Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct common errors (e.g., "not on a daily basis," "manga, which is like a magazine with pictures"), and add one specific detail about why you enjoy it. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so".

例: Yes, I enjoy reading, though not on a daily basis. I usually read manga because it has engaging stories and illustrations that capture my interest, so it’s an easy way for me to relax and be entertained.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and improve grammar and cohesion. Replace informal phrases (e.g., "up screen," "gonna") and avoid trailing off. Use linking words like "because" and "so." Keep answer within 2–4 sentences and provide one clear specific reason.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because I can scroll through content easily and it doesn’t take up physical space. Also, digital articles are easier to store and search, so I can find information quickly when I need it.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question. Improve grammar (e.g., "when I read articles or news, I read carefully") and add a contrasting example of when you don't need to read carefully. Use linking words like "because" and "but."

例: I read articles and news carefully when the information could be important or useful later because I want to remember key details. However, I skim casual posts or entertainment pieces when I’m just browsing and don’t need to remember specifics.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and fix grammar (e.g., "important emails" "to make sure no information is missing"). End the sentence properly and add a brief reason with linking words like "because" or "so."

例: I prefer detailed reading, especially for important or official emails, because I need to confirm facts and avoid missing any information. For casual messages I usually scan the content to get the main idea quickly.

× Yes, but not in a daily basis.

✓ Yes, but not on a daily basis.

The idiomatic preposition for habitual frequency is 'on a daily basis'; using 'in' is incorrect. Also 'a daily basis' requires the article 'a'. Use 'on a daily basis' or 'daily'.

× And what I usually read is a manga with it's kind of a magazine but with a pictures 'cause it really pick my interest and it really gives me the entertainment that I really want.

✓ What I usually read is a manga, which is a kind of magazine with pictures, because it really piques my interest and gives me the entertainment I want.

'It's' is a contraction for 'it is'; the possessive should be 'its' or here better use 'which is'. 'A pictures' is incorrect plural/ article use; 'pictures' needs no 'a'. 'Pick my interest' is wrong verb; correct idiom is 'pique my interest'. Remove redundant 'really' and repeated pronouns for clarity. Also punctuation corrections helps sentence structure.

× And that would be it.

✓ That's about it.

'And that would be it' is conversational but slightly awkward; 'That's about it' is more natural and concise. This fixes sentence structure and redundancy.

× Well, I prefer to read on up screen.

✓ Well, I prefer to read on a screen.

'On up screen' is incorrect combination. Use 'on a screen' for reading on electronic devices, or 'on-screen' as a compound adjective. 'A' is required before 'screen'.

× It's because I can just scroll and it will not going to take a lot of space 'cause if you are reading in a paper after you read it, you're just gonna throw it away or put it somewhere else in your place.

✓ It's because I can just scroll, and it won't take up a lot of space, because if you read something on paper, after you read it you might throw it away or put it somewhere else, which takes up space.

Use contraction 'won't' (will not) and correct verb form 'take up' for space. 'It will not going to' is ungrammatical; choose 'won't' or 'is not going to'. Use 'read something on paper' rather than 'reading in a paper'. Avoid informal 'gonna'. Clarify relative clause 'which takes up space.'

× That would really take some space and.

✓ That really takes up a lot of space.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends with 'and.' Replace with a complete clause. Use present simple 'takes up' for general fact and 'a lot of space' for natural phrasing.

× Every article or news that I am reading, I make sure that I'm reading it carefully so that I will be able to understand it and it would be easier for me to recall if that is a necessary or a crucial information that I might use for a future reference.

✓ For every article or news item I read, I make sure I read it carefully so I can understand it, and it will be easier to recall if the information is necessary or crucial for future reference.

Use 'news item' instead of 'news' with article; 'Every article or news' is awkward. Avoid continuous 'I am reading' when stating a habitual action—use present simple 'I read'. Use consistent tense: 'so I can understand' and 'it will be easier to recall'. 'A necessary or a crucial information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable; remove 'a' and use 'necessary or crucial information'. 'For future reference' is idiomatic, not 'for a future reference.'

× I prefer detailed reading, especially if it is a important emails or if official emails that I need to confirm or relate to my supervisor so that we could make sure that there will be no information missing out and to make sure that everything.

✓ I prefer detailed reading, especially for important or official emails that I need to confirm or forward to my supervisor, so we can make sure no information is missing and that everything is correct.

Use 'an important email' or 'important emails' plural; original mixed singular/plural and wrong article. 'If official emails that' is ungrammatical—use 'or' and restructure. 'Relate to my supervisor' is unclear; likely 'forward to' or 'send to'. 'Could' is past/modal mismatch; use 'can' for general ability. 'There will be no information missing out' is awkward—use 'no information is missing'. Complete the sentence with 'that everything is correct.'