels easier on my eyes and I remember information better. However, I often read on a screen now because I am busy and many books are digital. Still, I find reading lengthy texts on a screen less comfortable.

提案: Provide a clear distinction with specific examples and correct grammar. Begin with a direct answer (when you need careful reading), then explain why with an example, and finally mention when skimming is acceptable. Avoid hesitation and vague pronouns; say 'when someone gives me important documents' instead of 'someone's give me a resp.'

例: I need to read carefully when I receive important documents, such as legal papers or work instructions, because details matter and mistakes can cause problems. In contrast, I skim news articles or emails when I only need the main idea and not every detail.

提案: State your preference clearly and support it with reasons and a brief example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make the explanation coherent. Replace awkward phrases ('fit like on the surface level') with 'useful for getting a quick overview' and reduce repetition.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand complex ideas and remember important points. For example, when I study for exams I read paragraphs carefully and take notes, whereas scanning is useful only when I need a quick overview of an article.

× I like to reading.

✓ I like reading.

The verb 'like' can be followed by either the infinitive ('to read') or the gerund ('reading'). 'To reading' is ungrammatical because 'to' with a verb requires the base form. Use 'I like reading' for natural phrasing.

× I like to read kind of fictional and novels and some kind of cartoon.

✓ I like to read fiction, novels, and some comics.

The phrase 'kind of' is used incorrectly and 'fictional' should be the noun 'fiction'. 'Cartoon' as a noun for reading is unnatural; 'comics' or 'graphic novels' fits. Also use commas to list items. This corrects word choice and noun forms.

× I often read when I have time or plenty of time to feel, but recently I didn't get around to reading that much.

✓ I often read when I have time, but recently I haven't gotten around to reading much.

The sentence mixes present habitual ('I often read') with a past simple ('I didn't get around') which conflicts with 'recently'. Use present perfect ('haven't gotten') to show a recent change affecting the present. Also remove redundant 'plenty of time to feel'.

× To be honest I prefer to live on a paper to on a screen, but nowadays over as a busy busy by the some kind of activities and stuff.

✓ To be honest, I prefer paper to a screen, but nowadays I'm too busy with various activities.

Use 'prefer X to Y' (no 'to live on'). 'On a paper' is incorrect; use 'paper' or 'printed books'. 'Too busy with' is the correct prepositional phrase. Remove filler words like 'over as a busy busy by the some kind of activities and stuff.'

× So now I just leave on the screen, but on the surface level is not useful.

✓ So now I just read on a screen, but at a superficial level it's not very useful.

'Leave on the screen' is wrong; likely 'read on a screen'. Use 'at a superficial level' or 'on the surface' and include a subject for 'is not useful' (it's not very useful). Adjust word order and articles.

× Yeah, the time for when I need to read carefully is like, uh, that how to say that one someone's give me a resp responsibilities or yeah, that's it.

✓ I need to read carefully when someone gives me responsibilities or important instructions.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Rephrase to a clear clause: 'when someone gives me responsibilities or important instructions.' Remove fillers and correct word forms ('resp responsibilities' -> 'responsibilities').

× But on the surface level, reading on the screen, uh, not good.

✓ But superficial reading on a screen is not good.

The fragment lacks a verb. Combine into a noun phrase 'superficial reading on a screen is not good' or 'reading on a screen at a surface level is not good.' This corrects prepositional phrasing and supplies the missing verb.

× Yes, I definitely prefer detailed reading because scanning is fit like, uh, on the surface level and we don't, we don't put a lot concentrating on that.

✓ Yes, I definitely prefer detailed reading because scanning is more superficial and we don't concentrate much on it.

'Fit like' is incorrect; use 'more superficial'. 'Put a lot concentrating' is ungrammatical—use 'concentrate much' or 'pay much attention'. This corrects word choice and adverb usage.

× So I prefer detailed reading rather than scanning.

✓ So I prefer detailed reading to scanning.

Both 'prefer X to Y' and 'prefer X rather than Y' can be used, but 'prefer X to Y' is more concise here. No major grammar error, but 'to' is the standard form after 'prefer'.